The Journey
A person's journey in life61 total reviews
Comment from Aiona
I enjoyed this poem. It tells a story and in the acrostic, it has an inherent story line, including ordinary life with hopes, inciting incident (Inspiration, heart forms desire), turning points (Next sojourn deviates unexpected), black moment (Optimism begins to fade), final battle (questioning reasons why), and resolution (Mystery wraps each soul). There is a rhythm to each line, which gives it a structure. So although I prefer rhyming poems because of their song-like meter, this one feels like a song too. A song about life's journey, which I believe was your intent.
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2014
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I enjoyed this poem. It tells a story and in the acrostic, it has an inherent story line, including ordinary life with hopes, inciting incident (Inspiration, heart forms desire), turning points (Next sojourn deviates unexpected), black moment (Optimism begins to fade), final battle (questioning reasons why), and resolution (Mystery wraps each soul). There is a rhythm to each line, which gives it a structure. So although I prefer rhyming poems because of their song-like meter, this one feels like a song too. A song about life's journey, which I believe was your intent.
Comment Written 22-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2014
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Thank you for your review and your comments. I do like to see how someone reads my poems. RJ
Comment from madhatter1977
I am so sorry for the reason behind the poem. The acrostic is excellent and the interweaved lines. I think we all live in a maze and amazement that we are on this planet Earth at all. You capture many feelings and thoughts in this poem that others share (the conundrum) and I wish I had a six left but have used them all. Best wishes, great poem, Hatter :)
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2014
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I am so sorry for the reason behind the poem. The acrostic is excellent and the interweaved lines. I think we all live in a maze and amazement that we are on this planet Earth at all. You capture many feelings and thoughts in this poem that others share (the conundrum) and I wish I had a six left but have used them all. Best wishes, great poem, Hatter :)
Comment Written 21-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2014
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Thank you for your review and nice comments. Thanks for the almost six star. RJ
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It really deserved a six. Best acrostic I have seen in some time. Is it a contest entry? Best wishes, Hatter
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Thank you so much for enjoying my poem. It was not a contest entry, just a poem that i was compelled to share. RJ
Comment from RoseDake11
Oh My! "Living in a Conundrum" Is that not just the perfect description. I have no words to say bad about your work. I can feel and relate to ever word and emotion displayed. Thank you for sharing this.
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2014
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Oh My! "Living in a Conundrum" Is that not just the perfect description. I have no words to say bad about your work. I can feel and relate to ever word and emotion displayed. Thank you for sharing this.
Comment Written 21-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2014
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Thank you for your review and kind words. RJ
Comment from Lastamen
A challenging form of poetry that the author has handled with a delicate ease. The ebb and flow of this piece makes for a particular good read as the subject matter is haunting and thought provoking. Well done.
Till the last amen
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2014
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A challenging form of poetry that the author has handled with a delicate ease. The ebb and flow of this piece makes for a particular good read as the subject matter is haunting and thought provoking. Well done.
Till the last amen
Comment Written 21-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2014
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Thank you for your review and kind words. RJ
Comment from thedreampeddler
I would use some complicated words to describe this poem, but you have already used them all.
I will admit that I felt lost half of the time, but that was the cool part.
Awesome job.
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2014
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I would use some complicated words to describe this poem, but you have already used them all.
I will admit that I felt lost half of the time, but that was the cool part.
Awesome job.
Comment Written 21-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2014
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Thank you for your review and kind words. RJ
Comment from kintesiegel
this poem is epic in its expectation and you succeed in capturing the phases of human existence and beyond. Very well done and profound ideas come from this poem. thank you
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2014
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this poem is epic in its expectation and you succeed in capturing the phases of human existence and beyond. Very well done and profound ideas come from this poem. thank you
Comment Written 21-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2014
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Thank you for your review and kind words. RJ
Comment from James Dooney
I love the acrostic work you have given us here ! Its very creative indeed and very well structured ! You get full marks from me !
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2014
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I love the acrostic work you have given us here ! Its very creative indeed and very well structured ! You get full marks from me !
Comment Written 21-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2014
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Thank you for your review and kind words, and for the six star. RJ
Comment from lynglyng
Good word usage and flow. I liked the truth that the message of the poem gave. Very well written. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2014
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Good word usage and flow. I liked the truth that the message of the poem gave. Very well written. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 21-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2014
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Thank you for your review and kind words. RJ
Comment from Goodauthor
This is the Journey of Life which we all must travel from the moment we take our first breath. It is a set journey with a predestined purpose which we must accomplish before the journey's end. Good work.
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2014
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This is the Journey of Life which we all must travel from the moment we take our first breath. It is a set journey with a predestined purpose which we must accomplish before the journey's end. Good work.
Comment Written 21-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2014
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Thank you for your review and kind words. RJ
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You're welcome.
Comment from adewpearl
a solid acrostic for Living In A Conundrum
good alliteration in possibilities passions and in paradise personal and composed courageous and quandary questioning
a thoughtful look at death and the emotions it elicits when we lose a loved one
Brooke
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2014
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a solid acrostic for Living In A Conundrum
good alliteration in possibilities passions and in paradise personal and composed courageous and quandary questioning
a thoughtful look at death and the emotions it elicits when we lose a loved one
Brooke
Comment Written 21-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2014
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Thank you for your review and kind words. RJ
