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Viewing comments for Chapter 34 "Nightmares & Surprise Dreams"Acts of war have plunged Earth into catastrophe.
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Comment from Michaelk
Ok, the dream team is a bunch of traitors. What's the overall goal? I mean, who cares about a bunch of nobodies in the middle of nowhere when you still have stealth bombers. I don't understand why this group seems so important...unless this is all an illusion, ala total recall.
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2014
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Ok, the dream team is a bunch of traitors. What's the overall goal? I mean, who cares about a bunch of nobodies in the middle of nowhere when you still have stealth bombers. I don't understand why this group seems so important...unless this is all an illusion, ala total recall.
Comment Written 12-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2014
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Not sure if the stealth bombers can get airborne for a number of reasons...fuel, weather. You'll see. Kind of winging it, so it doesn't always go where it probably should. But, it will be better in rewrite taking all of the great input and putting it to use. I have a tendency to write first and think second!! mikey
Comment from 24chas
Carlos is a definite wild man, mikey. I had a feeling something was going to happen with him. You've got quite the mystery built up with this story.
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Carlos is a definite wild man, mikey. I had a feeling something was going to happen with him. You've got quite the mystery built up with this story.
Comment Written 04-Apr-2014
Comment from GracieAnn
Mikey, this is a good way to keep exposing problem areas and people, not to mention the mental hold that seems to break through. That's definitely a tough one to tie up-mind that is. They are going to have to figure out how the mind control is projected and stop it. Maybe putting aluminum foil on their heads will help! LOL Just playing. Force or dampening field of some sort. Good intensity throughout. :0 GracieAnn
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Mikey, this is a good way to keep exposing problem areas and people, not to mention the mental hold that seems to break through. That's definitely a tough one to tie up-mind that is. They are going to have to figure out how the mind control is projected and stop it. Maybe putting aluminum foil on their heads will help! LOL Just playing. Force or dampening field of some sort. Good intensity throughout. :0 GracieAnn
Comment Written 01-Apr-2014
Comment from Tatarka2
I would suggest you drop the first two paragraphs of this chapter and go directly into the story. I'm reading this with a bit of caution; it seems you're just on the verge of becoming fantastical and unbelievable - but not yet. So, kudos on having made it this far and keeping that believability in. I still keep seeing this as a movie. It think it would be a great one.
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2014
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I would suggest you drop the first two paragraphs of this chapter and go directly into the story. I'm reading this with a bit of caution; it seems you're just on the verge of becoming fantastical and unbelievable - but not yet. So, kudos on having made it this far and keeping that believability in. I still keep seeing this as a movie. It think it would be a great one.
Comment Written 31-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2014
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I'm miles behind in responses to these, but I had to jump ahead and say hello. I so know what you mean!! I feel the exact same way. I keep seeing Science Fiction producers in the corners of my room. I don't want to go that way at all, so I'm trying to keep on this side of the fence. I know I'm on the edge though!! My friend, Christine, is too though in real life. Some amazing things I've heard from her. Trying to keep out of the corner. I hope the bunker gives me some room to run. mikey
Comment from faragon
Wow, what a melee! I can picture in my mind what the encampment, or actually small village, looks like, Where the lookout point is and where Ma and the boys are. It seems as though the "leaders" are starting slowly to put the pieces together, much like we -the readers - are. Good job!
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Wow, what a melee! I can picture in my mind what the encampment, or actually small village, looks like, Where the lookout point is and where Ma and the boys are. It seems as though the "leaders" are starting slowly to put the pieces together, much like we -the readers - are. Good job!
Comment Written 31-Mar-2014
Comment from ravenblack
The dream team- are they both a defense against the dreams, interpreting the dreams of the enemy or are they also used as weapons themselves? Or are they or the powers behind them responsible for the dreams themselves? And who is dropping the harmonized crates?
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The dream team- are they both a defense against the dreams, interpreting the dreams of the enemy or are they also used as weapons themselves? Or are they or the powers behind them responsible for the dreams themselves? And who is dropping the harmonized crates?
Comment Written 31-Mar-2014
Comment from ragamuffin
It would be difficult to run a group not knowing who to trust and who not to. never knowing if additional folks coming forward are friend or foe, who's causing what, if someone that seemed okay was intentionally acting okay to spy because word's gotten back to the enemy that there's a realistic threat from a band of folks that are well organized. Interesting. Looking forward to getting some specific info as to what happened and what's going on.
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It would be difficult to run a group not knowing who to trust and who not to. never knowing if additional folks coming forward are friend or foe, who's causing what, if someone that seemed okay was intentionally acting okay to spy because word's gotten back to the enemy that there's a realistic threat from a band of folks that are well organized. Interesting. Looking forward to getting some specific info as to what happened and what's going on.
Comment Written 31-Mar-2014
Comment from CR Delport
Mike, just watch. Sometimes you get a bit wordy:
She put her hand out. I took hold and rose to my feet as well. --- She held out her hand and helped me to my feet.
Yeah, in this situation you have to be very careful who you trust. Another great chapter.
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2014
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Mike, just watch. Sometimes you get a bit wordy:
She put her hand out. I took hold and rose to my feet as well. --- She held out her hand and helped me to my feet.
Yeah, in this situation you have to be very careful who you trust. Another great chapter.
Comment Written 31-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2014
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It looks so obvious when I see it! Then when I go to fix it I see another one and it has a domino effect. I appreciate your pointing it out. I have such a long list of bad habits. Hahaha. I concentrate on one and the other starts sneaking out. I think I'm back on track now. I was getting lost for awhile. Thank you, mikey
Comment from l.raven
OH Boy, that was quit a fight...was worried about Carlos for a minute there...there going crazy....ok lets see what Christine and Johnny come up with...let it rip...LOL...a great story Michael...very well written...Luff Linda xxoo
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OH Boy, that was quit a fight...was worried about Carlos for a minute there...there going crazy....ok lets see what Christine and Johnny come up with...let it rip...LOL...a great story Michael...very well written...Luff Linda xxoo
Comment Written 31-Mar-2014
Comment from SValencia0178
Excellent and exciting chapter. Explanations are very plausible and ways to find a way out of their filename are starting to show themselves.
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2014
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Excellent and exciting chapter. Explanations are very plausible and ways to find a way out of their filename are starting to show themselves.
Comment Written 30-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2014
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I hope so. Need to plan a way out and head towards an ending. Glad you are enjoying and following along. Thank you for the great review and stars!! mikey
