Warrior Poet
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Comment from ScarletAfflictions
Bravo! Bravo! I'm on a Marillion jaunt tonight. It's like getting to eat a whole bunch of chocolate after a long fast. lol. Thank you for your great pen! Just wonderful stuff, M!
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Bravo! Bravo! I'm on a Marillion jaunt tonight. It's like getting to eat a whole bunch of chocolate after a long fast. lol. Thank you for your great pen! Just wonderful stuff, M!
Comment Written 03-Jun-2014
Comment from nelliesellie
I love the picture. I love the poem. Writers are like warriors in a way. We are defending certain beliefs and ideas. As we age, we wonder if we can keep up the battle. We have serious doubts, but we fight on. Great work.
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I love the picture. I love the poem. Writers are like warriors in a way. We are defending certain beliefs and ideas. As we age, we wonder if we can keep up the battle. We have serious doubts, but we fight on. Great work.
Comment Written 23-May-2014
Comment from Diny
Boy this sure gets my vote- You are always a joy to read- I get so much within these lines these words these inspiring phrases- A master you will always be wield that mighty pen David - Your talent is mind boggling! Write ON-Di
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Boy this sure gets my vote- You are always a joy to read- I get so much within these lines these words these inspiring phrases- A master you will always be wield that mighty pen David - Your talent is mind boggling! Write ON-Di
Comment Written 21-May-2014
Comment from angel123
I enjoyed reading your interesting poem. It flows and rhymes well and good alliteration of a, s. b, w, and I words.
angel123
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I enjoyed reading your interesting poem. It flows and rhymes well and good alliteration of a, s. b, w, and I words.
angel123
Comment Written 21-May-2014
Comment from LoannaLois
Wonderfully constructed and beautifully written. The power of the man inside needs no further help than your words of determination. A six
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Wonderfully constructed and beautifully written. The power of the man inside needs no further help than your words of determination. A six
Comment Written 21-May-2014
Comment from Just2Write
Another exceptional poem from your talented soul, David.
The meter, rhymes and content are superb. No wonder it was nominated as POM.
So much introspection and so relevant to both war, and the battle we all face as we grow older. Our swords and wit may not be as sharp as they once were - but, there is still fire and fury left enough.
You are such a talented writer.
Rose.
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Another exceptional poem from your talented soul, David.
The meter, rhymes and content are superb. No wonder it was nominated as POM.
So much introspection and so relevant to both war, and the battle we all face as we grow older. Our swords and wit may not be as sharp as they once were - but, there is still fire and fury left enough.
You are such a talented writer.
Rose.
Comment Written 19-May-2014
Comment from Bryana
Hi David, I don't know how I missed this
exceptional poem. I love these lines...
To die with honor gained when life is lost
So I will fetch my sword and breach the wall
Once more to reach my peak - before I fall.
I hope everything is fine with you.
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Hi David, I don't know how I missed this
exceptional poem. I love these lines...
To die with honor gained when life is lost
So I will fetch my sword and breach the wall
Once more to reach my peak - before I fall.
I hope everything is fine with you.
Comment Written 16-May-2014
Comment from paulah60
Hey David, I'm not playing catch-ups this time (and I notice you've also been MIA!), but I can't overlook this exceptional, powerful piece of writing!
As always, impeccable form, but, as you know, I'm more into fleshing out the subtext. And the title, content, and pic combine to suggest a sense of reflection on the evolution of the warrior within: from the idealistic posture of the adolescent, fighting a whole lot of causes ('an angry, young man's game'), to someone on a conscious healing path, whose spiritual warrior picks his/her battles, and no longer suffers fools gladly. Interestingly, the young (uninitiated) warrior needs 'armor', but the evolved one understands the value of fetching his/her sword and breaching the wall (as you put it). It's heavy-duty work, but we realise that trying to keep our early defences in place is self-defeating. Ultimately, the older warrior stands strong in his/her vulnerability (which means we need to retreat occasionally and lick our wounds!)
Also implicit here is that we acquire the wisdom to handle our partings with more dignity than with rancor (even though we'll feel it at first!).
Great build up of tension from the first lines, alluding to the fact that we can sure feel worn down by reality; a reflection on the actuality of alliances and ruptures; and the awareness that once that 'honor' is gained, there's really no other way to live our lives effectively ('But battle is the heat that warms my blood').
I do so love your deep pieces of writing!
Cheers
Paula
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Hey David, I'm not playing catch-ups this time (and I notice you've also been MIA!), but I can't overlook this exceptional, powerful piece of writing!
As always, impeccable form, but, as you know, I'm more into fleshing out the subtext. And the title, content, and pic combine to suggest a sense of reflection on the evolution of the warrior within: from the idealistic posture of the adolescent, fighting a whole lot of causes ('an angry, young man's game'), to someone on a conscious healing path, whose spiritual warrior picks his/her battles, and no longer suffers fools gladly. Interestingly, the young (uninitiated) warrior needs 'armor', but the evolved one understands the value of fetching his/her sword and breaching the wall (as you put it). It's heavy-duty work, but we realise that trying to keep our early defences in place is self-defeating. Ultimately, the older warrior stands strong in his/her vulnerability (which means we need to retreat occasionally and lick our wounds!)
Also implicit here is that we acquire the wisdom to handle our partings with more dignity than with rancor (even though we'll feel it at first!).
Great build up of tension from the first lines, alluding to the fact that we can sure feel worn down by reality; a reflection on the actuality of alliances and ruptures; and the awareness that once that 'honor' is gained, there's really no other way to live our lives effectively ('But battle is the heat that warms my blood').
I do so love your deep pieces of writing!
Cheers
Paula
Comment Written 05-May-2014
Comment from michaelcahill
Okay, twelve hours later. I was about to say, I'm sorry I don't have a six for this, but there is a remedy for that. Damn, this is good. For some reason I took this as totally about a poet putting his pen to paper. I know that it isn't the intent, but it hit me that way and inspired me in that way. Wow, there are so many original and great lines in this. What can I say, this is AWESOME! mikey
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Okay, twelve hours later. I was about to say, I'm sorry I don't have a six for this, but there is a remedy for that. Damn, this is good. For some reason I took this as totally about a poet putting his pen to paper. I know that it isn't the intent, but it hit me that way and inspired me in that way. Wow, there are so many original and great lines in this. What can I say, this is AWESOME! mikey
Comment Written 04-May-2014
Comment from 24chas
I like the defiant tone of this piece, Marillion. I can picture the old warrior who won't go out of this life alone. Nice job.
reply by the author on 02-May-2014
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I like the defiant tone of this piece, Marillion. I can picture the old warrior who won't go out of this life alone. Nice job.
Comment Written 02-May-2014
reply by the author on 02-May-2014
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Thanks so much, Chas. I appreciate it!
