The Clebowitz Map -- Pt 2
Please read Pt 1 first--still paying.29 total reviews
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Oh, how long for the next part? I should have stayed away longer. This is really good, Lee, the whole thing sounds so real, I can picture this. So, Dilby/Yost, has run off, but how far? I can't see him giving up that quickly. And this treasure, we don't know what it is yet, but it is obviously something big. Again, everything seems so authentic, I'm hooked and waiting for the next part. :) Sandra xsx
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2014
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Oh, how long for the next part? I should have stayed away longer. This is really good, Lee, the whole thing sounds so real, I can picture this. So, Dilby/Yost, has run off, but how far? I can't see him giving up that quickly. And this treasure, we don't know what it is yet, but it is obviously something big. Again, everything seems so authentic, I'm hooked and waiting for the next part. :) Sandra xsx
Comment Written 30-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2014
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Now it's my turn to be late. Fear not, though. I just posted the conclusion. Thank you for being both loyal, and patient. Peace, Lee
Comment from Schalk Jacobs
Well Lee, you did it again. Another super addition to the first part. Excellent continuation and lovely explanation of what the plot is all about. You don't need to change anything, my friend. Think it has the necessary merits.
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2014
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Well Lee, you did it again. Another super addition to the first part. Excellent continuation and lovely explanation of what the plot is all about. You don't need to change anything, my friend. Think it has the necessary merits.
Comment Written 30-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2014
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Thank you, Schalk. Glad you enjoyed. Peace, Lee
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, humpwhistle, a con playing a con and you have to feel sorry for both cons as they will probably be swindled by another one, maybe even chino. shouldn't it be sterling instead of serling?
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2014
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this is very well written, humpwhistle, a con playing a con and you have to feel sorry for both cons as they will probably be swindled by another one, maybe even chino. shouldn't it be sterling instead of serling?
Comment Written 30-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2014
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Thank you again. I really appreciate your time and comments. Peace, Lee
Comment from Green Lake Girl
Thank God there's a conclusion coming right up to this tangled tale of deception and intrigue. I'm sure Part III will have some sex in it, right?
My favorites: "faux limey", "bogus as Barbie's tits".
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2014
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Thank God there's a conclusion coming right up to this tangled tale of deception and intrigue. I'm sure Part III will have some sex in it, right?
My favorites: "faux limey", "bogus as Barbie's tits".
Comment Written 30-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2014
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Thanks again, Green Lake Girl. I just posted the conclusion to the story. Alas, there's precious little sex involved.
I'll make up for it in my next story. Peace, Lee
Comment from A Matter Of Words
I have to admit, I began reading this with a bit of scepticism, but within minutes of reading I was laughing so aloud, my husband had to come see what was wrong with me. Nick is a standout character. Enjoyed the thoroughly.
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2014
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I have to admit, I began reading this with a bit of scepticism, but within minutes of reading I was laughing so aloud, my husband had to come see what was wrong with me. Nick is a standout character. Enjoyed the thoroughly.
Comment Written 30-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2014
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Thank you, I'm glad you enjoyed. Peace, Lee
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You're welcome, Lee. Thanks for the laugh.
Comment from sibhus
Bogus as Barbie's titties, that is a total riot, Dude. Wow, this was really funny, and I thought the yiddish thrown in was excellent, but this from a Goyim, take it for what it's worth. The idea that Stien is interest in whether Clebowitz is acually Jewish is an interesting twist. Can't see Clebby as a Hasidic though, but wait maybe the whole earlock thing set pirate fashion, eh? This is so cool, and I liked how you got Stien wise to Dilby's scam. Good stuff, Lee, and I will be tuning in for the further adventures of Stien and Dilby.
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2014
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Bogus as Barbie's titties, that is a total riot, Dude. Wow, this was really funny, and I thought the yiddish thrown in was excellent, but this from a Goyim, take it for what it's worth. The idea that Stien is interest in whether Clebowitz is acually Jewish is an interesting twist. Can't see Clebby as a Hasidic though, but wait maybe the whole earlock thing set pirate fashion, eh? This is so cool, and I liked how you got Stien wise to Dilby's scam. Good stuff, Lee, and I will be tuning in for the further adventures of Stien and Dilby.
