Mutual Madness
Naani42 total reviews
Comment from Emeka13
I am yet to read a more graphic portrayal of the senselessness of wars and their effect on the innocent. While the leaders revel in their worthless ego, and behave like kids in a play ground, children continue to die. You do very well to portray leaders as a bunch of kindergarten children. Sad. Even more absurd is when peace or ceasefire is agreed, they set a future date (seven days) for it to come into effect. In the meantime people continue to fight and die 'for what'? Bizarre. Well done.
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2014
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I am yet to read a more graphic portrayal of the senselessness of wars and their effect on the innocent. While the leaders revel in their worthless ego, and behave like kids in a play ground, children continue to die. You do very well to portray leaders as a bunch of kindergarten children. Sad. Even more absurd is when peace or ceasefire is agreed, they set a future date (seven days) for it to come into effect. In the meantime people continue to fight and die 'for what'? Bizarre. Well done.
Comment Written 19-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2014
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Emeka, thanks so much for the thoughtful review and the six stars.
Sometimes the world seems like a pretty senseless place - just turn on the news and despair.
Steve
Comment from honeytree
How powerful both the art work and words are very powerful.
Why should the children or anyone die
because of violence or war.
honey tree
I have no six
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2014
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How powerful both the art work and words are very powerful.
Why should the children or anyone die
because of violence or war.
honey tree
I have no six
Comment Written 19-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2014
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Thanks for the kind words and the virtual six.
Steve
Comment from krys123
Steve;
Truly an exceptionally written piece of poetry and congratulations on winning the naani poem contest.
Your imagination and this is truly inventive and creative while your imagery that you created through the dialogue was definitely an descriptive and expressive throughout.
Thank you so much for sharing and posting this for everyone to read and may all your endeavors be good ones.
Alex
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2014
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Steve;
Truly an exceptionally written piece of poetry and congratulations on winning the naani poem contest.
Your imagination and this is truly inventive and creative while your imagery that you created through the dialogue was definitely an descriptive and expressive throughout.
Thank you so much for sharing and posting this for everyone to read and may all your endeavors be good ones.
Alex
Comment Written 18-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2014
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Thanks, Alex.
Steve
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Welcome Steve
Alex
Comment from RGstar
Such a sad subject for a competition, Steve, but if awareness is the light of day then this is well worth the effort.
It seems we never learn.
A picture paints a thousand words, and this one must answer all of them.
Good awareness, my friend.
Best wishes,
RG
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2014
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Such a sad subject for a competition, Steve, but if awareness is the light of day then this is well worth the effort.
It seems we never learn.
A picture paints a thousand words, and this one must answer all of them.
Good awareness, my friend.
Best wishes,
RG
Comment Written 18-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2014
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Thanks, RG
Just turn on the news at the moment and you can't help but feel sad for the state of the world.
Steve
Comment from Pyrrho
The irony of a parallel with a conversation at a revolving door is not lost on me, Unfortunately the poem is meaningless without the picture, whereas a classic Japanese 5-7-5 (it would be a Senryu in this case) does not even allow a title.
Good work for a western poem ... whoops, a Naani: never heard of it. Will Google.
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2014
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The irony of a parallel with a conversation at a revolving door is not lost on me, Unfortunately the poem is meaningless without the picture, whereas a classic Japanese 5-7-5 (it would be a Senryu in this case) does not even allow a title.
Good work for a western poem ... whoops, a Naani: never heard of it. Will Google.
Comment Written 18-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2014
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Thanks for reviewing.
Not sure why you would find this meaningless - did you get as far as line 4
Of course the artwork adds impact, but there is plenty of that without it.
As you discovered it is a naani, so it is not bound by the conventions of haiku or senryu.
Steve
Comment from kiwijenny
You deserved to win with this one........Israel,...Palestinian ......yikes it is always the way that the innocent get hurt.....yikes yikes
Mutual madness and sadness
God bless
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2014
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You deserved to win with this one........Israel,...Palestinian ......yikes it is always the way that the innocent get hurt.....yikes yikes
Mutual madness and sadness
God bless
Comment Written 17-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2014
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Thanks, Jenny.
Is it just me or is the world a little more crazy than usual at the moment?
Steve
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Very crazy........we were flying about the time Malaysian Air went down...it's not fun ..
Comment from Christine B.
This is deserving of the awards it's been given. Packing the powerful speaker's punch, it so fittingly shoves the ignorance it blasts directly into a vivid visibility so that it may cause the upset stir of emotion that it ought to!
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2014
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This is deserving of the awards it's been given. Packing the powerful speaker's punch, it so fittingly shoves the ignorance it blasts directly into a vivid visibility so that it may cause the upset stir of emotion that it ought to!
Comment Written 17-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2014
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Thanks, Christine!
Steve
Comment from nancyjam
Congratulations on this win Steve. this really
is a powerful poem - the picture is tragic but
serves to emphasize your point. Nancy
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2014
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Congratulations on this win Steve. this really
is a powerful poem - the picture is tragic but
serves to emphasize your point. Nancy
Comment Written 17-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2014
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Thanks, nancy!
Steve
Comment from TAB_that's me
Well I can see why you have that first place ribbon - congrats. Great little naani that says so much in such few words.
teresa
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2014
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Well I can see why you have that first place ribbon - congrats. Great little naani that says so much in such few words.
teresa
Comment Written 17-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2014
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Thanks, Teresa!
Steve
Comment from ravenblack
So simply written but so powerful, even without the image. The dialogue polite like two Victorian gentleman ruptured by the stark truism- still the children die.
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2014
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So simply written but so powerful, even without the image. The dialogue polite like two Victorian gentleman ruptured by the stark truism- still the children die.
Comment Written 17-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2014
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Thank you!
yes, that's what I was aiming for...
Steve
