The Ride
Victory Is The Name Of The Game15 total reviews
Comment from Nosha17
You're right, what a job to ride on of those big beasts! I liked the story line, fun to learn new things about other places. Good rhyming, descriptive language and it was a most enjoyable read, good luck in the contest. Faye
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2014
You're right, what a job to ride on of those big beasts! I liked the story line, fun to learn new things about other places. Good rhyming, descriptive language and it was a most enjoyable read, good luck in the contest. Faye
Comment Written 11-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2014
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Thank you for your kindness and hope you liked it for real
Comment from emrpoems
i enjoyed yours poem very much and learnt quite a lot about the sport.
I love looking on only to appreciate the skill but not sto witness the defeat that is always possible
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2014
i enjoyed yours poem very much and learnt quite a lot about the sport.
I love looking on only to appreciate the skill but not sto witness the defeat that is always possible
Comment Written 11-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2014
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It is hard for anyone to watch the bulls toss the guys around like rag dolls. It is like in football the big guy creams the little guy except this guy weighs 2000 instead of 200 lbs.
Comment from costellsgirl33
My oldest sister loves to watch bull riding and because of her, we all watch it occasionally. I think I have something to do with that. I made her watch the movie 8 seconds years ago. Oh, how I love that movie. It's a very dangerous thing to bull ride but it's very exciting. Not sure if what could happen at the end is worth it though...
Great story to share in the form of a poem.
Good luck in the contest
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2014
My oldest sister loves to watch bull riding and because of her, we all watch it occasionally. I think I have something to do with that. I made her watch the movie 8 seconds years ago. Oh, how I love that movie. It's a very dangerous thing to bull ride but it's very exciting. Not sure if what could happen at the end is worth it though...
Great story to share in the form of a poem.
Good luck in the contest
Comment Written 11-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2014
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These guys would rather ride for eight seconds and win a lot of money than sit behind a desk or work at Burger King. They weren't always rodeo riders they had a life before they decided which way they wanted to go in life.
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Indeed they would! Have a great day!
Arnetta
Comment from Dawn Munro
Wow, the excitement in this wonderful poem is almost tangible - I hear that crowd going wild as Bushwacker is forced to surrender to the skill of the cowboy...ERY nicely done! Good luck!
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2014
Wow, the excitement in this wonderful poem is almost tangible - I hear that crowd going wild as Bushwacker is forced to surrender to the skill of the cowboy...ERY nicely done! Good luck!
Comment Written 06-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2014
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thank you so much for your kindness and stopping in
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My pleasure. :)
Comment from 9999pool
Waiting for JB Mauney, to to make his debuting ride -> drop one "to".
The story in the bull ring or rodeo is well told over and over again - the danger lurking, the fame to be achieved, the apprehansion and the fear of failures as with life.
There is no free rides or lunches in this world especially that of the PBR's career and life.
They work every inch of their muscle to summon courage to get that eight second long ride.
Beautiful and captivating story of the PBR's life and the perils and danger they will always have to face when riding an unknown and untested bull. Best wishes to the PBRs and for the contest (this contest).
Cheerio, hugs and love, GS Rithcie. :))
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2014
Waiting for JB Mauney, to to make his debuting ride -> drop one "to".
The story in the bull ring or rodeo is well told over and over again - the danger lurking, the fame to be achieved, the apprehansion and the fear of failures as with life.
There is no free rides or lunches in this world especially that of the PBR's career and life.
They work every inch of their muscle to summon courage to get that eight second long ride.
Beautiful and captivating story of the PBR's life and the perils and danger they will always have to face when riding an unknown and untested bull. Best wishes to the PBRs and for the contest (this contest).
