When You Are Silent
A Sonnet in Blank Verse32 total reviews
Comment from irishauthorme
Your words really hit home. There is no excuse for this neglect. Sometimes we get so caught up in our own little world that we forget those who love and miss us.
the sad, lonely darkness is no companion.
How well I know the restless nights, the thoughts and memories that will not be silent, and wondering.
A lament, beautifully done.
irish
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2014
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Your words really hit home. There is no excuse for this neglect. Sometimes we get so caught up in our own little world that we forget those who love and miss us.
the sad, lonely darkness is no companion.
How well I know the restless nights, the thoughts and memories that will not be silent, and wondering.
A lament, beautifully done.
irish
Comment Written 26-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2014
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Thank you Irish. Your kind words and exceptional rating mean a lot to me. I so much appreciate you taking the time to read all the poems you missed while away from your computer. You don't really have to do that, you know. But since you did... you are much appreciated. MM
Comment from brown.amy97
Very good poem! I like how the reader has to search beyond the surface of the poem to find its meaning. I agree with you in the poem that we have to go to Him for prayers, encouragement, courage, and spiritual strength.
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2014
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Very good poem! I like how the reader has to search beyond the surface of the poem to find its meaning. I agree with you in the poem that we have to go to Him for prayers, encouragement, courage, and spiritual strength.
Comment Written 23-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2014
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Thank you for your supportive words and this very kind review, Amy. I'm glad we agree, and I'm glad you understood what I was saying.
Comment from Patti R.
This is absolutely lovely, Miss Merri! You're enjoying your classes with mountainwriter49 I take it...he is such a wonderful poet.
Blank verse is kind of freeing, the way free verse can be, although with the added beauty and flow provided by meter and the sonnet format.
This poem left me feeling a bit melancholy for one who feels loneliness.
Patti
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2014
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This is absolutely lovely, Miss Merri! You're enjoying your classes with mountainwriter49 I take it...he is such a wonderful poet.
Blank verse is kind of freeing, the way free verse can be, although with the added beauty and flow provided by meter and the sonnet format.
This poem left me feeling a bit melancholy for one who feels loneliness.
Patti
Comment Written 23-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2014
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Thank you so much Patti. I did enjoy my class from Ray very, very much. He is a terrific teacher, and a true gentleman too. Thank you for your kind review of this poem. I find blank verse much more difficult than free verse, but it is, as you say, freeing in some respects, not to have end rhymes.
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Hi MissMerri,
Beautifully said in this poem. I really like the photo paired with this. It invokes the loneliness felt in the poem.
Nicely done.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'... Jax
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2014
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Hi MissMerri,
Beautifully said in this poem. I really like the photo paired with this. It invokes the loneliness felt in the poem.
Nicely done.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'... Jax
Comment Written 23-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2014
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Thank you for your kind words, Jax. I'm glad you liked this blank verse sonnet.
Comment from expressions9
Dear Adonna
This is a beautifully-written blank verse poem (and so beautifully presented). The tone is so peaceful and heartfelt emotions are expressed. (Tiny suggestion - I think "bird song" should perhaps be one word "birdsong"). I like the way the finishing stanzas bring a fitting solution to the heart's cry - prayer. Wonderful!
(Sorry I've missed reviewing for a while - have been so very busy in many ways, including trying to get to the final stages of my second book which I hope will be available within the next 10-12 days, by God's grace)
Look forward to reading more of any work I've missed.
God bless :)
love Christine x
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2014
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Dear Adonna
This is a beautifully-written blank verse poem (and so beautifully presented). The tone is so peaceful and heartfelt emotions are expressed. (Tiny suggestion - I think "bird song" should perhaps be one word "birdsong"). I like the way the finishing stanzas bring a fitting solution to the heart's cry - prayer. Wonderful!
(Sorry I've missed reviewing for a while - have been so very busy in many ways, including trying to get to the final stages of my second book which I hope will be available within the next 10-12 days, by God's grace)
Look forward to reading more of any work I've missed.
God bless :)
love Christine x
Comment Written 23-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2014
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Thank you so much Christine. I think you are right about the birdsong word and I will fix that. I too have been so busy and wish I could find more hours in each day so I truly understand. I'm very excited about your second book. I don't think I have the courage or will to do two. One has been more than overwhelming. So I'm proud of you, and look forward to owning a copy.
Comment from Sonjalee
I like stifling silence. The author used strong words in her descriptions. I also like whirl and winds.The source of peace is when the nights are long and you are silent. I will have to think about that for a while. The poem flows beautifully
and sound s wonderful.
I really liked it a lot
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2014
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I like stifling silence. The author used strong words in her descriptions. I also like whirl and winds.The source of peace is when the nights are long and you are silent. I will have to think about that for a while. The poem flows beautifully
and sound s wonderful.
I really liked it a lot
Comment Written 23-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2014
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No... I didn't mean that at all. The "it" in this line (It is the only source of peace I find) refers back to the words above... the prayer and imploring God to rain down blessings on the missed one. The last line (when you are silent, and the night is long) refers to a time when peace is most needed, not the reason for the peace. I'm so sorry that was not clear. Poetry sometimes needs to be read more than once. But thank you for telling me what you did like, and also what puzzled you. I hope it is more understandable now. Thank you for the excellent rating too. I appreciate it much. MM
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Thank you for taking the time to explain it. I wish you did not have to do that. Hopefully I will get better as I read more of the poetry on this site. Thank you
Comment from barbara.wilkey
This is a beautifully written poem. I could feel the emotion as I read. This poem as a peace and calmness about it. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2014
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This is a beautifully written poem. I could feel the emotion as I read. This poem as a peace and calmness about it. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 23-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2014
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Thank you Barbara. I'm glad to know the words seemed peaceful to you. I appreciate what you said, very much. MM
Comment from Gladness
You describe so well the night and longing, and I am so happy to see the answer is prayer. I totally agree the thing to do is pray. God brings us peace like nothing else can.
Well done!
Anita
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2014
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You describe so well the night and longing, and I am so happy to see the answer is prayer. I totally agree the thing to do is pray. God brings us peace like nothing else can.
Well done!
Anita
Comment Written 23-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2014
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Thank you for reading my poem an for your exceptional rating too. I'm glad you liked the sentiments, and I totally agree with your statement... "God brings us peace like nothing else can."
Comment from RGstar
Sorry late with this review MissMerri, have not been too well.
A nice little write that invokes feelings of longing. Your usual style of love, desire and longing have been missed.
Good write,
best wishes, have a great day.
RGstar
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2014
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Sorry late with this review MissMerri, have not been too well.
A nice little write that invokes feelings of longing. Your usual style of love, desire and longing have been missed.
Good write,
best wishes, have a great day.
RGstar
Comment Written 23-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2014
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RG... I'm so sorry to hear you have not been well ! I hope you are much better. Thank you for taking the time to read this poem and for your very kind comments. I appreciate it very much. MM
Comment from forestport12
Soul stirring poem about the emotions of love when there is no physical connection, only the memories tied to the soul. I love again how you weave nature with our human condition for love and redemption....Stan
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2014
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Soul stirring poem about the emotions of love when there is no physical connection, only the memories tied to the soul. I love again how you weave nature with our human condition for love and redemption....Stan
Comment Written 23-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2014
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Thank you Stan. You always understand my poetry, and it makes me wonder if you also write poetry sometimes. I guess I've never seen a poem from you, but maybe I'm missing something. I'd better check. :p Thanks for the encouragement. MM
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Its been awhile, but thanks for the thought. I have done the Bible Acrostic in the past.
