Breezes part 2
Wind beneath my wings.81 total reviews
Comment from Patrick G Cox
Hi royowen,
A very nice play on the 'breath of God' theme. The wind blows where it will, and the seas flow as they please, but God commands the waters and the winds - and all of Creation - within the Laws of Physics. I've never understood his reason for binding himself to those!
Patrick
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2014
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Hi royowen,
A very nice play on the 'breath of God' theme. The wind blows where it will, and the seas flow as they please, but God commands the waters and the winds - and all of Creation - within the Laws of Physics. I've never understood his reason for binding himself to those!
Patrick
Comment Written 31-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2014
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It's pretty hard not to be bound, to that which you love, the umbilical cord is uncut! God is love, understand it or not, that is a choice, man only discovers, it is already there! Thank you Alan for your valued patronage my friend, it is appreciated! Blessings, Roy.
Comment from Genya
Beautiful poem which also works to be a beautiful song. A strong chorus which brings it together and re-enforces the message. Very powerful piece of work with excellent rhythm and pace. Beautiful artwork which sits perfectly with this poem. Loved the lines are you friend or foe, will you howl or will you gently blow. Questions we may never know the answers to, but something to ponder over. Loved the last verse. Genya
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2014
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Beautiful poem which also works to be a beautiful song. A strong chorus which brings it together and re-enforces the message. Very powerful piece of work with excellent rhythm and pace. Beautiful artwork which sits perfectly with this poem. Loved the lines are you friend or foe, will you howl or will you gently blow. Questions we may never know the answers to, but something to ponder over. Loved the last verse. Genya
Comment Written 31-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2014
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Thank you Genya for the wonderful comments and review, blessings, Roy.
Comment from mfowler
Lovely addition to Part 1, Roy. Here, you metaphorically explore the mysteries of God through asking the sort of questions a wide-eyed child might ask in seeking understanding of the world about: O breath of wind you're like the sea,
who keeps it filled, what makes it be?
And then, in a juxtaposition of roles, you swing the wind from west to eats (just borrowing your words) and offer the answers in one mighty revelation:But only God can craft a rose,
and only HE knows where wind goes.
You finish with a plea to the source of all to be with you through it all. This is rounded sweetly with areturn to natural imagery which has underpinned both parts of the song:please dwell with me, forever stay,
In sun or storm, in night and day!
I agree with one of the other writers who tweaked your memory of being amuso. You need to put this to music and perform it. Church sounds like the perfect place.
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2014
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Lovely addition to Part 1, Roy. Here, you metaphorically explore the mysteries of God through asking the sort of questions a wide-eyed child might ask in seeking understanding of the world about: O breath of wind you're like the sea,
who keeps it filled, what makes it be?
And then, in a juxtaposition of roles, you swing the wind from west to eats (just borrowing your words) and offer the answers in one mighty revelation:But only God can craft a rose,
and only HE knows where wind goes.
You finish with a plea to the source of all to be with you through it all. This is rounded sweetly with areturn to natural imagery which has underpinned both parts of the song:please dwell with me, forever stay,
In sun or storm, in night and day!
I agree with one of the other writers who tweaked your memory of being amuso. You need to put this to music and perform it. Church sounds like the perfect place.
Comment Written 31-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2014
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Thank you Mark, for this really comprehensive and uplifting review, I appreciate your in depth analysis! After I wrote, I stepped back and what appeared to be simple was indeed complex and enigmatic, even as the author, I realised this is why I believe! Blessings, Roy.
Comment from kiwisteveh
This is a powerful piece which functions well in its intended role as a song. Both rhyme and rhythm work well to make this happen with the couplet rhyme being strong.
Strong finish here:
Oh breath of God that moves my soul,
who opens eyes and makes me whole,
please dwell with me, forever stay,
In sun or storm, in night and day!
Steve
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2014
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This is a powerful piece which functions well in its intended role as a song. Both rhyme and rhythm work well to make this happen with the couplet rhyme being strong.
Strong finish here:
Oh breath of God that moves my soul,
who opens eyes and makes me whole,
please dwell with me, forever stay,
In sun or storm, in night and day!
