The Ant
rhyming quatrains in 8/6/8/6 and 8/7/8/7159 total reviews
Comment from poetbear
This little guy gets to me.
Reminds of my nephew Brendan.
He is 24 and stands six feet three.
This is veryt sweet and is the prrfext way to show how this type of child is magical and the future will be bright for him.
Just as it is for Brendan.
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2014
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This little guy gets to me.
Reminds of my nephew Brendan.
He is 24 and stands six feet three.
This is veryt sweet and is the prrfext way to show how this type of child is magical and the future will be bright for him.
Just as it is for Brendan.
Comment Written 19-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2014
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Thanks so much, Maddy. Sawyer's Dad and his Uncle Eric on our side of the family are tall, so I'm hoping Sawyer will grow up to be a tall guy like Brendan. :-) Brooke
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Brendan's dad stands six three.
Brendan's Uncle (my husband) stands six feet five inches tall.
Comment from w.j.debi
I am sorry I missed this one. Lots of excellent alliteration and some very fun rhymes. All the wonderful creatures of the world that we celebrate and the poor ant gets overlooked. I can just picture Sawyer stopping every time he sees them to stop and look and make everyone around him aware of the ants presence. Congratulations on your placing in the contest.
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2014
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I am sorry I missed this one. Lots of excellent alliteration and some very fun rhymes. All the wonderful creatures of the world that we celebrate and the poor ant gets overlooked. I can just picture Sawyer stopping every time he sees them to stop and look and make everyone around him aware of the ants presence. Congratulations on your placing in the contest.
Comment Written 17-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2014
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Debi, thank you so very much :-) Brooke
Comment from kipking
Thank you for reviewing my summer camp poem. I feel extremely lucky to have found your page and poems on my first day. I marvel at your facility with words and creative rhymes in this masterful poem. Pizzazzy and jazzy, flamboyance and annoyance. etc. Your first and last stanzas are 8-6-8-6 meter and the ones in between 8-7-8-7. That is the precise kind of metering I strive for and enjoy reading because of the rhythmic beat. I see you have received heaps of honors on this site and hope to learn from you while enjoying your works.
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2014
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Thank you for reviewing my summer camp poem. I feel extremely lucky to have found your page and poems on my first day. I marvel at your facility with words and creative rhymes in this masterful poem. Pizzazzy and jazzy, flamboyance and annoyance. etc. Your first and last stanzas are 8-6-8-6 meter and the ones in between 8-7-8-7. That is the precise kind of metering I strive for and enjoy reading because of the rhythmic beat. I see you have received heaps of honors on this site and hope to learn from you while enjoying your works.
Comment Written 24-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2014
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kipking, thank you so much. You are most thoughtful and generous :-) Brooke
Comment from Deepakurup
I never get tired of expressing the same gratitude to you for showing me myself through your exceptional poems.I always see those unexpressed feelings of mine which were with me from childhood till now expressed in your poems in the exact way.I feel most of your poems as my voice.
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2014
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I never get tired of expressing the same gratitude to you for showing me myself through your exceptional poems.I always see those unexpressed feelings of mine which were with me from childhood till now expressed in your poems in the exact way.I feel most of your poems as my voice.
Comment Written 20-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2014
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minikurup, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from mermaids
I just love this poem,daffodils,whales,jellyfish and the ant. This is a delightful poem that makes the reader think about all the animals who aid life yet are not considered attractive. Excellent rhyming and flow of words. This is a fun poem to read over again and again.
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2014
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I just love this poem,daffodils,whales,jellyfish and the ant. This is a delightful poem that makes the reader think about all the animals who aid life yet are not considered attractive. Excellent rhyming and flow of words. This is a fun poem to read over again and again.
