Comment from Bill Schott

Excellent

I really like this nonet which seems to be a nice poem that was retooled to serve, quite well, in this capacity as a nonet formatted work. I like its ending humor as a negative.

 Comment Written 15-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 15-Jul-2014

Thanks, Bill.

I did write this specifically for the nonet contest, but I wanted to try just using normal rhyme and rhythm split into appropriate line lengths - seems to have worked.

Steve

Comment from BlueFlag

Excellent

very good poem and rhymes
Every poem is unique and it's own way I personally never knew all these kinds of poems and they all have there own catagory
worthy of my 5 star review.

 Comment Written 15-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 15-Jul-2014

Thanks for the kind words.

Steve

Comment from Cin

Excellent

Love the last line - I felt myself unequivocally falling through every line and word until I came to the untimely demise of - splat! - so well put. Lol.

 Comment Written 15-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 15-Jul-2014

Thank you - avoid the splat at all costs.

reply by Cin on 15-Jul-2014

mmm - sadly I have splatted a couple of times - I'm in time-out for the moment :-)

Comment from kiwijenny

Excellent

I like this nonet....I like the fluidity...how it flows.....until SPLAT!!!!!!!!!!
What a great progression........well done
God bless.................................

 Comment Written 15-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 15-Jul-2014

Thanks, Jenny!

Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin

Excellent

Oooooh, yes, I'll catch you! No splat, please! Love the poem, but what a surprise ending. You definitely picked a great photo to go with this as well.

Nice piece of work. Good luck in the contest.

Cheers * Blessings
Keep Smilin'... Jax

 Comment Written 14-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 15-Jul-2014

Thanks for the review - and the catch!

Comment from reconciled

Excellent

the baby bird...doesn't receive answer ...if he asks at all....before leaping do or fall...-smile-...the human child doesn't wait for his parent to approve next step...but takes it in chance of success....if you leap you're going to weep...if you don't....even harder. love Michael

 Comment Written 14-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 15-Jul-2014

Thank you!

Comment from rrabinow

Excellent

I enjoyed reading your poem. Great job with your nonet poem. I feel that your poem flowed really well from start to finish. Best of luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 14-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 15-Jul-2014

Thank you!

Comment from GWHARGIS

Excellent

I liked the seriousness of this in the beginning then the end with t he splat. Great nonet. The rhythm and the flow were great. I saw no spags. Great emotional tone to this.

 Comment Written 14-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 15-Jul-2014

Thank you!

Comment from b.anderson65

Excellent

Flow of this poem is great. The rhyming ADDED TO THIS. The meaning is very clear and could be used as a teaching tool.

Good choice of words. Also good choice of art work. I like the ending,dynamic

 Comment Written 14-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 15-Jul-2014

Thank you!

Comment from Acquired Taste

Excellent

This truly kept my attention - glad it did, because at the end I just laughed - heartily.

The photo grabbed the first bit of attention, the words kept the reader going, your sense of humor sealed it.

Best of luck in the contest.....AT=/

 Comment Written 14-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 15-Jul-2014

Thank you! Avoid the SPLAT at all costs.