As I Go Down and Down and Down
a quatern142 total reviews
Comment from Treischel
A very cute and clever Quatern done with aabb rhyming. I liked the juxtaposition of up and down. Simple and upbeat. Nice touch of humor too.
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2014
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A very cute and clever Quatern done with aabb rhyming. I liked the juxtaposition of up and down. Simple and upbeat. Nice touch of humor too.
Comment Written 05-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2014
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Treischel, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from mermaids
The feel and flow of your words creates the feeling of bending over and looking up,just like a toddler trying to see the world from a different viewpoint. This is a creative and unique subject for a poem.
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2014
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The feel and flow of your words creates the feeling of bending over and looking up,just like a toddler trying to see the world from a different viewpoint. This is a creative and unique subject for a poem.
Comment Written 05-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2014
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Elaine, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from elchupakabra
I enjoyed this topsy turvy piece. I thought you did a really great job constructing this playful piece. The imagery you employed in this quatrain was perfect and I thought the flow and cadence was right on point, as per usual. Great work overall on this piece, thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2014
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I enjoyed this topsy turvy piece. I thought you did a really great job constructing this playful piece. The imagery you employed in this quatrain was perfect and I thought the flow and cadence was right on point, as per usual. Great work overall on this piece, thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 05-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2014
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elchupakabra, I'm so glad you enjoyed. Thanks for your review :-) Brooke
Comment from James Dooney
Ah it looks like the two little guys are having a good old fun time as they roll down the hill in joy and excitement ! Well done here again !
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2014
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Ah it looks like the two little guys are having a good old fun time as they roll down the hill in joy and excitement ! Well done here again !
Comment Written 05-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2014
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Thank you so much, James :-) Brooke
Comment from michaelcahill
Amazing how you come up with these and they reach a logical conclusion! So much fun to read. It seems like they are just going to be fun and silly, which is fine, but you always end up with perfect sense to them. Wonderful, mikey
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2014
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Amazing how you come up with these and they reach a logical conclusion! So much fun to read. It seems like they are just going to be fun and silly, which is fine, but you always end up with perfect sense to them. Wonderful, mikey
Comment Written 05-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2014
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Mikey, making sense, always one of my goals. LOL Thanks so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Janet Foor
What a fun poem to read aloud. Great rhyming couplets, good use of alliteration and a wonderful repeating line. You have a delightful way of bringing joy and whimsy to simple words like up and down.
Happy 4th
Janet
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2014
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What a fun poem to read aloud. Great rhyming couplets, good use of alliteration and a wonderful repeating line. You have a delightful way of bringing joy and whimsy to simple words like up and down.
Happy 4th
Janet
Comment Written 04-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2014
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Happy Fourth to you, too, Janet, and thank you so much for your generous sixth star :-) Brooke
Comment from Goodauthor
This is an excellent example of nonsense poetry. It poses a good question. Just where it up when I'm standing on my head? Ha Ha.
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2014
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This is an excellent example of nonsense poetry. It poses a good question. Just where it up when I'm standing on my head? Ha Ha.
Comment Written 04-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2014
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Goodauthor, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from MisinformedPoet
A lovely, silly poem with lots of rhythm and a fun repeating line. Great use of alliteration to carry you through the lines and l really love the lines:
"the up is nowhere near the floor,
for that is where the bottom's found "
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2014
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A lovely, silly poem with lots of rhythm and a fun repeating line. Great use of alliteration to carry you through the lines and l really love the lines:
"the up is nowhere near the floor,
for that is where the bottom's found "
Comment Written 04-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2014
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MisinformedPoet, thank you so very much :-) Brooke
Comment from Preston McWhorter
Hi, :-)Brooke,
As I Go Down and Down, and Down"
Is a first rate poem with with excellent rhyme and rhyme scheme that poses a question that young child might ask in a very poetic way in excellent figurative language and imagery (
(birds branches live in up?)
Preston
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2014
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Hi, :-)Brooke,
As I Go Down and Down, and Down"
Is a first rate poem with with excellent rhyme and rhyme scheme that poses a question that young child might ask in a very poetic way in excellent figurative language and imagery (
(birds branches live in up?)
Preston
Comment Written 04-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2014
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thanks so very much, Preston :-) Brooke
Comment from victor 66
Hey Brooke, I've just discovered this "quatern" format for a poem and find it most interesting. Your poems are always so good and so heartfelt, that I plan on using your piece here as an example when I give a quatern a try. So, thank you.
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2014
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Hey Brooke, I've just discovered this "quatern" format for a poem and find it most interesting. Your poems are always so good and so heartfelt, that I plan on using your piece here as an example when I give a quatern a try. So, thank you.
Comment Written 04-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2014
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Victor, thank you so very much :-) I look forward to reading yours :-) Brooke
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"Be careful what you wish for", Brooke. As soon as I figure out the difference a QUATRAIN and QUATERN, you'll be the first. I just looked up both formats. I know! "Who says you can't teach an old dog new tricks?"
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the quatern is the one with the repeating, descending line and consists of four quatrains :-)
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Yes, Brooke. Thank you for your patience. Take care.
