Texas Dream Catcher
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Comment from L.M.Mullins
Excellent post. I liked the development of Soni. How she went to the grave site to seek advise. I made that same trip several times when I was young. I stumbled with this line, not sure if you were trying to develop Alex's broken English or not.
"For now, enjoy your breakfast and don't worry about things you might never happen."
LM
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2014
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Excellent post. I liked the development of Soni. How she went to the grave site to seek advise. I made that same trip several times when I was young. I stumbled with this line, not sure if you were trying to develop Alex's broken English or not.
"For now, enjoy your breakfast and don't worry about things you might never happen."
LM
Comment Written 22-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2014
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You're precious.
Comment from Green Lake Girl
Great chapter, Barbara. I love your story. Is Kuruk a ghost spirit or a flesh and blood person? On to the next chapter!
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2014
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Great chapter, Barbara. I love your story. Is Kuruk a ghost spirit or a flesh and blood person? On to the next chapter!
Comment Written 19-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2014
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That's an interesting question for this post. Kuruk is a real person, but.... Thank you for reading.
Comment from CALLAHANMR
Hi Barbara:)
Another well-written and interesting post. I especially liked your introduction of the Lipan Apache spirituality as shown by Soni's grandfather, when she visited her parents graves to pray for guidance and found him there.
I liked the dialog between Soni and her Grandfather as he shared the wisdom of his ancestors.
I am surprised that Soni didn't notify the sheriff about their visitor, His behavior indicates that he is hiding something that could be criminal in nature. (I realize that you are using this to build suspense.)
I was happy to see that you have increased the size of the Rockin' A ranch to a realstic size fo a medium-sized Texas ranch.
I was slow reviewing this because I have been slowed by a foot infectin. I think the problem is under contorl now and I am back at work. I still have enough love and Irish Hugs to share with you for you entertaining story.
Roger
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2014
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Hi Barbara:)
Another well-written and interesting post. I especially liked your introduction of the Lipan Apache spirituality as shown by Soni's grandfather, when she visited her parents graves to pray for guidance and found him there.
I liked the dialog between Soni and her Grandfather as he shared the wisdom of his ancestors.
I am surprised that Soni didn't notify the sheriff about their visitor, His behavior indicates that he is hiding something that could be criminal in nature. (I realize that you are using this to build suspense.)
I was happy to see that you have increased the size of the Rockin' A ranch to a realstic size fo a medium-sized Texas ranch.
I was slow reviewing this because I have been slowed by a foot infectin. I think the problem is under contorl now and I am back at work. I still have enough love and Irish Hugs to share with you for you entertaining story.
Roger
Comment Written 02-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2014
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You are in my prayers my dear man. I always enjoy hearing from you. Thank you for the review.
Comment from Genya
Another great chapter. I have followed this since it began and you never disappoint in any way. I love the characters and the way they are unfolding throughout the story. The mystical grandfather and very kind and caring Alex and Tatiana. The tension is mounting yet again and l can't wait for the next chapter. Genya
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2014
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Another great chapter. I have followed this since it began and you never disappoint in any way. I love the characters and the way they are unfolding throughout the story. The mystical grandfather and very kind and caring Alex and Tatiana. The tension is mounting yet again and l can't wait for the next chapter. Genya
Comment Written 31-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2014
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Thank you for dropping by and leaving this kind review.
Comment from arnie47
Nice job of setting background and some characterization. Two minor things; 1 - I think it should be The clattering of dishes and 2 - a sip of coffee rather than a drink of coffee. Nice job.
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2014
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Nice job of setting background and some characterization. Two minor things; 1 - I think it should be The clattering of dishes and 2 - a sip of coffee rather than a drink of coffee. Nice job.
Comment Written 31-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2014
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Dawn Munro
"(t)he Great Creator..."<< needs a cap; it's the start of a sentence (dialogue)
Have I mentioned I like the name you chose for the dog - "Goliath"? Barbara, your narrative voice is again, so strong, and this plot is refreshingly original. Most enjoyable.
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2014
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"(t)he Great Creator..."<< needs a cap; it's the start of a sentence (dialogue)
Have I mentioned I like the name you chose for the dog - "Goliath"? Barbara, your narrative voice is again, so strong, and this plot is refreshingly original. Most enjoyable.
Comment Written 31-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2014
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The dog is huge, I had one so I figured Goliath is a good name. I will check out that sentence.
Comment from Curly Girly
This is a well-written chapter which gives good insight to Soni's situation and to that of her ancestors and parentage. The conversation sounded natural.
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2014
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This is a well-written chapter which gives good insight to Soni's situation and to that of her ancestors and parentage. The conversation sounded natural.
Comment Written 30-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2014
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Thank you for dropping by and leaving this encouraging review.
Comment from jadapenn
Hi Barbie, a very good chapter. Soni seems in quite dilemma with this man she has brought home. It is funny how her granddad always knows how to guide her. I hope she has some answers now. Well penned. luv jada
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2014
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Hi Barbie, a very good chapter. Soni seems in quite dilemma with this man she has brought home. It is funny how her granddad always knows how to guide her. I hope she has some answers now. Well penned. luv jada
Comment Written 30-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2014
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Thank you for dropping by and leaving this kind review.
Comment from emrpoems
god use of dialogue and narrative
Good interaction between characters. I thought that this piece was well written and held my attention throughout
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2014
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god use of dialogue and narrative
Good interaction between characters. I thought that this piece was well written and held my attention throughout
Comment Written 30-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2014
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Thank you for dropping by and leaving this kind review.
Comment from Jay Squires
A good chapter, Barbara. Clean. No discernible SPAG.
We're seeing more of Soni's pensive side, I feel. Also, the fact that she seeks guidance from her deceased father, shows the spiritual side of her nature.
The way her grandfather is depicted, the reader doesn't really know whether he was with her in the flesh at the end or was a vision.
Interesting chapter.
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2014
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A good chapter, Barbara. Clean. No discernible SPAG.
We're seeing more of Soni's pensive side, I feel. Also, the fact that she seeks guidance from her deceased father, shows the spiritual side of her nature.
The way her grandfather is depicted, the reader doesn't really know whether he was with her in the flesh at the end or was a vision.
Interesting chapter.
Comment Written 29-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2014
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Thank you for dropping by and leaving this kind review.