Steve
Comment Written 31-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2014
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Thank you Steve for this great review, comments, I appreciate them! Blessings, Roy.
Comment from OLA THOMAS
I delighted with this second part of your first song. Again, I like your inclusion of a chorus to this one. yes, The Holy spirit is like a breeze, sometimes could be gentle and at other times violent in its manifestation.
ola thomas
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2014
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I delighted with this second part of your first song. Again, I like your inclusion of a chorus to this one. yes, The Holy spirit is like a breeze, sometimes could be gentle and at other times violent in its manifestation.
ola thomas
Comment Written 31-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2014
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Thank you Ola, for this great review and remarks, most appreciated, blessings, Roy.
Comment from Heidixoxo
Hello royowen....
This is a beautiful peaceful piece of poetry you have written and created. You deserve my final six star for sure. Your artwork of choice is such a perfect match too. Very nicely done and best ofuck in the upcoming contest as I know this will do GREAT!! Thank you for sharing....xoxo
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Hello royowen....
This is a beautiful peaceful piece of poetry you have written and created. You deserve my final six star for sure. Your artwork of choice is such a perfect match too. Very nicely done and best ofuck in the upcoming contest as I know this will do GREAT!! Thank you for sharing....xoxo
Comment Written 31-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2014
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Thank you so much for this outstanding review, comments, and stars, I appreciate them, thanks for the last six, wonderful, blessings, Roy.
Comment from Sankey
Good one bro so glad I received the Holy Spirit when I was saved at 8 yrs of age. Well done and I loved the picture.
Good work. See ya round.
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Good one bro so glad I received the Holy Spirit when I was saved at 8 yrs of age. Well done and I loved the picture.
Good work. See ya round.
Comment Written 31-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2014
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Thank you Geoff, for the wonderful comments, and review, blessings, Roy.
Comment from Dave Russell
This seems like an exceptional depiction of the Holy Spirit, and it was delightful to read. I appreciated the second verse in particular. Thank you for sharing this one.
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This seems like an exceptional depiction of the Holy Spirit, and it was delightful to read. I appreciated the second verse in particular. Thank you for sharing this one.
Comment Written 31-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2014
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Thank Dave ror this wonderful review and comments, Roy.
Comment from DanielEkine
The chorus of this write up is indeed a breath of solemn fresh air. The artwork does a lot of justice to the author's work. I really like the entirety of this work, and I find no fault in this.
Are you friend or are you foe,
will you howl or gently blow,
will you let me see your face,
or run away without a trace? " is really interesting to me.
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2014
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The chorus of this write up is indeed a breath of solemn fresh air. The artwork does a lot of justice to the author's work. I really like the entirety of this work, and I find no fault in this.
Are you friend or are you foe,
will you howl or gently blow,
will you let me see your face,
or run away without a trace? " is really interesting to me.
Comment Written 31-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2014
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There is a lot in that chorus, Daniel, it takes a lot for me to dig out, sometimes i'm a spectator to my own work! Thank you for the great review and remarks, blessings, Roy.
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Works very well.
Comment from visionary1234
I enjoyed your metaphorical 'song' here Roy ... a nice way to think of 'faith', for sure. And no, we never know how 'faith' will sit with us, or even if it will find us at all (or we find IT):
Are you friend or are you foe,
will you howl or gently blow,
will you let me see your face,
or run away without a trace?
our eternal questions, hmm?
:)Sharyn
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2014
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I enjoyed your metaphorical 'song' here Roy ... a nice way to think of 'faith', for sure. And no, we never know how 'faith' will sit with us, or even if it will find us at all (or we find IT):
Are you friend or are you foe,
will you howl or gently blow,
will you let me see your face,
or run away without a trace?
our eternal questions, hmm?
:)Sharyn
Comment Written 30-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2014
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You've come pretty close to it's meaning Sharyn, the wind is a perplexing metaphor, a thing that evokes all manner of unpredictablity! thanks for the great review and remarks, blessings, Roy.
