Steve's Poems for Kids
Viewing comments for Chapter 4 "Miss Melody and the Smileys"A collection of my children's poems
28 total reviews
Comment from closetpoetjester
A marvellous melody steve and a delightful childrens poem. Congrats on the win with a resounding message that the funnies are far better to be affected with than the frownies. I'll attest to that and I ensure I have a good belly laugh at least four times a day. That's a good replacement for the old apple a day, me thinks. It's working SO far, anyway. Your vernacular is terrific and that strordin'ry line cracked me up. Your ability to make it look effortlessly slangish and conform to meter correctly is quite admirable.
Well done with this rollocking rhyming entry.
Cheers P
reply by the author on 30-May-2014
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A marvellous melody steve and a delightful childrens poem. Congrats on the win with a resounding message that the funnies are far better to be affected with than the frownies. I'll attest to that and I ensure I have a good belly laugh at least four times a day. That's a good replacement for the old apple a day, me thinks. It's working SO far, anyway. Your vernacular is terrific and that strordin'ry line cracked me up. Your ability to make it look effortlessly slangish and conform to meter correctly is quite admirable.
Well done with this rollocking rhyming entry.
Cheers P
Comment Written 29-May-2014
reply by the author on 30-May-2014
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Yeah, I can knock these up with alarming ease - or should that be 'strordin'ry ease? Thinking of gathering my kids' poems together this year and trying to find a publisher.....
Steve
Comment from MagKing
A fine piece indeed!
You did well with the rhyming and the steady flow.
But the syllable scheme isn't perfect and so could not win my Six.....But you did very well!
Congratulations on your winning!
MagKing
reply by the author on 19-May-2014
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A fine piece indeed!
You did well with the rhyming and the steady flow.
But the syllable scheme isn't perfect and so could not win my Six.....But you did very well!
Congratulations on your winning!
MagKing
Comment Written 19-May-2014
reply by the author on 19-May-2014
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Well, thanks for the kind words and the nearly six!
I'm pretty sure you'll find the vast majority of classical poems are far from perfect in syllable count...
Steve
Comment from Mai Mai
This is an interesting piece. It has a nice child-like rhythm with a splash of fun. You seem to meet the criteria of the contest. Good job and good luck.
Mai Mai
reply by the author on 19-May-2014
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This is an interesting piece. It has a nice child-like rhythm with a splash of fun. You seem to meet the criteria of the contest. Good job and good luck.
Mai Mai
Comment Written 18-May-2014
reply by the author on 19-May-2014
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Thanks for the kind words.
Steve
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Hi Kiwisteve,
Congrats on the win! I can see why, this is a really cute story poem with Miss Melody.
Enjoyed it.
Cheers,
Keep Smilin'... Jax
reply by the author on 19-May-2014
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Hi Kiwisteve,
Congrats on the win! I can see why, this is a really cute story poem with Miss Melody.
Enjoyed it.
Cheers,
Keep Smilin'... Jax
Comment Written 18-May-2014
reply by the author on 19-May-2014
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Thank you, Jax.
Steve
Comment from Alan K Pease
A wonderful poem of imagination for a child and his/her adult full of alliteration, resonance and rhythm ensconced in splendid rhyme. Congratulations on your win!
reply by the author on 19-May-2014
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A wonderful poem of imagination for a child and his/her adult full of alliteration, resonance and rhythm ensconced in splendid rhyme. Congratulations on your win!
Comment Written 18-May-2014
reply by the author on 19-May-2014
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Alan, thanks so much for the kind words and the six stars.
Steve
Comment from c_lucas
Congratulations on your win. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words targeted for the younger children. It has a smooth flow of words.
reply by the author on 19-May-2014
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Congratulations on your win. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words targeted for the younger children. It has a smooth flow of words.
Comment Written 18-May-2014
reply by the author on 19-May-2014
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Thanks, Charlie.
Steve
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You're welcome, Steve. Charlie
Comment from Smoothiecool
good luck in the contest
your cleverly chosen words and images allow the reader to see and feel the fun with Miss Melody Madison Millicent Moyes as they adventure to Smiley Town Jam Jamboree
good rhyme theme through out
good alliteration all through verses
great fun story a child can relate to
cheers Smoothiecool
reply by the author on 19-May-2014
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good luck in the contest
your cleverly chosen words and images allow the reader to see and feel the fun with Miss Melody Madison Millicent Moyes as they adventure to Smiley Town Jam Jamboree
good rhyme theme through out
good alliteration all through verses
great fun story a child can relate to
cheers Smoothiecool
Comment Written 18-May-2014
reply by the author on 19-May-2014
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Thanks for the very kind words.
Steve
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most welcome..SC
Comment from Leineco
Oh my goodness! How lucky could Miss Melody be??
Off to the world where sunnilicious sweet Smileys abound
Her, an her crew, with nary a fret or frumpdumbled frown
to framble and jamble at Smiley Town's Jam-Jamboree!
Whoopie!
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reply by the author on 19-May-2014
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Oh my goodness! How lucky could Miss Melody be??
Off to the world where sunnilicious sweet Smileys abound
Her, an her crew, with nary a fret or frumpdumbled frown
to framble and jamble at Smiley Town's Jam-Jamboree!
Whoopie!
o
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o
Comment Written 18-May-2014
reply by the author on 19-May-2014
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A fortunate and talented child indeed.
Thanks for the fun review.
Steve
Comment from JB Lynn
I really enjoyed this piece a lot. I think my favorite part were all the made up words. It reminded me of a Dr. Seuss poem. All the rhymes seemed to work perfectly, and I think children would really enjoy this. Thank you for sharing and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 19-May-2014
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I really enjoyed this piece a lot. I think my favorite part were all the made up words. It reminded me of a Dr. Seuss poem. All the rhymes seemed to work perfectly, and I think children would really enjoy this. Thank you for sharing and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 18-May-2014
reply by the author on 19-May-2014
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Thanks for the review and the good wishes which seem to have worked.
Steve
Comment from NurseBarb
So very creative. I love the rhyming. It flows for the reader perfectly. I love the made up words, especially framjumptious. You have extraordinary talent. Good luck in the contest. I really think you'll do well.
reply by the author on 19-May-2014
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So very creative. I love the rhyming. It flows for the reader perfectly. I love the made up words, especially framjumptious. You have extraordinary talent. Good luck in the contest. I really think you'll do well.
Comment Written 18-May-2014
reply by the author on 19-May-2014
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Thanks for the kind words.
Steve
