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Pantoum Sonnet32 total reviews
Comment from Domino 2
I thought fairies only took children's teeth left under pillows - not the children themselves, or maybe I misunderstand, Debi.
This is either a very dark and entertaining write, or a really cute one where they just look over the baby.
Either theme is tops, and I really enjoyed the read, in excellent rhyme and meter.
Cheers, Ray
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2014
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I thought fairies only took children's teeth left under pillows - not the children themselves, or maybe I misunderstand, Debi.
This is either a very dark and entertaining write, or a really cute one where they just look over the baby.
Either theme is tops, and I really enjoyed the read, in excellent rhyme and meter.
Cheers, Ray
Comment Written 08-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2014
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Hi Ray. We have made the fairies a lot more gentle and kind in the modern day. In the old fairy tales they liked to create all sorts of mischief for humans, and kidnapping children was one of their favorites.
This is a dark story based on those old myths.
I appreciate the kind comments about the writing. Thank you so much for the encouragement.
Debi
Comment from angelface2
Ah, how sweet it is. Love this little poem of a changling, taken by the fairies. Very nicely done, W.j. Rhyming and rhythm good. Miss Sally
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2014
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Ah, how sweet it is. Love this little poem of a changling, taken by the fairies. Very nicely done, W.j. Rhyming and rhythm good. Miss Sally
Comment Written 08-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2014
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Thank you for the kind comments, Miss Sally. I am happy you liked it. Debi
Comment from MarieChinoCherie
Your pantoum sonnet effectively provides a whimsical feeling for the reader. The pantoum sonnet is an interesting format that enhances the overall feel of this literary work. Well done in both format and word choice.
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Your pantoum sonnet effectively provides a whimsical feeling for the reader. The pantoum sonnet is an interesting format that enhances the overall feel of this literary work. Well done in both format and word choice.
Comment Written 08-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2014
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Thank you for the kind comments. I appreciate the generous stars and encouragement. Debi
Comment from judiverse
Excellent ABAB rhyme and great sonnet form. Oh, bad fairies, slipping right in and snatching a precious child. They are filled with delight over what they've done. It seemed such an easy thing for them to do, and they're inviting to hear its coos and sighs and to kiss it. They left only misfortune in the child's place, it seems. Excellent repeating lines. This really comes together beautifully. judi
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2014
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Excellent ABAB rhyme and great sonnet form. Oh, bad fairies, slipping right in and snatching a precious child. They are filled with delight over what they've done. It seemed such an easy thing for them to do, and they're inviting to hear its coos and sighs and to kiss it. They left only misfortune in the child's place, it seems. Excellent repeating lines. This really comes together beautifully. judi
Comment Written 08-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2014
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Thank you for the kind comments about the writing, Judi.
Yes, those bad fairies do seem delighted with themselves.
I appreciate the encouragement. Debi
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You're very welcome. judi
Comment from royowen
A beautiful phantom sonnet, obviously about a small cherub brought into your lives, beautifully worded and wonderfully composed, it is articulate, expressively descriptive, a poetic work of art! Good sonnet rhyming, even meter! Well done, Blessings, Roy.
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2014
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A beautiful phantom sonnet, obviously about a small cherub brought into your lives, beautifully worded and wonderfully composed, it is articulate, expressively descriptive, a poetic work of art! Good sonnet rhyming, even meter! Well done, Blessings, Roy.
Comment Written 08-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2014
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Thank you so much for het encouraging comments about the writing, Roy. I appreciate!
Comment from Nosha17
A very nice poem, flows nicely and has lovely peaceful imagery and rhyming. Great complimentary picture and strong story line. Enjoyable read. Faye
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A very nice poem, flows nicely and has lovely peaceful imagery and rhyming. Great complimentary picture and strong story line. Enjoyable read. Faye
Comment Written 08-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2014
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Thank you for such a complimentary review, Faye. I am happy you enjoyed this piece, and I appreciate the encouragement. Debi
Comment from adewpearl
solid rhyming in the pattern of an English sonnet
excellent use of consistent iambic meter to create a good cadence when read aloud
strong alliterative verbs in sneaked and snatched
effective use of the pantoum's repeating lines
good alliteration in filled with frantic
lovely descriptive detail - I like the fantasy element
strong closing couplet
Brooke
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2014
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solid rhyming in the pattern of an English sonnet
excellent use of consistent iambic meter to create a good cadence when read aloud
strong alliterative verbs in sneaked and snatched
effective use of the pantoum's repeating lines
good alliteration in filled with frantic
lovely descriptive detail - I like the fantasy element
strong closing couplet
Brooke
Comment Written 08-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2014
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Thank you for the detailed review, Brooke. I learned about iambic meter and pantoum form from a great teacher. I am pleased they you enjoyed the fantasy. I am not sure why fairies are fascinating me lately, but they are. I appreciate the encouragement. Debi
Comment from sunshinesally
I fell in love with the sweet little person in white angelic snow white in pearls and frock, then the rhyme ,the flow needs no editing .Well done
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2014
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I fell in love with the sweet little person in white angelic snow white in pearls and frock, then the rhyme ,the flow needs no editing .Well done
Comment Written 08-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2014
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Thank you for the wonderful six stars. You certainly brightened my day. I am pleased that you enjoyed the poem. I appreciate the encouragement. Debi
Comment from janalma
Haha. Those dang fairies. That is an adorable pic of the
'changeling child.' Good smooth flowing poem. The combo of the two styles works well for you. I don't think I could do it. Well penned.
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2014
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Haha. Those dang fairies. That is an adorable pic of the
'changeling child.' Good smooth flowing poem. The combo of the two styles works well for you. I don't think I could do it. Well penned.
Comment Written 08-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2014
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Thank you for the generous review. I appreciate the encouragement. Debi
Comment from Drew Delaney
Lovely poem, w.J.debi. I love the repeated lines. I am so pleased to have read such a wonderful poem first thing this morning. Well written. Excellent pic to go with.
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Lovely poem, w.J.debi. I love the repeated lines. I am so pleased to have read such a wonderful poem first thing this morning. Well written. Excellent pic to go with.
Comment Written 08-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2014
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Thank you for the encouraging review, Drew. I am so happy you enjoyed reading about the naughty fairies and their conquest. Debi
