Be Not Confined
an octogram152 total reviews
Comment from Sanku
We have a saying,"it is not enough to have eyes,but one should learn to see" "An eye kept closed is one that's blind". World would be a better place if we made some attempt to escape from the confinements of our narrow-minded thoughts.A very good message in the poem written in your usual impeccable style.
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2014
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We have a saying,"it is not enough to have eyes,but one should learn to see" "An eye kept closed is one that's blind". World would be a better place if we made some attempt to escape from the confinements of our narrow-minded thoughts.A very good message in the poem written in your usual impeccable style.
Comment Written 24-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2014
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Thank you so much, Sanku - reading all your reviews is a lovely experience :-) Brooke
Comment from Aiona
I love this poem, adewpearl. For one, it rhymes. I have a soft spot for poems that rhyme. It carries a truth. And it inspires me. I am curious what inspired you to write it.
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2014
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I love this poem, adewpearl. For one, it rhymes. I have a soft spot for poems that rhyme. It carries a truth. And it inspires me. I am curious what inspired you to write it.
Comment Written 21-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2014
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Aiona, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from GeorgieBoy
What a wonderful message to us all. We all are inclined to wear blinders in some situations by the way we were exposed to them.
I especially liked the words, all truth to one is not assigned.
Wisdom is not given to a chosen few, we all need to open out eyes and hearts to observe and learn.
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2014
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What a wonderful message to us all. We all are inclined to wear blinders in some situations by the way we were exposed to them.
I especially liked the words, all truth to one is not assigned.
Wisdom is not given to a chosen few, we all need to open out eyes and hearts to observe and learn.
Comment Written 17-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2014
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GeorgiaBoy, thank you so very much for your generous and gracious response to this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from jadapenn
Another great and educational poem. We should investigate and let our thoughts wonder - see what others are up to instead of sitting with some confined thoughts that will never get us anywhere. Well penned. luv jada
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2014
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Another great and educational poem. We should investigate and let our thoughts wonder - see what others are up to instead of sitting with some confined thoughts that will never get us anywhere. Well penned. luv jada
Comment Written 17-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2014
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Thank you so much, Jada :-) I was just looking for a new chapter from you this morning. I hope a new one is up now :-) Brooke
Comment from Smoothiecool
yes we should never let our thoughts be confined
or swayed by bias judgments
let our learned wisdom keep our hearts open
good enjambment
good visual
good rhyme through out
your repeat lines work well
great message portrayed
cheers Smoothiecool
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2014
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yes we should never let our thoughts be confined
or swayed by bias judgments
let our learned wisdom keep our hearts open
good enjambment
good visual
good rhyme through out
your repeat lines work well
great message portrayed
cheers Smoothiecool
Comment Written 17-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2014
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Smoothiecool, thank you so much :-) Brooke
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your always welcome
not that I could ever suggest improvements to your write they are always so good
have a blessed day
cheers >.SC >. Faye
Comment from joysong
Great job with your work here. The rhythm is good and carries the thought all the way through. I enjoyed it. My first reading of it seemed a choppy but upon re-reading it, It went much smoother. Thanks and good luck.
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2014
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Great job with your work here. The rhythm is good and carries the thought all the way through. I enjoyed it. My first reading of it seemed a choppy but upon re-reading it, It went much smoother. Thanks and good luck.
Comment Written 17-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2014
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joysong, thank you :-) I appreciate your thoughtful response to this octogram, a form with a distinctive cadence :-) Brooke
Comment from michaelcahill
I'm all alone in my room and I feel like standing up and cheering!! This is just wonderful as well as flawless. I would like to see this in the schools as something the students memorize and recite perhaps to start an assembly. Madly inspirational and exciting. This is an awesome piece of work. Well done! This is really a poem of the month, but I imagine you get too many reviews to keep the average up or however they figure that out. In any case, Bravo! mikey
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2014
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I'm all alone in my room and I feel like standing up and cheering!! This is just wonderful as well as flawless. I would like to see this in the schools as something the students memorize and recite perhaps to start an assembly. Madly inspirational and exciting. This is an awesome piece of work. Well done! This is really a poem of the month, but I imagine you get too many reviews to keep the average up or however they figure that out. In any case, Bravo! mikey
Comment Written 17-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2014
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Thank you so very much, Mikey - I'm honored by your comments and your generous sixth star. And yes, you got that one right - have not been nominated in over a year and a half. The formula and I do not get along :-) Brooke
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Sometimes when I get a few sixes out of the box I'm tempted to disable the piece just to qualify! Hahaha. Oh well, all part of the fun. mikey
Comment from Caressa_08
Very good advice, & it flows so nicely, showing that narrow-minded people should not to be confined to their bias views... For some, I think are just set in their ways & think they will never change...Case in point, my brother-in-law...Second stanza too, again, a good philosophy shared for us to understand through your poetry, an learn also about an octogram & like Sawyer's picture, what looks to be a favorite, place he likes to play in, amid a room which looks to have some other appealing things to do just that with & enjoy.
Caressa
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2014
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Very good advice, & it flows so nicely, showing that narrow-minded people should not to be confined to their bias views... For some, I think are just set in their ways & think they will never change...Case in point, my brother-in-law...Second stanza too, again, a good philosophy shared for us to understand through your poetry, an learn also about an octogram & like Sawyer's picture, what looks to be a favorite, place he likes to play in, amid a room which looks to have some other appealing things to do just that with & enjoy.
Caressa
Comment Written 17-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2014
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Caressa, thank you so very much :-) Brooke
Comment from Dutchie
This one is great, Brooke. Well there is a difference between
knowledge and wisdom. An open mind brings wisdom by experience.. Knowledge is what we learned. We need both.
But it is wisdom that opens our mind and heart.. Great one, Brooke.
Fia
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2014
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This one is great, Brooke. Well there is a difference between
knowledge and wisdom. An open mind brings wisdom by experience.. Knowledge is what we learned. We need both.
But it is wisdom that opens our mind and heart.. Great one, Brooke.
Fia
Comment Written 17-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2014
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Fia, thank you so very much :-) Brooke
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You're welcome Brooke!! By the way. I can't keep you up to date about Ine. She did not post for a while. When I mailed her and asked if she could talk, she said she would call me if she can talk. I'm worried!!! Fia
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Her state of mind is what worries me. I don't think she is taking well all that has happened to her. I do hope she calls you soon :-)
Comment from tfawcus
What a marvellous poem. The octogram has a lovely ring and rhythm to it. I must try one! This is such a powerful yet gentle plea for open-mindedness. How often we can become imprisoned by our prejudices. 'By nets of bias be not caught' is a stunning individual line that caught my eye especially.
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2014
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What a marvellous poem. The octogram has a lovely ring and rhythm to it. I must try one! This is such a powerful yet gentle plea for open-mindedness. How often we can become imprisoned by our prejudices. 'By nets of bias be not caught' is a stunning individual line that caught my eye especially.
Comment Written 17-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2014
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Thank you, tfawcus, for your thoughtful response to this poem and for your generous six stars :-) Brooke