Comment Written 15-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2014
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Elaine, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from michaelcahill
I totally remember that from when I was a little boy! That picture brought it back completely. Stopping and getting down to ant level and watching all of the amazing ant activity. Love the whimsical nature of this with made up words and everything. Always okay to make up a word when everything else is flawless, It is like earning the right! I have a story about sentient ants on a wisteria vine. Maybe I'll finish it. Great work. mikey
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2014
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I totally remember that from when I was a little boy! That picture brought it back completely. Stopping and getting down to ant level and watching all of the amazing ant activity. Love the whimsical nature of this with made up words and everything. Always okay to make up a word when everything else is flawless, It is like earning the right! I have a story about sentient ants on a wisteria vine. Maybe I'll finish it. Great work. mikey
Comment Written 15-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2014
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Mikey, thanks so much :-) Brooke
Comment from acerisestory
I loved your poem. It has a wonderful flow -- and a message, to boot! Adults and children alike should enjoy your work. I can't think of a thing that needs to be changed.
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2014
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I loved your poem. It has a wonderful flow -- and a message, to boot! Adults and children alike should enjoy your work. I can't think of a thing that needs to be changed.
Comment Written 15-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2014
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acerisestory, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from N.K. Wagner
The lowly ant is a wonder and you celebrate it here in abcb quatrains. Most children find them fascinating, so maybe we adults should pay more attention. :) nancy
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2014
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The lowly ant is a wonder and you celebrate it here in abcb quatrains. Most children find them fascinating, so maybe we adults should pay more attention. :) nancy
Comment Written 15-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2014
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Nancy, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Ridley Williams
Hello Brooke,
I loved your thought pattern with these well designed quatrains. This is a wonderful expression of all the small things it takes to keep a planet alive...take away one part of the puzzle and the whole thing falls apart. I liked the rhyme between pizzazzy and jazzy, and the alliteration of humongous hippopottami...they were fun! Best of luck with this entry, Bill
(I just saw the weather this morning, are you getting hit with more storms? If so, hopefully rain and not snow...anyway, all my best, B)
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2014
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Hello Brooke,
I loved your thought pattern with these well designed quatrains. This is a wonderful expression of all the small things it takes to keep a planet alive...take away one part of the puzzle and the whole thing falls apart. I liked the rhyme between pizzazzy and jazzy, and the alliteration of humongous hippopottami...they were fun! Best of luck with this entry, Bill
(I just saw the weather this morning, are you getting hit with more storms? If so, hopefully rain and not snow...anyway, all my best, B)
Comment Written 15-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2014
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Bill, thank you so very much :-) Brooke
Comment from Donya Quijote
I like the light-hearted feel of this poem. It made this weary and slightly under the weather soul smile. It has an infectuos, joyful appeal. You use of alliteration, assonance, and consonance in combination is a pleasant feature: platypus and plant, crocodiles and cackling crows, peacock is pizzazzy, etc.
Pizzazzy is a great descripter. Addes personal touch your inventiveness.
I would most certainly gawk at the butterflies and any one of the other creatures you menioned, even though I find the ant interesting, I don't really like them. The red ants in Florida are terrible and their bite lingers and swells and itches and burns. Horrible. Worthy of being stepped on, eh? The red ant or fire ant is indeed an annoyance.
Sawyer looks to be having fun exploring the world and growing like a weed. Pretty soon I won't be able to call him the wee one...
Thanks for sharing this wonderful romp in the wilds with us...
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2014
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I like the light-hearted feel of this poem. It made this weary and slightly under the weather soul smile. It has an infectuos, joyful appeal. You use of alliteration, assonance, and consonance in combination is a pleasant feature: platypus and plant, crocodiles and cackling crows, peacock is pizzazzy, etc.
Pizzazzy is a great descripter. Addes personal touch your inventiveness.
I would most certainly gawk at the butterflies and any one of the other creatures you menioned, even though I find the ant interesting, I don't really like them. The red ants in Florida are terrible and their bite lingers and swells and itches and burns. Horrible. Worthy of being stepped on, eh? The red ant or fire ant is indeed an annoyance.
Sawyer looks to be having fun exploring the world and growing like a weed. Pretty soon I won't be able to call him the wee one...
Thanks for sharing this wonderful romp in the wilds with us...
Comment Written 15-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2014
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Donya, thank you :-) Yep, he is getting further and further away from "wee" by the day. LOL Truth be told, I stomp on ants who invade my space too. :-) Brooke
