The Bard of Bel Air
A homeless man sees more than people realize.15 total reviews
Comment from GracieAnn
Rating of Chapter 36 - Lucy In The Sky With Diamonds
Mikey, hilarious-"Studies say that the nitrates in those things will kill you. Ohhhhh, I'm glad I'm not an Oscar Meyer Wiener...
Great suspense to the end of the shooting scene. Perhaps the head wound could set the Bard's mind straight or reset the brain. Stranger than fiction. Not sure you'd want to go much further. Good way to wind down. :0 GracieAnn
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Mikey, hilarious-"Studies say that the nitrates in those things will kill you. Ohhhhh, I'm glad I'm not an Oscar Meyer Wiener...
Great suspense to the end of the shooting scene. Perhaps the head wound could set the Bard's mind straight or reset the brain. Stranger than fiction. Not sure you'd want to go much further. Good way to wind down. :0 GracieAnn
Comment Written 25-May-2014
Comment from l.raven
Rating of Chapter 34 - Poppers Anyone?
Hi Michael, well Winston's paranoia is running a muck...and the girls (Lucy and Ruby) are just taking it in....both girls are playing it cool...time for things to start happing...a lot ore people now...and growing...Love your story...Moving on...Luff Linda xxoo
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Hi Michael, well Winston's paranoia is running a muck...and the girls (Lucy and Ruby) are just taking it in....both girls are playing it cool...time for things to start happing...a lot ore people now...and growing...Love your story...Moving on...Luff Linda xxoo
Comment Written 25-May-2014
Comment from GracieAnn
Rating of Chapter 35 - The Harbor Cruz!
Mikey, a throwback to the Beatles song and of course the LSD acrostic. This installment was easy to follow and added a new dimension to the story ling now that the authorities are salivating for a kill, LOL. Harpsters possessive with an apostrophe? Good work. :0 GracieAnn
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Mikey, a throwback to the Beatles song and of course the LSD acrostic. This installment was easy to follow and added a new dimension to the story ling now that the authorities are salivating for a kill, LOL. Harpsters possessive with an apostrophe? Good work. :0 GracieAnn
Comment Written 25-May-2014
Comment from Nosha17
Rating of Chapter 36 - Lucy In The Sky With Diamonds
That was a marathon semi ending. Very exciting and well compiled. I think you have to go on a little more to tie everything up. Have you submitted your other book for publication and hope you are going to with this one. Great story. Faye
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That was a marathon semi ending. Very exciting and well compiled. I think you have to go on a little more to tie everything up. Have you submitted your other book for publication and hope you are going to with this one. Great story. Faye
Comment Written 25-May-2014
Comment from CR Delport
Rating of Chapter 36 - Lucy In The Sky With Diamonds
When I start a book, I have a general idea of what I want to achieve in the story, and I always try to figure out how I want it to end. Once I have the ending, then I start writing the book and everything that happens leads up to the ending I had in mind. I know it doesn't always work out that way :)
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When I start a book, I have a general idea of what I want to achieve in the story, and I always try to figure out how I want it to end. Once I have the ending, then I start writing the book and everything that happens leads up to the ending I had in mind. I know it doesn't always work out that way :)
Comment Written 25-May-2014
Comment from seaglass
Rating of Chapter 36 - Lucy In The Sky With Diamonds
You pulled all this action off with real skill and snuck in some unexpected drama; a Mexican standoff with a needle, gun, knife and hotdog. Now what to do? Bard's life is in your hands...only your muse decides.
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You pulled all this action off with real skill and snuck in some unexpected drama; a Mexican standoff with a needle, gun, knife and hotdog. Now what to do? Bard's life is in your hands...only your muse decides.
Comment Written 25-May-2014
Comment from ravenblack
Rating of Chapter 36 - Lucy In The Sky With Diamonds
Please, don't take offence, but overall I think you threw too many kitchen sinks into what should have been the Bard' s and Tenyaya' s story. The Bard and Tenyaya are a unique take on Monk and his revolving cast of assistants. This would have worked great as a more traditional murder mystery. What I mean by traditional is no Blackwater, A-Team espionage with the Chinese and biological weapons thrown in, but a cop and her off-th-wall informant/partner who does all the work in his own way.
reply by the author on 24-May-2014
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Please, don't take offence, but overall I think you threw too many kitchen sinks into what should have been the Bard' s and Tenyaya' s story. The Bard and Tenyaya are a unique take on Monk and his revolving cast of assistants. This would have worked great as a more traditional murder mystery. What I mean by traditional is no Blackwater, A-Team espionage with the Chinese and biological weapons thrown in, but a cop and her off-th-wall informant/partner who does all the work in his own way.
Comment Written 24-May-2014
reply by the author on 24-May-2014
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Not at all. I did reach a point where I just had to end this. It got too far off the track. I plan to come back to it after a little while and return to the original thrust of it which is as you describe. I'm not disappointed with this, but it wasn't where I intended to go. I have to watch my tendancy to throw crazy ideas out there. Hahaha. I jumped off a cliff here and had no choice but to land in the water and swim. But, I'm on shore now, drying off... Enough of that metaphor... mikey
Comment from country ranch writer
Rating of Chapter 36 - Lucy In The Sky With Diamonds
WILL THEY TAKE HIM OFF HIS MEDS AND TRY TO MAKE HIM RATIONAL WILL THEY GET HIS MEDICAL RECORDS FROM THE DEAD DOCTOR? WILL LUCY BE ABLE TO LOVE BARD FOR WHO HE IS THE WAY HE IS?
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WILL THEY TAKE HIM OFF HIS MEDS AND TRY TO MAKE HIM RATIONAL WILL THEY GET HIS MEDICAL RECORDS FROM THE DEAD DOCTOR? WILL LUCY BE ABLE TO LOVE BARD FOR WHO HE IS THE WAY HE IS?
Comment Written 24-May-2014
Comment from ravenblack
Rating of Chapter 35 - The Harbor Cruz!
When the bard spoke "normally" for one line as if he could channel Chuck Norris, I knew they were in trouble. But then throw in cinnamon toast and a few one-armed pushups signals all will be well.
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When the bard spoke "normally" for one line as if he could channel Chuck Norris, I knew they were in trouble. But then throw in cinnamon toast and a few one-armed pushups signals all will be well.
Comment Written 24-May-2014
Comment from Nosha17
Rating of Chapter 35 - The Harbor Cruz!
Fast moving, action-packed chapter with great dialogue between the co-conspirators. I don't know how you keep track of all the comings and goings. Great write. Faye
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Fast moving, action-packed chapter with great dialogue between the co-conspirators. I don't know how you keep track of all the comings and goings. Great write. Faye
Comment Written 24-May-2014
