haiku (heart-flowers align)
Haiku based on photo59 total reviews
Comment from BR Raksun
heart-flowers align
along stem fed from one root
unity blooms
Wow! great thought in tiny poem as unity booms. People like flowers with tender thoughts to teach the things so sweet, it blooms. Simply very sweet and lovely.
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2014
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heart-flowers align
along stem fed from one root
unity blooms
Wow! great thought in tiny poem as unity booms. People like flowers with tender thoughts to teach the things so sweet, it blooms. Simply very sweet and lovely.
Comment Written 23-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2014
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Thanks so much for your enthusiastic and lovely comments. Glad you enjoyed and nice to meet you. Warm Smiles, rd
Comment from juliaSjames
I love the subject of this haiku, rd. And what a gorgeous presentation.
Excellent use of "align" to capture the image of these pretty, dangling flowers.
Clever satori.
I pondered over the construction of the second line. "one root" sounds more spiritual than an actual observation of nature.
Actually the entire poem seems to be an extended metaphor. Quite striking!
Best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2014
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I love the subject of this haiku, rd. And what a gorgeous presentation.
Excellent use of "align" to capture the image of these pretty, dangling flowers.
Clever satori.
I pondered over the construction of the second line. "one root" sounds more spiritual than an actual observation of nature.
Actually the entire poem seems to be an extended metaphor. Quite striking!
Best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 24-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2014
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Thanks for your wonderfully thoughtful review, dear friend. So pleased you stopped by and resonated with the metaphorical intent! :) Yay! Love, rd
Comment from Laurie Keim
Hi R.
Heart flowers: the generative force within emotion; the expression of feeling and the feeling of expression; the bursting forth of beautiful things; the growth (the seeds) of expression within others.
align: become balanced, also in a line as arranged; a sequence of feelings arranged into words.
along: preposition meaning on the stem but also carries the shadowed sense of "a long stem" slender. An example of pure poetry.
fed from one root: springing from one source (supernatural force and also from the womb). There is also a shadowed meaning implying conception: the act of sexual congress; the flower as the means and attraction of fertilization.
unity blooms: blooms that are united and also a sense of togetherness increasing among many. The unit is the symbol of one, while unity is the collective noun of many ones being brought together.
This is a fine example where brief forms must own every word and work them such, that every connotation is supported and expanded.
A very fine piece.
Cheers,
Laurie Keim
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2014
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Hi R.
Heart flowers: the generative force within emotion; the expression of feeling and the feeling of expression; the bursting forth of beautiful things; the growth (the seeds) of expression within others.
align: become balanced, also in a line as arranged; a sequence of feelings arranged into words.
along: preposition meaning on the stem but also carries the shadowed sense of "a long stem" slender. An example of pure poetry.
fed from one root: springing from one source (supernatural force and also from the womb). There is also a shadowed meaning implying conception: the act of sexual congress; the flower as the means and attraction of fertilization.
unity blooms: blooms that are united and also a sense of togetherness increasing among many. The unit is the symbol of one, while unity is the collective noun of many ones being brought together.
This is a fine example where brief forms must own every word and work them such, that every connotation is supported and expanded.
A very fine piece.
Cheers,
Laurie Keim
Comment Written 24-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2014
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Wow! What a stunning and glowing review--which means a ton more when it comes from you, dear Laurie Keim! Thrilled that you tuned in to every word and grasped so much on all layers...and even one I had not noticed directly myself. What a rich and wonderful response. Thank you!
Warmest Smiles, rd
Comment from RGstar
Sorry late with this review. Have not been too well.
A lovely write despite all.
best wishes, have a great day.
RGstar
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2014
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Sorry late with this review. Have not been too well.
A lovely write despite all.
best wishes, have a great day.
RGstar
Comment Written 23-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2014
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So sorry you've not been well. Sending healing thoughts your way. Hope you feel better soon. Blessings, rd
Comment from paulah60
Hey Rama, a clever little haiku jam packed with deep meaning. Most significantly, the sacred truth of the root chakra: All is one. It can be a real challenge to embrace this in our separatist culture largely governed and shaped by fear, but as your poem suggests, in those intervals that we do, a sense of unity does bloom. The accompanying pic is an inspired choice: a bleeding heart (not that I knew what it was called. I thought it was a fuchsia but then saw your response to a review! LOL), which appropriately symbolises wearing our heart on our sleeve. And, it's a perennial, so even though that which blooms eventually dies (flower or a sense of unity), it will once again flower.
