A Prisoner Named Thomas
I believe...39 total reviews
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, lancellot, you did an excellent job writing this story about the young man who was able to start a new life when given the chance to live in another town and was able to break free of the gang. congrats on the win.
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this is very well written, lancellot, you did an excellent job writing this story about the young man who was able to start a new life when given the chance to live in another town and was able to break free of the gang. congrats on the win.
Comment Written 20-Aug-2014
Comment from kiwijenny
That's one Lord....this gave me chills and tears.......
Typo Nawl .....Naw
I love the gleams in his eye...the eye tells it all...I new beginning...
Great job...well deserving of the win...authentic strong and real writing ..powerful
God bless
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That's one Lord....this gave me chills and tears.......
Typo Nawl .....Naw
I love the gleams in his eye...the eye tells it all...I new beginning...
Great job...well deserving of the win...authentic strong and real writing ..powerful
God bless
Comment Written 20-Aug-2014
Comment from faragon
Very well written story. It held my interest to the end. The dialogue was well placed and seemed natural. It is a good inspirational story & I have to wonder if it was written from experience?
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Very well written story. It held my interest to the end. The dialogue was well placed and seemed natural. It is a good inspirational story & I have to wonder if it was written from experience?
Comment Written 20-Aug-2014
Comment from Patrick G Cox
Hi lancellot,
The six is both for the story and the hope that Thomas will make it. Well done to you for making the extra effort and helping at least one kid make the change.
Patrick
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Hi lancellot,
The six is both for the story and the hope that Thomas will make it. Well done to you for making the extra effort and helping at least one kid make the change.
Patrick
Comment Written 20-Aug-2014
Comment from Titan Black
This is a great write. I like the topic, that was bought to the forefront. For, there are too many children who are forgotten about, and put into the system, by design. Nevertheless, the writer was very articulate and cunning about giving the youth hope. And i like that. Keep writing.
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This is a great write. I like the topic, that was bought to the forefront. For, there are too many children who are forgotten about, and put into the system, by design. Nevertheless, the writer was very articulate and cunning about giving the youth hope. And i like that. Keep writing.
Comment Written 19-Aug-2014
Comment from Muffins
A powerful scene with hard ball back and forth dialogue molded inside a theme about second chances and better opportunities. It's done without the tone of nagging or judging.
Changing anything in your life is difficult, but not impossible. As the counsel said, brilliantly and plainly,"If you go back to your old neighborhood and gang, it's because you chose to. For the rest of your life don't you ever blame anyone, if you come back here."
Wonderful work. I'm not surprised it won.
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A powerful scene with hard ball back and forth dialogue molded inside a theme about second chances and better opportunities. It's done without the tone of nagging or judging.
Changing anything in your life is difficult, but not impossible. As the counsel said, brilliantly and plainly,"If you go back to your old neighborhood and gang, it's because you chose to. For the rest of your life don't you ever blame anyone, if you come back here."
Wonderful work. I'm not surprised it won.
Comment Written 19-Aug-2014
Comment from dennis0530
I would not say yet if this is a success story. That remains to be seen later. But I proudly say and admit it is uplifting, inspiring, and promising.
Because this is Biographical Non-Fiction, I have full admiration for Mr. Franks. Would it be wishful thinking if I wish and pray may his tribe increase? We not only deserve but more importantly, need the likes of him. He has dealt with Thomas in a rough but caring way, with heart and compassion and blunt practicality.
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I would not say yet if this is a success story. That remains to be seen later. But I proudly say and admit it is uplifting, inspiring, and promising.
Because this is Biographical Non-Fiction, I have full admiration for Mr. Franks. Would it be wishful thinking if I wish and pray may his tribe increase? We not only deserve but more importantly, need the likes of him. He has dealt with Thomas in a rough but caring way, with heart and compassion and blunt practicality.
Comment Written 19-Aug-2014
Comment from mikemagine
Love it! So inspiring! Start to finish, I was IN! I watched Mr. Franks dole out a kind of tough love - so necessary at times - to an underdog. Would that there were countless more "Mr. Franks" throughout the world!! Be VERY proud of this!
Mike
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Love it! So inspiring! Start to finish, I was IN! I watched Mr. Franks dole out a kind of tough love - so necessary at times - to an underdog. Would that there were countless more "Mr. Franks" throughout the world!! Be VERY proud of this!
Mike
Comment Written 19-Aug-2014
Comment from flamingstar
It's the little victories that mean the most and helps us remember to look for the light in everyone. I see so many of them and wonder how their lives might have been different if someone, somewhere had given them a choice and a real chance. I will pray for him.
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It's the little victories that mean the most and helps us remember to look for the light in everyone. I see so many of them and wonder how their lives might have been different if someone, somewhere had given them a choice and a real chance. I will pray for him.
Comment Written 19-Aug-2014
Comment from desire333
This was such a pleasure to read. In this world you have so many people making the wrong choices, and often times, need help, just someone who believes in them, or at least show that they care if they make it or not. Thank you for sharing and congratulation's!
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This was such a pleasure to read. In this world you have so many people making the wrong choices, and often times, need help, just someone who believes in them, or at least show that they care if they make it or not. Thank you for sharing and congratulation's!
Comment Written 19-Aug-2014
