The Clovis Point
Two tales intertwined in time and place33 total reviews
Comment from JTStone
Damn!
Bill--I love this cold irony. That was a well crafted concept.
That was extremely well written. I see why it was so popular. I work in construction and yeah, the paleontologist is one of my nightmares. They usually do have a good story or two to tell though.
Thanks for telling about your story. And yes, by the way, my story takes place prior to the Ice Age, you are the first to connect the dots, Clovis Stone Company and Clovis spear tips...
Jimmy
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2016
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Damn!
Bill--I love this cold irony. That was a well crafted concept.
That was extremely well written. I see why it was so popular. I work in construction and yeah, the paleontologist is one of my nightmares. They usually do have a good story or two to tell though.
Thanks for telling about your story. And yes, by the way, my story takes place prior to the Ice Age, you are the first to connect the dots, Clovis Stone Company and Clovis spear tips...
Jimmy
Comment Written 10-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2016
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Thanks for going back in the archives. I'll start looking for your posts. Bill
Comment from Writingfundimension
I really enjoyed this SOM entry, Bill. Love how you weave the two stories together and fill the piece with a lot of insight into the Clovis Indians. You must have been taking copious notes when you watched that special or you have perfect recall. I also really enjoyed the opening gambit with the narcissistic reporter and her dismay when she found out that Dan was digging into old poop. Sorry I haven't a six to give this superb writing.
Warmest regards, Bev
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2014
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I really enjoyed this SOM entry, Bill. Love how you weave the two stories together and fill the piece with a lot of insight into the Clovis Indians. You must have been taking copious notes when you watched that special or you have perfect recall. I also really enjoyed the opening gambit with the narcissistic reporter and her dismay when she found out that Dan was digging into old poop. Sorry I haven't a six to give this superb writing.
Warmest regards, Bev
Comment Written 04-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2014
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Thanks Bev - virtual sixes from writers I admire is just fine! Bill
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You're very welcome, Bill. I feel for anyone in a contest with Captain Jack. Your story is a great one, but that guy has a magical touch, it seems. Anyway, the admiration goes both ways. :0) Bev
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Point well taken. Erik is gifted, no doubt. So are you!
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Aw, that's so nice of you, Bill. Take care, Bev
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
I love anything like this, having always been very interested in ancient artefacts. This story is so well written and I enjoyed the way you brought the ancient and the modern together, both suffering the same fate. Good luck in the contest! xsx Sandra
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2014
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I love anything like this, having always been very interested in ancient artefacts. This story is so well written and I enjoyed the way you brought the ancient and the modern together, both suffering the same fate. Good luck in the contest! xsx Sandra
Comment Written 04-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2014
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Thanks fo reading, your kind comments and best wishes! I appreciate all. Bill
Comment from mfowler
Your TV muse worked for you here. You've created a unique and fascinating tale around the story of the Clovis points. Both sections of the story connect in time, and while sad at the end, make more dramatic impact that way. Well conceived; well written!
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2014
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Your TV muse worked for you here. You've created a unique and fascinating tale around the story of the Clovis points. Both sections of the story connect in time, and while sad at the end, make more dramatic impact that way. Well conceived; well written!
Comment Written 30-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2014
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Thanks for reading and your vey kind feedback. I appreciate both! Bill
Comment from Liandra
What an interesting story, or should I say stories? Nothing happens by accident and your story has a hidden agenda. I read it twice to piece it together.
Well done and thanks for sharing,
Liandra
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2014
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What an interesting story, or should I say stories? Nothing happens by accident and your story has a hidden agenda. I read it twice to piece it together.
Well done and thanks for sharing,
Liandra
Comment Written 30-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2014
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Thanks for reading and your vey kind feedback. I appreciate both! Bill
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You're very welcome,
:) Liandra
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I am very glad you watched the History Channel because I got to read a very good story.
The next morning represented what was perfect in a day in Eastern New Mexico. (The following morning)
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2014
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I am very glad you watched the History Channel because I got to read a very good story.
