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Comment from ragamuffin
Very much looking forward to the last chapter. Terrible to think that so many people would be horribly used as the transmitters were, but some people don't view all people as worthwhile human beings. Don't even respect life enough to not take their own if things don't go their way. That's odd to me, but it happens.
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Very much looking forward to the last chapter. Terrible to think that so many people would be horribly used as the transmitters were, but some people don't view all people as worthwhile human beings. Don't even respect life enough to not take their own if things don't go their way. That's odd to me, but it happens.
Comment Written 24-Apr-2014
Comment from Michaelk
Ok, you didn't kill Johnny (yet) but the dolphin trick was pure brilliance. I found myself trying to visualize a shoreline with no shore. Did the Canadian subs make it out, or did they get sunk too?
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Ok, you didn't kill Johnny (yet) but the dolphin trick was pure brilliance. I found myself trying to visualize a shoreline with no shore. Did the Canadian subs make it out, or did they get sunk too?
Comment Written 13-Apr-2014
Comment from Nosha17
Now, I am happy, the hero survived, I hate sad endings. I haven't been online, so I am a bit behind. Great chapter, well written with good explanations as to the outcome of all the happenings. Enjoyable as always. faye
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Now, I am happy, the hero survived, I hate sad endings. I haven't been online, so I am a bit behind. Great chapter, well written with good explanations as to the outcome of all the happenings. Enjoyable as always. faye
Comment Written 13-Apr-2014
Comment from CR Delport
Well, that was very fortunate for Johnny and the others that the dolphins helped them. Seems like they're still not any closer to the answers they seek. Another well crafted chapter.
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Well, that was very fortunate for Johnny and the others that the dolphins helped them. Seems like they're still not any closer to the answers they seek. Another well crafted chapter.
Comment Written 13-Apr-2014
Comment from nor84
We found it floating in our backyard(.)" >>>that seems to be a statement, not a question.
I pulled my hand back and sprung (sprang)to my feet. >>>spring, sprang, had/have sprung
Tom jumped in, "(T)here were hundreds of them.
"We tried,(but) they preferred death.
What is it that you wanted so bad(?)
Hell, whom (who)was I kidding?>>>'whom' is usually an object: to whom, for whom, by whom.
My mind just started running in circles>>>better without 'just'
Half-Dome is split in half but, none of Ma's people were there.">>>the comma goes before 'but'
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Most of those that received the signals strongly had a strong sense of each other.>>>each other for two people; one another for three or more.
Also, the survivors from the armada(.) (S)ee if there are any of them that receive the transmissions strongly.
Linda said simply, while Jen nodded, "(W)e on it".>>> the period always goes inside the quotes.
"Nikolai, here Ricky.>>>something seems wrong here. Oh, I see. Should be: Nikolai here, Ricky. Because Nikolai believes he's talking to Ricky.
"Concentrate on Lacci(.) (S)he's missing, but I still sense her. Do you?"
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We found it floating in our backyard(.)" >>>that seems to be a statement, not a question.
I pulled my hand back and sprung (sprang)to my feet. >>>spring, sprang, had/have sprung
Tom jumped in, "(T)here were hundreds of them.
"We tried,(but) they preferred death.
What is it that you wanted so bad(?)
Hell, whom (who)was I kidding?>>>'whom' is usually an object: to whom, for whom, by whom.
My mind just started running in circles>>>better without 'just'
Half-Dome is split in half but, none of Ma's people were there.">>>the comma goes before 'but'
twenty-something
Most of those that received the signals strongly had a strong sense of each other.>>>each other for two people; one another for three or more.
Also, the survivors from the armada(.) (S)ee if there are any of them that receive the transmissions strongly.
Linda said simply, while Jen nodded, "(W)e on it".>>> the period always goes inside the quotes.
"Nikolai, here Ricky.>>>something seems wrong here. Oh, I see. Should be: Nikolai here, Ricky. Because Nikolai believes he's talking to Ricky.
"Concentrate on Lacci(.) (S)he's missing, but I still sense her. Do you?"
Comment Written 13-Apr-2014
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
I guess Carlos didn't make it. You always have to let one of the major side characters did in a battle scene, so that's good.
"Did you lose this thing? We found it floating in our backyard?"
LOL! I lovvvve your wonderful imagination!
>>their brains are fried
NIce touch with the unwilling transmitters
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I guess Carlos didn't make it. You always have to let one of the major side characters did in a battle scene, so that's good.
"Did you lose this thing? We found it floating in our backyard?"
LOL! I lovvvve your wonderful imagination!
