Comment from humpwhistle

Excellent

Sorry, Steve. Got here as soon as I could.
I even deciphered the title, and they only taught
Pig Latin where I went to school.
Nice to see you over on the prose side of the aisle.

I like the way the title serves as a moral.
But I don't know where you dug up Captain Jack's photo.

Good luck, Steve.

Peace, Lee

 Comment Written 26-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 27-Jul-2014

I'm just happy to know Captain Jack boasts the words New Zealand on his leather jacket.

I know you'll be trying to steal my thunder in the story-poems, so I'm getting in my retaliation first!

Steve

Comment from closetpoetjester

Excellent

Hahaha!... Stimpy,...YOU idiot! Loved this clever half century of words describing a clumsy f**ker's deathwish.
Absolute gold. Good luck. Lets hope your bloke has more luck with the judges as opposed to navigating that car park.
Cheers P

 Comment Written 25-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 25-Jul-2014

Thank you. No way they're gonna catch him with no steeds!

Steve

Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep

Excellent

Ha - loved it! You wrote an excellent 50 word dash story, Steve, and gave it irony and humour as well. The picture ads impact and I loved your entry and wish you good luck with it, Giddy

 Comment Written 25-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 25-Jul-2014

Thanks, Giddy - thought I'd try my luck over this side of the page.

Steve

Comment from A Matter Of Words

Excellent

Oh, how this made me laugh out loud...The image of this happening was too much... Thanks for the morning laugh. So much said in so few words. Well done.

 Comment Written 25-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 25-Jul-2014

Thanks for the kind words and the laugh.

Steve

reply by A Matter Of Words on 25-Jul-2014

You are so welcome.

Comment from Spitfire

Excellent

Great entry. Had to read it twice before it hit me. How to get back at a bully, lesson one. Don't mess with someone who drives a semi-lesson two. Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 25-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 25-Jul-2014

Thank you!

Steve

Comment from SaluteDobby

Excellent

Teehee.. serve the biker right! You spill my drink-I crush your Harley!!
Pretty good take on the prompt, Steve! I am sure it made the readers smile.
All the best with the contest!

Regards,
Namratha

 Comment Written 25-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 25-Jul-2014

Thanks, Namratha.

Never mess with the mild mannered ones!

Steve

Comment from GWHARGIS

Excellent

This was fricking hilarious. Loved the way the guy got the last word in (so to speak). I liked that this was mainly dialogue and such a dead pan delivery of the last line. Great job on this.

 Comment Written 24-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 25-Jul-2014

Thank you!

Steve

Comment from LIJ Red

Excellent

Yeah, yeah, from Easyriders joke page way back when. Who cares? It works. I knew I'd struck literary gold when I read Low Class Chick. This shorty is excellent.

 Comment Written 24-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 25-Jul-2014

Mmmm.. maybe not totally original - some reviewers reckon they've seen this in a movie???

Thanks for the review and the stars.

Steve

Comment from rhymelord

Exceptional

Dear Steve,
Now that's what I call succinct, pungent writing. The punch line just explodes out of nowhere and your verbal picture is superb. I like the erudite use of the Latin also.
Regards
Reg

 Comment Written 24-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 25-Jul-2014

Thanks, Reg.

Not unlike writing a short poem really - and I didn't even have to worry about rhyme!

Steve

Comment from Pyrrho

Excellent

You are relating a sequence from a movie but I suppose that flies OK on Fan Story. However, it is nowhere as entertaining as the film, I am sorry to report. I am also unhappy that I cannot offer any constructive criticism. It is hard to think of ways to improve it.

 Comment Written 24-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 25-Jul-2014

Thanks for reviewing.

I am not sure what movie you are referring to, although a couple of others have suggested they have heard the joke before.

It is possibly something I saw or heard a long time ago.

Steve