The next morning represented what was perfect in a day in Eastern New Mexico. (The following morning)
Comment Written 29-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2014
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Thanks for reading and your vey kind feedback. I appreciate both! If I could reach the level of your writing, I would be so happy! Warm regards, Bill
Comment from barkingdog
This was an excellent mix of present and past incidents. Both men are part of their own tribe of sorts. I could see both eras and the two hunters fall to what ended their lives.
What a great idea tying the two together with the spearheads.
Great post!
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This was an excellent mix of present and past incidents. Both men are part of their own tribe of sorts. I could see both eras and the two hunters fall to what ended their lives.
What a great idea tying the two together with the spearheads.
Great post!
Comment Written 29-Mar-2014
Comment from Judy Couch
This is a really interesting story. I enjoyed the amount of imagination that must have gone into writing it. There is one thing you mibht look at: "He stepped to the edge of a butte, took a glance around and took a deep breath." You used the word "took" twice in the same sentence. You might want to consider changing one of those words.
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This is a really interesting story. I enjoyed the amount of imagination that must have gone into writing it. There is one thing you mibht look at: "He stepped to the edge of a butte, took a glance around and took a deep breath." You used the word "took" twice in the same sentence. You might want to consider changing one of those words.
Comment Written 29-Mar-2014
Comment from Dean Kuch
Carla Bates of KYCG is your prototypical female anchor these days. Attractive, pleasant (at least in front of the camera) and not much else.
Funny situation you create here, with Dan's digs in the -- crappier places in town. I could picture her face perfectly by the way you'd written it. Very well done.
The line about not retrieving the dropped pistol was funny. One could certainly understand why, lol!
Dan's digs and research on the Clovis points and Indians was pretty interesting. I've always felt that archeology would be an adventurous profession to be involved in.
The fall was surprising, I didn't see that coming. I like how you make the transition in the story form current times, to the days of young Dron and the Clovis Indians.
The scenes with the female dire wolf was excellent. I get a good mental picture of what they look like from watching HBO's Game of Thrones series.
"The fisherman found Dan's body two days later..." great segue into the final paragraph. I was surprised that he'd died, but liked how it was woven into the wolf and Dron's
story.
This was an excellent story, bhogg, with a nice twist at the end to leave the reader gasping and wanting more.
That's what it's all about.
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Carla Bates of KYCG is your prototypical female anchor these days. Attractive, pleasant (at least in front of the camera) and not much else.
Funny situation you create here, with Dan's digs in the -- crappier places in town. I could picture her face perfectly by the way you'd written it. Very well done.
The line about not retrieving the dropped pistol was funny. One could certainly understand why, lol!
Dan's digs and research on the Clovis points and Indians was pretty interesting. I've always felt that archeology would be an adventurous profession to be involved in.
The fall was surprising, I didn't see that coming. I like how you make the transition in the story form current times, to the days of young Dron and the Clovis Indians.
The scenes with the female dire wolf was excellent. I get a good mental picture of what they look like from watching HBO's Game of Thrones series.
"The fisherman found Dan's body two days later..." great segue into the final paragraph. I was surprised that he'd died, but liked how it was woven into the wolf and Dron's
story.
This was an excellent story, bhogg, with a nice twist at the end to leave the reader gasping and wanting more.
That's what it's all about.
Comment Written 29-Mar-2014
Comment from seaglass
This is a skillfully written story and the passing back and forth with time, in the same location makes it very interesting.
The killer spot (location)took it's toll on two men in different times, while linking them together with the spear-heads.
I've often wondered, when hiking about, what other people's experiences occurred on spots I stood. The fact this could be a possibility makes it even more intriguing.
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This is a skillfully written story and the passing back and forth with time, in the same location makes it very interesting.
The killer spot (location)took it's toll on two men in different times, while linking them together with the spear-heads.
I've often wondered, when hiking about, what other people's experiences occurred on spots I stood. The fact this could be a possibility makes it even more intriguing.
Comment Written 29-Mar-2014
