You Never Know
rhyming quatrains in 8/6/8/6146 total reviews
Comment from michaelcahill
You never know when falling rocks
might turn to stepping stones --
I don't usually copy and paste, but that is such a great original line that I had to highlight it! That is a philosophy right there to live by. How very true. In fact the whole message here is true. Never close your eyes or the greatest thing will pass you by. Yep. mikey
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2014
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You never know when falling rocks
might turn to stepping stones --
I don't usually copy and paste, but that is such a great original line that I had to highlight it! That is a philosophy right there to live by. How very true. In fact the whole message here is true. Never close your eyes or the greatest thing will pass you by. Yep. mikey
Comment Written 16-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2014
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Thanks so very much, Mikey - it's always great to know what images and phrases worked the best, and lots of people have mentioned that same line, so I'm super pleased :-) Brooke
Comment from Warren Rodgers
Hi Brooke,
Wonderful contemplative poem in abab rhymes and 8/6 verse!
I love the passage "you never know when falling rocks might turn to stepping stones..." how true! In my mind I related your poem to the sad news about Robin Williams. If only he would have had the attitude your poem delivers he may still be with us. terrific message I enjoyed reading very much!
All the best,
Rodger
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2014
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Hi Brooke,
Wonderful contemplative poem in abab rhymes and 8/6 verse!
I love the passage "you never know when falling rocks might turn to stepping stones..." how true! In my mind I related your poem to the sad news about Robin Williams. If only he would have had the attitude your poem delivers he may still be with us. terrific message I enjoyed reading very much!
All the best,
Rodger
Comment Written 15-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2014
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Thank you, Rodger, for your lovely and generous response to this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from Treischel
Cute and sweet poem that gushes with the happiness of simple joys, like playing with a shopping bag. Well rhymed and neutered, with nice touches of alliteration.
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2014
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Cute and sweet poem that gushes with the happiness of simple joys, like playing with a shopping bag. Well rhymed and neutered, with nice touches of alliteration.
Comment Written 15-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2014
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Treischel, thanks so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Ridley Williams
Hi Brooke,
I loved your insightful thoughts of optimism in this well metered write. It's a great example of how we need to keep our options open to all the amazing opportunities that life affords.
I appreciated the third stanza with the idea, that the hurdles we all face, may turn out to be a blessing in disguise.
Our lives are truly what we make them, while our preconceived perceptions become our cages.
Nice job with this thoughtful poem... a pleasure to absorb... best wishes, Bill
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2014
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Hi Brooke,
I loved your insightful thoughts of optimism in this well metered write. It's a great example of how we need to keep our options open to all the amazing opportunities that life affords.
I appreciated the third stanza with the idea, that the hurdles we all face, may turn out to be a blessing in disguise.
Our lives are truly what we make them, while our preconceived perceptions become our cages.
Nice job with this thoughtful poem... a pleasure to absorb... best wishes, Bill
Comment Written 15-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2014
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Bill, thank you so very much :-) Brooke
Comment from Sasha
Too often, we don't open our eyes and see the so many 'Never Knows' all around us. Children are so lucky, they see it all and as we grow, our sight seems to limit our view. I love the repetition in this one. Very, very nice work and another precious photo of Sawyer.
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2014
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Too often, we don't open our eyes and see the so many 'Never Knows' all around us. Children are so lucky, they see it all and as we grow, our sight seems to limit our view. I love the repetition in this one. Very, very nice work and another precious photo of Sawyer.
Comment Written 15-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2014
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thanks so much, Valerie :-) Brooke
Comment from Lulube
Back to back winners here Brooke. Great messages in your poems that you write so well for us kids lol. (first review cut off) (incase you got it)
Cute picture that goes so well with the last verse. But the repeating words You never know, is the real beauty of this poem for inspiration to go find out.
good work
lulube
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2014
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Back to back winners here Brooke. Great messages in your poems that you write so well for us kids lol. (first review cut off) (incase you got it)
Cute picture that goes so well with the last verse. But the repeating words You never know, is the real beauty of this poem for inspiration to go find out.
good work
lulube
Comment Written 15-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2014
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Thanks so much, Lulube, for your generous and gracious response to my poetry :-) Brooke
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welcome Brooke
lulube
Comment from simplyteresa
I've been away from FS too long, I truly miss poetry. I always find a smile within them and of course totally enjoy the photos.
Teresa
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2014
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I've been away from FS too long, I truly miss poetry. I always find a smile within them and of course totally enjoy the photos.
Teresa
Comment Written 15-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2014
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Teresa, it is so good to see you. Thanks so much for your generous sixth star :-) Brooke
Comment from giovannimariatommaso
A wonderful happy little light-hearted poem of possibilities and potentials of the human heart that are really deep truisms; just waiting to arise, take up their mats and Follow! I didn't see any spelling or grammatical errors.
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2014
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A wonderful happy little light-hearted poem of possibilities and potentials of the human heart that are really deep truisms; just waiting to arise, take up their mats and Follow! I didn't see any spelling or grammatical errors.
Comment Written 15-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2014
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giovanni, thank you so very much :-) Brooke
Comment from James Dooney
You have done quite well here again there Brooke ! You describe these wonderful natural events so well ! Great job here !
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2014
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You have done quite well here again there Brooke ! You describe these wonderful natural events so well ! Great job here !
Comment Written 15-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2014
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James, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Smoothiecool
your chosen words allow the reader to see and feel the never knows that sometimes pass us by if we keep our eyes closed to possibilities
good enjambment in verse to allow flow
good visual to portray messages
good rhyme through verses
cheers Smoothiecool
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2014
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your chosen words allow the reader to see and feel the never knows that sometimes pass us by if we keep our eyes closed to possibilities
good enjambment in verse to allow flow
good visual to portray messages
good rhyme through verses
cheers Smoothiecool
Comment Written 15-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2014
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Smoothiecool, thank you so much for your thoughtful response to this poem :-) Brooke
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most welcome ..SC >> Faye