>>their brains are fried
NIce touch with the unwilling transmitters
Comment Written 12-Apr-2014
Comment from ProjectBluebook
My grey areas are coming together. Dolphins, I should of known. Dolphins are mammals, intelligent. They can be trained to carry bombs underwater. In real life they were used to kill divers like Navy Seals. There was no escape. I have heard mermaids run with the whale. Have you seen the mermaids on TV. On the 15th there will be a blood moon and another at the end of this month. Predicted in the bible, prophesized. it's on YouTube, one of the last signs before Jesus returns. How many chapters are left? You probably got another novel in the making, a backup plan. later Lion King.
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2014
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My grey areas are coming together. Dolphins, I should of known. Dolphins are mammals, intelligent. They can be trained to carry bombs underwater. In real life they were used to kill divers like Navy Seals. There was no escape. I have heard mermaids run with the whale. Have you seen the mermaids on TV. On the 15th there will be a blood moon and another at the end of this month. Predicted in the bible, prophesized. it's on YouTube, one of the last signs before Jesus returns. How many chapters are left? You probably got another novel in the making, a backup plan. later Lion King.
Comment Written 12-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2014
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Last chapter tonight if this stupid internet doesn't crash on me again!! Gotta figure out the next thing to write about. Any ideas?? I have all kinds of little short stories, but no idea what's next. Check your e-mail. mikey
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I got a fantastic idea. The blood moons have never happened. I t is one of the last signs predicted in the bible. There will be a blood moon on the 15th and another at the end of this month. Preacher Hagee is preaching about it on You Tube. It would be great timing to do a poem about the four blood moons. This is a huge event. I might start it and if you care to join me before the 15th is over feel free to PM me.
Comment from Sankey
Well d0one, mate. Gets better and better as it grows. Was worried you were gonna be killed off and glad the Dolphin didn't want you in their water hehe. Good one.
hey I redid Chapter 18 of my book it is probably a moved one and Chapter 17 is brand new. Hope you will look soon. had a hard reviewer yesterday but when I looked through her suggestions they made sense and Chapter 18 looks a lot better now hehe.
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2014
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Well d0one, mate. Gets better and better as it grows. Was worried you were gonna be killed off and glad the Dolphin didn't want you in their water hehe. Good one.
hey I redid Chapter 18 of my book it is probably a moved one and Chapter 17 is brand new. Hope you will look soon. had a hard reviewer yesterday but when I looked through her suggestions they made sense and Chapter 18 looks a lot better now hehe.
Comment Written 12-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2014
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I hope to stop by and check things out if my internet will stay up for any length of time. Last chapter of this tonight. I somehow made it to the end! mikey
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Great look forward to it and to your coming along. Know about these troublesome feisty putters!! Grrr!
Comment from Tatarka2
I'm not sure where you're going, but I think that, in re-write, you're going to need much, much more backstory leading up to whatever conclusion you finally reach. I think you're writing this as it comes to you, and I admire that, but I do think you're going to have to prepare your reader for the ending, whatever it turns out to be, in little hints here and there throughout the previous chapters, in order to make whatever it is believable.
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2014
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I'm not sure where you're going, but I think that, in re-write, you're going to need much, much more backstory leading up to whatever conclusion you finally reach. I think you're writing this as it comes to you, and I admire that, but I do think you're going to have to prepare your reader for the ending, whatever it turns out to be, in little hints here and there throughout the previous chapters, in order to make whatever it is believable.
Comment Written 12-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2014
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I'm not exactly sure either! I have my work cut out for me in re-write, that is for sure. I am hopelessly behind in answering these. They are all copied and printed and will be in hand when I try and get all of this ship shape. You have done a lot to keep me from diving right off the deep end!! Thank you for all of your help and input. One more to go and then the real work begins. mikey
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I believe in this story, and I think you have a marketable product here. It's very imaginative, and I think can be a big hit. I agree, you have a lot of work ahead, but it's been a privilege to see it being written.
Comment from l.raven
OH know...where are the others...find them Michael...only you know for sure...think...so very very well written you...truly exciting...you know I am loving it...if this were a book I would never put it down...but that is how I read books I like...ok!!! next!!! Luff Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2014
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OH know...where are the others...find them Michael...only you know for sure...think...so very very well written you...truly exciting...you know I am loving it...if this were a book I would never put it down...but that is how I read books I like...ok!!! next!!! Luff Linda xxoo
Comment Written 12-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2014
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On more to go. Then the real work, rewrite!! Thank you for your support. It means so much and makes me want to keep writing. I'm hopelessly behind in answering these, but I read them and believe me they make all the difference in the world. Thank you so much, mikey
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you are so welcome Michael...don't worry so much...I know you care...Luff xxoo
