If There Were Only Just We Two
A Triolet147 total reviews
Comment from LateBloomer
Hello adewpearl, Brooke, A wonderful poem and thought-provoking sentiment:
if there were only just we two,
for all I'll ever need is you.
(I think if we're going to spend the rest of our life with just One other person, it should be someone that we love unconditionally, and a person with whom we have a long and "honest" history with because conversation might get boring and "pretending" might become overwhelming.
As always, silky rhyming and format, and a sentiment worth pondering. Keep the blue waters flowing. LateBloomer
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2014
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Hello adewpearl, Brooke, A wonderful poem and thought-provoking sentiment:
if there were only just we two,
for all I'll ever need is you.
(I think if we're going to spend the rest of our life with just One other person, it should be someone that we love unconditionally, and a person with whom we have a long and "honest" history with because conversation might get boring and "pretending" might become overwhelming.
As always, silky rhyming and format, and a sentiment worth pondering. Keep the blue waters flowing. LateBloomer
Comment Written 25-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2014
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LateBloomer, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from kiwisteveh
No, she's usually on the other end of the camera.
A lovely triolet which would stand as a fine love poem if not for the mother-son artwork that accompanies it, and perhaps the slightly childlike tone in line 6.
Good luck.
Steve
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2014
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No, she's usually on the other end of the camera.
A lovely triolet which would stand as a fine love poem if not for the mother-son artwork that accompanies it, and perhaps the slightly childlike tone in line 6.
Good luck.
Steve
Comment Written 25-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2014
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Thank you so much, Steve - Andy is also good with a camera, but Miranda is the one obsessed with taking photos. LOL :-) Brooke
Comment from closetpoetjester
A beautiful Tri Brookers, embracing a Mother's love and her allegiance to the bond with her child and how love surpasses absolutely everything when it comes to flesh and blood.
I melted on "for all I'll ever need is you". Please enjoy a sixer. This my friend, was Triolet gold and that 1,4,7 repeat lent itself as the perfect refrain. So very well done mate. You're always a special treat to read.
Phillippa
xo
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2014
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A beautiful Tri Brookers, embracing a Mother's love and her allegiance to the bond with her child and how love surpasses absolutely everything when it comes to flesh and blood.
I melted on "for all I'll ever need is you". Please enjoy a sixer. This my friend, was Triolet gold and that 1,4,7 repeat lent itself as the perfect refrain. So very well done mate. You're always a special treat to read.
Phillippa
xo
Comment Written 25-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2014
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Thank you so much, Phillippa, for your lovely comments and generous sixth star :-) Brooke
Comment from Treischel
This lovely Triolet takes a wonderful thought and gently enfolds it into flowing thoughts of a loving relationship. The form is perfect to ripple the thought of togetherness through the verse in a cascade of feelings. Very nice. Good luch in the contest.
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2014
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This lovely Triolet takes a wonderful thought and gently enfolds it into flowing thoughts of a loving relationship. The form is perfect to ripple the thought of togetherness through the verse in a cascade of feelings. Very nice. Good luch in the contest.
Comment Written 25-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2014
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Treischel, thank you so much :-) brooke
Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep
This is a very happy picture and a loving poem, Brooke, and it looks like it was a spectacular day. I thought the triolet was a good choice for this particular poem. Best wishes for the competition, Giddy
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2014
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This is a very happy picture and a loving poem, Brooke, and it looks like it was a spectacular day. I thought the triolet was a good choice for this particular poem. Best wishes for the competition, Giddy
Comment Written 25-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2014
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Giddy, thank you so much for your thoughtful review and kind contest wishes :-) Brooke
Comment from Carolyn 'Deaton' Stephens
In little Sawyers eyes, he and mommy are the only two, plus daddy I guess. :-) I loved the sentiment in the Triolet you have written. It should be a great contender for the contest. Good luck Brooke,
Carolyn
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2014
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In little Sawyers eyes, he and mommy are the only two, plus daddy I guess. :-) I loved the sentiment in the Triolet you have written. It should be a great contender for the contest. Good luck Brooke,
Carolyn
Comment Written 25-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2014
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Carolyn, thank you so much :-) I appreciate your generous sixth star, and yes, Daddy got short shrift in this poem. LOL :-) Brooke
Comment from marijmd
Ah - nothing more loving that having that special person in your life. Then everything else just seems to have balance - even if all you have is each other.
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2014
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Ah - nothing more loving that having that special person in your life. Then everything else just seems to have balance - even if all you have is each other.
Comment Written 25-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2014
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Thank you, Maria, for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Comment from dthomas6985
I feel the sunshine and the love involved. You feel special, that come from the heart. People feel that, well I do:-). You two look so beautiful and happy together. And thats what life and love is about. Hold on to that smiles, even when your tested. Teach your seed the strength shes going to need. Take it easy. Much blessing.:-)
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2014
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I feel the sunshine and the love involved. You feel special, that come from the heart. People feel that, well I do:-). You two look so beautiful and happy together. And thats what life and love is about. Hold on to that smiles, even when your tested. Teach your seed the strength shes going to need. Take it easy. Much blessing.:-)
Comment Written 24-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2014
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dthomas,thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Delahay
This would be a wonderful poem for any mother to say to her child. The picture you chose to go along with it is perfect. These two look so happy here.
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2014
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This would be a wonderful poem for any mother to say to her child. The picture you chose to go along with it is perfect. These two look so happy here.
Comment Written 24-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2014
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Ward, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Janet Foor
This is a wonderful and heart warming triolet Brooke. What a joy to see Sawyer and Miranda enjoying the beach and each other. Great repeating line to convey their love.
Blessings
Janet
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2014
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This is a wonderful and heart warming triolet Brooke. What a joy to see Sawyer and Miranda enjoying the beach and each other. Great repeating line to convey their love.
Blessings
Janet
Comment Written 24-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2014
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Janet, thanks so much for your generous response to this triolet, my friend :-) Brooke
