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If Hippos Lived in Cities

rhyming quatrains in 7/6/7/6

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Comment from Joan E.
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I must have missed this post while I was traveling. I enjoyed your rhymed quatrains' whimsical subject and your desire to be a hippo. Your "mud's a better sort" is a hoot! Of course, no hippos in Costa Rica, and we only saw one crocodile. Thanks for the fun. Smiles- Joan

 Comment Written 10-Aug-2014

reply by the author on 10-Aug-2014
    I hear all the hippos were driven out of Costa Rica some years ago by a herd of turtles :-) Thanks so much, Joan :-) Brooke
reply by Joan E. on 10-Aug-2014
    Yep--I heard that rumor too! lol ;) -Joan
Comment from Liandra
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Leaves a lot to the imagination! I commend you on your vivid imagination. I can just see in my mind's eye a hippo sitting at a table!

As always perfect rhyme and a lovely story.

:) Liandra

 Comment Written 30-Jul-2014

reply by the author on 31-Jul-2014
    Liandra, thank you so very much :-) Brooke
reply by Liandra on 01-Aug-2014
    You're welcome, Brooke,

    :) Liandra
Comment from marion
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Hi adewpearl - loved the concession! I do wonder why you have to make it, if readers don't get it...well...oops! I'd better stop here! I loved this, it tickles my fantasies! And I too would like a hippo to sit at my table at my eatery. Oh what fun we'd have, and what to talk about, well, we'd never stop!

Would spas that give massages
and facials made of mud
provide them pools of mire
where they could laze and thud,

Classic!

I enjoyed.
Marion

 Comment Written 29-Jul-2014

reply by the author on 29-Jul-2014
    Thanks so much, Marion - I made the concession because this is not my first happy hippo poem, and the other times I was besieged by people warning me that they're actually dangerous LOL
    Brooke :-)
Comment from me_tudor
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I thought this was a cute poem and it would make a great children's story. I can picture the drawings of a hippo sitting at a table drinking tea with pinky in the air.

 Comment Written 29-Jul-2014

reply by the author on 29-Jul-2014
    me_tudor, thank you for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Comment from jadapenn
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Hi Brooke, I don't think the poor hippo would know what to make of a big city. Beware those with swimming pools. lol. Loved the poem and could just see one of these giants trying to get into a booth for something to eat. :) Well penned. luv jada

 Comment Written 29-Jul-2014

reply by the author on 29-Jul-2014
    Thank you, Jada - I bet that hippo could displace all the water in some of those pools. LOL :-) Brooke
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
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Another very clever poem. Hippos are so ugly, they are cute; I love the rhyme mud/thud. Just perfect for a hippo. He might have trouble getting into a booth, LOL, Thanks for making me smile~Debbie

 Comment Written 29-Jul-2014

reply by the author on 29-Jul-2014
    Debbie, thanks so much, my friend :-) Brooke
Comment from ILovePoetry!
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Where do you get your ideas from!!! This is such an original poem and written so cleverly! The rhyming is spot on and the wording fits perfectly with the theme of hippos. I really like how you wrote it in wonderment and not just in a matter-of-fact way. Great Job!

 Comment Written 29-Jul-2014

reply by the author on 29-Jul-2014
    Thank you, ILovePoetry, for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Comment from paulah60
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A delightful piece, Brooke! Certainly a children's poem, but the bit about the mud facial (which would go over their heads) makes it entertaining for adults as well. And as with all your work, there's an important instructive subtext, this one about inclusion.
Well done!
Cheers
Paula

 Comment Written 29-Jul-2014

reply by the author on 29-Jul-2014
    Paula, thank you so very much :-) Brooke
Comment from Pearl Edwards
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I love the pictures that you paint for us in these rhyming quatrains Brooke. I can just picture the hippo ambling down the city paths, having a mud bath spa. Great visuals.

valda

 Comment Written 29-Jul-2014

reply by the author on 29-Jul-2014
    Thank you, valda, for your thoughtful response to this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from Trybuck
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One thought I would rather not think
Is Hippos living in cities
Maybe in a year or two
But definitely not now
Unless of course, He's stuffed
Like the pink giraffes
and purple elephants

Well done, Buck

 Comment Written 28-Jul-2014

reply by the author on 28-Jul-2014
    Thanks so much, Buck - this all happens in make-believe land, so no worries LOL :-) Brooke