Comment Written 29-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2014
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Thank you, sibhus. Poor Barbi, eh? Poor Ken. Glad you enjoyed, goyim. Shalom, Lee
Comment from mfowler
You've sprung a few good switches in this one. The old guy's a con; very clever. And the ending surprises with the reveal. I think the story is evolving, but it's really the characters that are involving. Your Jewish accents are exquisite and that interplay between Stein and Nick is precious. Love the explanation of Green Tooth Lebowich...and the whole Yiddish apologist thing about pirates:'Yo ho ho, and a bottle of Manischewitz'? My favourite thing was an indulgence, I'm sure. The triple threat explanation for a repeat performance:experiencing de ja vu all over again, or had stumbled onto the set of Ground Hog Day...howled at that. Looking forward to Part 3.
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2014
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You've sprung a few good switches in this one. The old guy's a con; very clever. And the ending surprises with the reveal. I think the story is evolving, but it's really the characters that are involving. Your Jewish accents are exquisite and that interplay between Stein and Nick is precious. Love the explanation of Green Tooth Lebowich...and the whole Yiddish apologist thing about pirates:'Yo ho ho, and a bottle of Manischewitz'? My favourite thing was an indulgence, I'm sure. The triple threat explanation for a repeat performance:experiencing de ja vu all over again, or had stumbled onto the set of Ground Hog Day...howled at that. Looking forward to Part 3.
Comment Written 29-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2014
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Thank you, Mark. I'm glad you've noticed. I've been trying to improve my plotting recently--twists, and all. I appreciate the recognition. Glad you are enjoying. Shalom, Lee
Comment from JBCaine
Hump-
Yer killin' me here. Anyone who didn't know his bris from a basket would be a sad and sorry individual indeed. Although anyone who needed a basket for his bris would be... blessed, shall we say, with a great future in certain movies.
My hat is doffed in your general direction.
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reply by the author on 29-Jul-2014
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Hump-
Yer killin' me here. Anyone who didn't know his bris from a basket would be a sad and sorry individual indeed. Although anyone who needed a basket for his bris would be... blessed, shall we say, with a great future in certain movies.
My hat is doffed in your general direction.
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Comment Written 29-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2014
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Thanks, JB. I think what I wrote was doesn't know 'a bris from a brisket'. But I like your version better. That's man. Peace, Lee
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Finding myself a little weak in the culture, I am sure I have mistaken brisket for basket somehow. Getting old, I guess, but at least it gave you a grin, I hope.
Comment from Patti R.
This chapter doubles the pleasure, doubles the fun! Now I'm totally hooked. All the questions I had lined up were to do with Jewish words, thanks for the glossary at the end.
I shouldn't do this, review after the first read, but I have a lot more reading I want to do tonight (smile). Chino I need to figure out. The switcheroo with Stein is brilliant. How do you come up with this stuff? You should write for television, dammit.
Best line: spitting as if .. kosher fern
ah jeez, you crack me up
six all the way
looking forward to the next chunk
I'm craving a shot of spiced rum!
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2014
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This chapter doubles the pleasure, doubles the fun! Now I'm totally hooked. All the questions I had lined up were to do with Jewish words, thanks for the glossary at the end.
I shouldn't do this, review after the first read, but I have a lot more reading I want to do tonight (smile). Chino I need to figure out. The switcheroo with Stein is brilliant. How do you come up with this stuff? You should write for television, dammit.
Best line: spitting as if .. kosher fern
ah jeez, you crack me up
six all the way
looking forward to the next chunk
I'm craving a shot of spiced rum!
Comment Written 29-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2014
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Thank you, Patti. Yes, I'm fond of the change in Stein, too. I've been working on plot lately--man does not live by idiot characters alone--so Stein's transformation gave me a chance yo skew the plot some. 'Kosher fern' cracked me up, too. Oy vey!
Thank you for the galaxy, Patti. Much appreciated.
Shalom, Lee
Comment from Twilightspire
Everyone loves a con on a conman. Excellent work. I love how you made Stein totally goof on Yost. This story works so well on many levels.
The dialogue is amazing and the use of Yiddish words really adds punch to it. The scene setting draws us fully into the story and the plot itself was so perfect I didn't want it to end.
Great job.
-T.J.
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2014
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Everyone loves a con on a conman. Excellent work. I love how you made Stein totally goof on Yost. This story works so well on many levels.
The dialogue is amazing and the use of Yiddish words really adds punch to it. The scene setting draws us fully into the story and the plot itself was so perfect I didn't want it to end.
Great job.
-T.J.
Comment Written 29-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2014
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Thanks so much, T.J. I'm delighted you are enjoying the story. Peace, Lee