Cheerio, hugs and love, GS Rithcie. :))
Comment Written 05-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2014
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Thanks for the heads up sure is appreciated. Hope all is going well with you these days, what have you been up to? I think things are getting a bit back on track
Comment from michaelcahill
Finally got my computer back on line. I'm way behind (as usual) I'll do some catching up by and by. Great story in a poem. Flows good and tells the tale well. Hope your feeling well. mikey
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2014
Finally got my computer back on line. I'm way behind (as usual) I'll do some catching up by and by. Great story in a poem. Flows good and tells the tale well. Hope your feeling well. mikey
Comment Written 05-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2014
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Well, it is about time he, he is just kidding, getting to feeling like my old meany self again.
Comment from ExperiencingLiphe
You might want to look at your last line. I don't know if you meant to have hide twice but otherwise this is a great poem. I don't read too many of your rodeo stuff but I really liked this :)
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2014
You might want to look at your last line. I don't know if you meant to have hide twice but otherwise this is a great poem. I don't read too many of your rodeo stuff but I really liked this :)
Comment Written 03-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2014
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thank you for your kindness and the heads up it was a typo
Comment from sunnilicious
Good story in a poem. Descriptive, informative and interesting. Good visual imagery presented. Nice work. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2014
Good story in a poem. Descriptive, informative and interesting. Good visual imagery presented. Nice work. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 03-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2014
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thank you for your great review
Comment from Tomes Johnston
This is a very apt and fitting piece of writing that the author has created with this post. It is indeed a very hard way to make a living. I am so glad that I never had to face the hardship and dangers of a life like this. Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2014
This is a very apt and fitting piece of writing that the author has created with this post. It is indeed a very hard way to make a living. I am so glad that I never had to face the hardship and dangers of a life like this. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 02-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2014
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thank you so much
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My pleasure
Comment from Lulube
Barb you are such a good story teller, now we need to buff up your poetic skills. Try to be more consistent if you are going to use rhymes. It needs a pattern. Firmly.
the first verse is not so bad, I think if you went over it a few times, saying it out loud you can come up with a few alterations.
I will help with the second verse, that seems to have grown in comparison to the first verse. Too wordy some of the lines lets make them smaller
Leaving the ring, hooves sounded like thunder
The crowd's all excited, looking on in wonder
The word spreads far from every city and town
Next rider's from afar, hear the crowds' sound
Announcer walks to the ring, everyone's outside
Waiting for JB Mauney, on his debuting ride
Nods his head to let his ride loose, outside
Rode Bushwacker to the end, his smile he can't hide
Whats say?
lulube
Better but not done yet. See if you can come up with better rhyming in the first verse. especially
lines 5 and 6
To ride the bull you need eight seconds
He rode for seven, the clown he beckons
go to the second verse
line 1
spelling correction sounded not sounder
line 5 split word every one's
line 6 omit one of "to to"
last line omit one of "hide hide"
let me know when you're done
lulube
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reply by the author on 02-Aug-2014
Barb you are such a good story teller, now we need to buff up your poetic skills. Try to be more consistent if you are going to use rhymes. It needs a pattern. Firmly.
the first verse is not so bad, I think if you went over it a few times, saying it out loud you can come up with a few alterations.
I will help with the second verse, that seems to have grown in comparison to the first verse. Too wordy some of the lines lets make them smaller
Leaving the ring, hooves sounded like thunder
The crowd's all excited, looking on in wonder
The word spreads far from every city and town
Next rider's from afar, hear the crowds' sound
Announcer walks to the ring, everyone's outside
Waiting for JB Mauney, on his debuting ride
Nods his head to let his ride loose, outside
Rode Bushwacker to the end, his smile he can't hide
Whats say?
lulube
Better but not done yet. See if you can come up with better rhyming in the first verse. especially
lines 5 and 6
To ride the bull you need eight seconds
He rode for seven, the clown he beckons
go to the second verse
line 1
spelling correction sounded not sounder
line 5 split word every one's
line 6 omit one of "to to"
last line omit one of "hide hide"
let me know when you're done
lulube
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 02-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2014
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All fixed hope you like it better and thank you for always having my back
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I sent more corrections for you just simple ones that you are missing and a rhyme for the first verse.
If you did not get it tell me or go over it again cause you will see a few of the typos.
lulube