Comment from Muffins

Excellent

Talk about how to solve a problem! Creepy and enjoyable. Great point of view, a narrator with a control, deadpan( no pun intended) sense of humor. The comedic last line is priceless. Good work.

 Comment Written 24-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 24-Apr-2014

Thank you for the excellent review.

Comment from Njorgensen

Excellent

This is great. I love the suspense as the poem builds to its ending. It's interesting how horror lends itself to the beauty and melancholy of poetry.

Njorgensen

 Comment Written 23-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 24-Apr-2014

Thank you for the excellent review.

Comment from ravenblack

Excellent

Well, prepare this happy meal and you will never be nagged again. I sensed a sinister slant with "coffee I'll freshly grind". I thought maybe something (or someone) would be ground later. Screaming with your mouth closed makes perfect sense, the silent scream of a poisoned brain.

 Comment Written 23-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 23-Apr-2014

Thank you for the excellent review.

Comment from RGstar

Excellent

OH, macabre indeed, in all its silence and mystery.
I wondered where this was going to when I saw the mouth as your main point, along with the demise of the protagonist.
A good entry, with this silent assassin.
Best regards,
RGstar

 Comment Written 23-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 23-Apr-2014

Thank you for the kind and excellent review.

Comment from kiwijenny

Excellent

This is horrific .....a mouth now laced with poison..
I laced the gazpacho with strychnine .......
Well done................................
God bless

 Comment Written 22-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 22-Apr-2014

Thank you, Jenny, for the excellent review.

Comment from Selina Stambi

Excellent

Oh, my! Here I am thinking I'm reading about a romantic dinner a deux and find that it's a 100 word version of Arsenic and Old Lace!

Very cleverly done!

Best wishes for the contest, mystery poet.

Have a lovely week!

Sonali :)

 Comment Written 22-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 22-Apr-2014

Thank you for your excellent review.

Comment from Karen B.

Exceptional

I love this - horror with a giggle. :) Unique and very well written. Perfect entry in the contest, where I am headed to vote right now.

 Comment Written 22-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 22-Apr-2014

Thank you, Karen, for your fun review, super rating, and kind words.

Comment from Carole Rosa

Excellent

To the author of With Your Mouth Closed, Well, Hamlet has nothing on you. This prose within a poem was delightful and amusing. It is creative and assumes the qualifications for the prompt. Hmmm! She screamed with her mouth closed. Rest in peace. It's a fun read. Carole

 Comment Written 22-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 22-Apr-2014

Thank you, Carole, for the excellent review.

Comment from nelliesellie

Excellent

I love the picture. I love the poem. At least she sent him out in style. Men should watch how they talk to women. Men use their size and strength to keep control. Women use their charms and brains. Men will be put in a corner where their strength and size does not matter. Great work. Good luck with the contest.

 Comment Written 22-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 22-Apr-2014

Thank you, nellie, for the excellent review.

Comment from Dorothy Farrell

Excellent

Oh, clever, - as I read I did not realise I was reading the horror prompt but you have written an eloquent poem that fits the bill regarding horror. Good luck in the contest. Regards Dorothy

 Comment Written 22-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 22-Apr-2014

Thank you, Dorothy, for the excellent review.