Very nicely done! And lovely to see your smiling face (your new profile pic).
Cheers
Paula x
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2014
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Hey Rama, a clever little haiku jam packed with deep meaning. Most significantly, the sacred truth of the root chakra: All is one. It can be a real challenge to embrace this in our separatist culture largely governed and shaped by fear, but as your poem suggests, in those intervals that we do, a sense of unity does bloom. The accompanying pic is an inspired choice: a bleeding heart (not that I knew what it was called. I thought it was a fuchsia but then saw your response to a review! LOL), which appropriately symbolises wearing our heart on our sleeve. And, it's a perennial, so even though that which blooms eventually dies (flower or a sense of unity), it will once again flower.
Very nicely done! And lovely to see your smiling face (your new profile pic).
Cheers
Paula x
Comment Written 23-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2014
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Thank you, Paula dear. Glad you enjoyed this and thanks for your most thoughtful comments. Love how you I've into the layers! Reviewers told me the name is bleeding heart...I didn't know that before. as always, Love your review! Hugs, rd
Comment from Irish Rain
Just beautiful, can't judge it as a haiku...because I can never write those, but beautiful in itself, I love the Bleeding Hearts, what a great choice! Blessings...Judy
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2014
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Just beautiful, can't judge it as a haiku...because I can never write those, but beautiful in itself, I love the Bleeding Hearts, what a great choice! Blessings...Judy
Comment Written 22-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2014
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Thank you, Judy--so pleased you enjoyed this! ;) Love, rd
Comment from ravenblack
Stem fed from one root- a true unity of the heart. And they can only align in one direction- to love and be loved. Do you know the actual name of those exquisite blossoms?
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2014
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Stem fed from one root- a true unity of the heart. And they can only align in one direction- to love and be loved. Do you know the actual name of those exquisite blossoms?
Comment Written 22-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2014
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Thanks, RB. Yes, they are called BLEEDING HEARTS. :) Warm Smiles, rd
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Hmmm...then I must be hanging from the same branch. Just add liberal.
Comment from michaelcahill
Love this. Is this some kind of fuschia? (must have that spelled wrong!) I take this as the beautiful inside that is within all of these funny shells we carry around. So simple and true, yet we strain so hard to grasp it. mikey
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2014
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Love this. Is this some kind of fuschia? (must have that spelled wrong!) I take this as the beautiful inside that is within all of these funny shells we carry around. So simple and true, yet we strain so hard to grasp it. mikey
Comment Written 22-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2014
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Thank you, Mikey--so glad you enjoyed it. Appreciate your thoughtful comments. Warm Smiles, rd
Comment from Selina Stambi
Hello rd,
This little piece has a stunning underlying message to it.
Very cleverly done. I'm impressed.
Have a wonderful week.
Love,
Sonali xx
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2014
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Hello rd,
This little piece has a stunning underlying message to it.
Very cleverly done. I'm impressed.
Have a wonderful week.
Love,
Sonali xx
Comment Written 22-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2014
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Hi Sonali-
So glad you enjoyed this! Have a wonderful week, too.
:-))
Love, rd
Comment from Maureen's Pen
Dear Sister Rama - I enjoyed this haiku, lovely powerful word choices and great last line. You're at 16 syllables so bang on and good luck.
Thanks for sharing.
Love, light & big hugs
Maureen
heart-flowers align 5
along stem fed from one root 7
unity blooms 4 // total 16
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2014
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Dear Sister Rama - I enjoyed this haiku, lovely powerful word choices and great last line. You're at 16 syllables so bang on and good luck.
Thanks for sharing.
Love, light & big hugs
Maureen
heart-flowers align 5
along stem fed from one root 7
unity blooms 4 // total 16
Comment Written 22-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2014
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Thanks, dear M. So glad you enjoyed this, sweet sister! Love, rd
PS Hugs back.
