Comment from ann marie mazz

Excellent

Rating of Chapter 1 - The Wilshire Clinic
hello gayle

I found this intriguing
it was a great opening chapter and beginning story
you take us to a place and scene that truly tells a tale

nice touch of the breakfast to which sets up the stage for the next chapter

thank you for sharing your talent
this was a nice read
ann marie

 Comment Written 19-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 19-Jul-2014

Hi Ann Marie, thank you so much for the kind words. I just finished editing this one, and it's off to publish.

Thanks,
Gayle

Comment from kidsrcute

Excellent

Rating of Chapter 11 - New Lives
I love the way you get into your characters minds. It is just like a true stream of thought. You came up with the perfect job for Brad. Great chapter. Thanks for sharing. :)kidsrcute

 Comment Written 07-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 10-Jul-2014

I'm glad you're enjoying this one. If you go to 'bookcase it' you can get access to the whole thing without having to go in and out.

Thank you so much!

Gayle

Comment from kidsrcute

Excellent

Rating of Chapter 10 - Julia and Brad
Since you are so much further along on this story, I don't even know if you go back to previous chapters to read reviews from them. This is an intriguing and interesting story. I wish I had more time to finish it, but I am extremely busy with work and family. I try to read it when I can. I can hardly wait to find out what is going to happen. My question is what about his credit card, what name would be on it. Was he so enamored with Julia that he forgot about the name on the credit card and will it cause him problems later. Maybe I'll just have to wait and see as I read further. This is a great story. Good luck with it and thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 05-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 06-Jul-2014

I know I should remember your name but I'm drawing a blank. Thank you so much for the great comments and help! That's a great point and believe it or not, I'm in the middle of editing the book right now, and I'm going to research whether he can get a 'name free' credit card - like a burn phone? 'Course, I could just have him pay cash, but that is a question others will ask, too!

Tell you what, get me your email address and when it's done, I'll send you an Ebook!

Thanks again so much,

Hugs,
Gayle

reply by kidsrcute on 06-Jul-2014

You probably don't remember me because I am new to the website. I joined in May and I love it but don't get enough time on it. My email is svkids@sbcglobal.net. It is so kind of you to send me the book. It is an awesome story. Thanks again. :) Marilouise aka kidsrcute

reply by the author on 06-Jul-2014

I had you mixed up with someone else, but it's still so nice to meet you. I'll make note of your email, but if you haven't heard from be with the book by Sep 1st, nudge me again!

Grins<~>
Gayle

reply by kidsrcute on 07-Jul-2014

I have been reading it on your profile, so can continue to do so. I can also continue to send you reviews. When I started reading the story I wasn't sure about how reviews worked but am learning a lot. I love this website and have encountered a lot of great talent. It is humbling. :) kidsrcute

Comment from Judy Couch

Excellent

Rating of Chapter 34 - Dobermans In Charge
This chapter is well written and could be interesting if I had been able to figure out who everyone was. I think I have the dogs straight. The people I'm not sure about but that's to be expected since I'm reading a chapter from somewhere other than the beginning of the book. It might have been helpful if you had put in a few author's notes to guide the reader.

 Comment Written 27-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 27-Jun-2014

Thank you Judy, for the kind comments and review. I guess when I do the next book, I'll put in author's notes.

Thank you so much,
Gayle

Comment from Jen Gentry

Exceptional

Rating of Chapter 34 - Dobermans In Charge
Gayle
This is a very well done and clean chapter. The dialogue is very realistic and fleshes out the characters very nicely. Well done chapter. Congrats on the book of the month nomination and Good Luck.
Jen

 Comment Written 26-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 26-Jun-2014

Hey Jen, always so good to see you! How're things going for you? Keep me posted, I miss you!

Thanks so much for the sixer and the great comments. I really enjoyed this one!

Chat soon, much love and hugs,
Gayle

Comment from snowwatt

Good

Rating of Chapter 1 - The Wilshire Clinic
I am a little lost, why did Zack have his new face done. There is nothing in the story that says that he needed any done. I can feel how Hali feels before her surgery. This story is very warm and it has kept me on my toes.

 Comment Written 29-May-2014

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reply by the author on 29-May-2014

This is the first chapter. Obviously more is revealed as we go on.

Comment from nelliesellie

Excellent

Rating of Chapter 29 - Pep Talk
IU love the story. Countries different norms and rules cause conflict I am an American Our rules are modern, but I can not say they fit every situation Many countries are still stuck in the time when individuals must seek their own justice. Great work.

 Comment Written 28-May-2014

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reply by the author on 29-May-2014

Thank you so much for the kind comments and input. Your review is most appreciated.

Gayle

Comment from bookishfabler

Exceptional

Rating of Chapter 36 - Perfect End
Oh my. I've been gone so long I hadn't realized I had missed so much. So here Ia am reading the epilogue and hadn't reviewed so many earlier chapters. My Gosh. I love it. I will have to try and find time to go back. Miss you, miss your book and miss FS.
hugs Heidi

 Comment Written 19-May-2014

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reply by the author on 19-May-2014

Well, Heidi! So darned good to see you, girl. Been ages, but that means you're busy, so that's good. Still! Come back more often!

And that sixer is so gorgeous, don't cha think? You picked a good one just for me. :) Thank you!

Try to make time for us, my friend! I miss you!

Hugs,
Gayle

reply by bookishfabler on 27-May-2014

I miss you bunches.

Comment from Writingfundimension

Excellent

Rating of Chapter 36 - Perfect End
I do agree this is the Perfect End, Gayle. I don't know if I could live with the thought of murdering someone, but Julia has shown herself to be a pretty tough lady. Maybe she feels justice was served -- it probably was. Good luck with the publication of this fine novel! Hugs, Bev

 Comment Written 18-May-2014

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reply by the author on 18-May-2014

I couldn't either, not like that. Self-defense, big difference, so I just had to fix that. Glad you liked the way I did it.

Thank you so much for the great comments and input you've given me over the months. Really appreciated,

Hugs,
Gayle

reply by Writingfundimension on 18-May-2014

You're so very welcome, Gayle. xx Bev

Comment from Allezw2

Excellent

Rating of Chapter 36 - Perfect End
- Eye witnesses

I think eyewitness is one word.

AS said before, drooping onto the caboose leaves a long train ahead!

Back to catch up,

Fantasist

 Comment Written 18-May-2014

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reply by the author on 18-May-2014

Hi Wayne, one word. Will make fix for sure. thanks for the eagle eye and fine review,

Hugs,
Gayle

reply by Allezw2 on 20-May-2014

De nada, senora.