Night
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Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello Zinnia48
You don't need any suggestions from me. I totally agre when you said-
spinning me into slumber
where dreams embrace me
Dark lulls me deeper into sleep
Gert
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2014
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Hello Zinnia48
You don't need any suggestions from me. I totally agre when you said-
spinning me into slumber
where dreams embrace me
Dark lulls me deeper into sleep
Gert
Comment Written 10-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2014
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Thanks Gert! I appreciate your time and comments! Caroline
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You are so welcome Caroline
Gert
Comment from Joan E.
I admired your alliteration of "d's, s's and n's" that add intensity to your description. Your "Oragami" metaphor with "Each crease" is very visual and the artwork you selected helped to establish the mood of your free verse. Cheers- Joan
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2014
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I admired your alliteration of "d's, s's and n's" that add intensity to your description. Your "Oragami" metaphor with "Each crease" is very visual and the artwork you selected helped to establish the mood of your free verse. Cheers- Joan
Comment Written 06-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2014
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Thanks, Joan! caroline
Comment from amanda98653
WOW!
This poem is the epitome of flawlessness!!
LOVE the personification:
"Dusk cradles me
I drift toward Night
folding into itself"-- so peaceful and beautiful
"Nocturnal nest holds us" -- Love the alliteration too!
Definitely exceptional!!
Hugs
Amanda
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2014
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WOW!
This poem is the epitome of flawlessness!!
LOVE the personification:
"Dusk cradles me
I drift toward Night
folding into itself"-- so peaceful and beautiful
"Nocturnal nest holds us" -- Love the alliteration too!
Definitely exceptional!!
Hugs
Amanda
Comment Written 23-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2014
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Amanda--How terrific to have you drop by and review this poem. I appresciate your presence, the lovely review, and stars! Caroline
Comment from Lastamen
This is simply outstanding. There is a delicate ease and perfect balance of depicted imagery and rhetoric. The flow is paced with a cadence that makes for an easy read. The dark sacred NIGHT has often been the source of great creativity and this excellent poetry can be added to that list. Well done.
Till the last amen
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2014
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This is simply outstanding. There is a delicate ease and perfect balance of depicted imagery and rhetoric. The flow is paced with a cadence that makes for an easy read. The dark sacred NIGHT has often been the source of great creativity and this excellent poetry can be added to that list. Well done.
Till the last amen
Comment Written 21-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2014
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Thank you so much for the stars, but mostly for the specific comments oabout flow and cadence and image. thanks again. Caroline
Comment from sim.singh28
This poem put my in a trance. There was very strong imagery throughout the piece. There was also personification which flowed smoothly. At first it was confusing what you were talking about but when i read it in depth i understood. Overall it was refreshing and very different. A unique piece in deed. I loved reading it!
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reply by the author on 21-Aug-2014
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This poem put my in a trance. There was very strong imagery throughout the piece. There was also personification which flowed smoothly. At first it was confusing what you were talking about but when i read it in depth i understood. Overall it was refreshing and very different. A unique piece in deed. I loved reading it!
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 21-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2014
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Thanks for taking the time to read and comment,sim singh Caroline
Comment from OLA THOMAS
I like your choice of poetic phrases and imagery to achieve this fine poem. Your personification muse give this poem a natural beauty with such words as furrows, spinning, sprouting. I like the metaphors employed too.
ola thomas
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2014
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I like your choice of poetic phrases and imagery to achieve this fine poem. Your personification muse give this poem a natural beauty with such words as furrows, spinning, sprouting. I like the metaphors employed too.
ola thomas
Comment Written 21-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2014
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thank you so much for your specific comments! Caroline
Comment from deepwater
Dark lulls me deeper into sleep
The moon and I breathe together
A nocturnal nest holds us
until dawn peels back night
crease by crease. nice artwork and poem you have here
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2014
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Dark lulls me deeper into sleep
The moon and I breathe together
A nocturnal nest holds us
until dawn peels back night
crease by crease. nice artwork and poem you have here
Comment Written 21-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2014
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Thanks, Deepwater! Caroline
Comment from MM lives on :)
Zinnia41...this was such a wonderfully written poem. From color scheme to imagery it all ties in so well..excellent work and thanks for sharing
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2014
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Zinnia41...this was such a wonderfully written poem. From color scheme to imagery it all ties in so well..excellent work and thanks for sharing
Comment Written 21-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2014
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Thanks, Christopher! Caroline
Comment from RGstar
I read this twice as I marveled in the way you used the action of origami and the elements with words such as '' crease''
''Each crease sealing in daylight''
Very good.
This is very well written indeed...better than first meets the eye. A very clever piece of writing.
My sixes are limited so you'll just miss out but I am rather impressed at this little write.
Well done,
RGstar
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2014
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I read this twice as I marveled in the way you used the action of origami and the elements with words such as '' crease''
''Each crease sealing in daylight''
Very good.
This is very well written indeed...better than first meets the eye. A very clever piece of writing.
My sixes are limited so you'll just miss out but I am rather impressed at this little write.
Well done,
RGstar
Comment Written 21-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2014
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Thank you, RGstar! Caroline
Comment from marion
Hi there, Zinnis48
Not being a poet, I can't offer suggestion nor feedback, but I can say this has a peaceful/urethral feel about it. I love the use of alliteration and the presentation is stunning.
Marion.
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2014
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Hi there, Zinnis48
Not being a poet, I can't offer suggestion nor feedback, but I can say this has a peaceful/urethral feel about it. I love the use of alliteration and the presentation is stunning.
Marion.
Comment Written 21-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2014
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Thankyou so much for your kind words, Marion! Caroline
