Golden Country
Nonet31 total reviews
Comment from bertodi
I too lived in New Zealand, twice in fact, but himself, now gone, could not settle- and loved it..and yes, golden country definitely. It is with soft resignation I remember sitting on the edge of mount Eden watching the planes practising landings, the children playing some sort of football, but best of all, Sunday at our little Catholic Church, Maori choir, and flower petals for all. I have wonderful memories of that golden country- which I thought was going to be my home-
reply by the author on 02-May-2014
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I too lived in New Zealand, twice in fact, but himself, now gone, could not settle- and loved it..and yes, golden country definitely. It is with soft resignation I remember sitting on the edge of mount Eden watching the planes practising landings, the children playing some sort of football, but best of all, Sunday at our little Catholic Church, Maori choir, and flower petals for all. I have wonderful memories of that golden country- which I thought was going to be my home-
Comment Written 01-May-2014
reply by the author on 02-May-2014
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Thank you - yes, it is a beautiful place.
Here of course the title refers to the past as a golden country, which is exactly what your memories refer to...
Steve
Comment from seaglass
This nonet is properly written with syllables. It makes a nice formation. The last two lines could line up better if you wanted to spell 'O' (Oh) example- "Oh you" rather than "O you". Conveys the feelings of thinking back to other times. good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2014
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This nonet is properly written with syllables. It makes a nice formation. The last two lines could line up better if you wanted to spell 'O' (Oh) example- "Oh you" rather than "O you". Conveys the feelings of thinking back to other times. good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 29-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2014
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Thanks for the kind words.
Actually I never really worry about the 'formation' and in this case there is a slight difference in meaning between Oh and O - believe it or not!
Steve
Comment from Andrewajgblue
I like this nonet, we all have ghosts that haunt us from the past, sometimes it's nice to listen to them, your wording was really good, and it flowed nicely,
Good luck
Andrew
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2014
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I like this nonet, we all have ghosts that haunt us from the past, sometimes it's nice to listen to them, your wording was really good, and it flowed nicely,
Good luck
Andrew
Comment Written 28-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2014
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Thanks, Andrew.
Steve
Comment from 1954speed
I like this nonet. A cry to our past, whether the ghost, forgotten or with us, still haunt us. Trying to go home is sometimes hard! Good flow and content. Like I said, I like this poem. Thank you!
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2014
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I like this nonet. A cry to our past, whether the ghost, forgotten or with us, still haunt us. Trying to go home is sometimes hard! Good flow and content. Like I said, I like this poem. Thank you!
Comment Written 28-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2014
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Thanks for the kind words.
Steve
Comment from Just2Write
An excellent Nonet, Steve. The poem feels dark and mysterious, but I liked the familiarity of being able to touch (almost) something of the past that has shaped our present, and perhaps even our future.
Can the ghosts of the back take us back - or is it we that must embrace or deny them?
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2014
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An excellent Nonet, Steve. The poem feels dark and mysterious, but I liked the familiarity of being able to touch (almost) something of the past that has shaped our present, and perhaps even our future.
Can the ghosts of the back take us back - or is it we that must embrace or deny them?
Comment Written 28-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2014
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Rose, thanks for the warm review.
At least this was a little easier to write than a Crown of Sonnets.
Steve
Comment from SLHarper
Hi Steve,
I'm a little behind on reading/reviewing. This is quite a variation for you from heroic sonnets! I like what you try to do in this short piece -- anyone who has lived can relate to that sense of wanting to "go back" to where s/he once belonged and felt completely in his/her element. I haven't felt that way since before I left home at age 18, and strangely enough, I never felt satisfied where I was way back then, either. Such is life, they say. I hope the "ghosts" welcome you back, even if only for a short, sweet visit! Yours, Steph
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2014
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Hi Steve,
I'm a little behind on reading/reviewing. This is quite a variation for you from heroic sonnets! I like what you try to do in this short piece -- anyone who has lived can relate to that sense of wanting to "go back" to where s/he once belonged and felt completely in his/her element. I haven't felt that way since before I left home at age 18, and strangely enough, I never felt satisfied where I was way back then, either. Such is life, they say. I hope the "ghosts" welcome you back, even if only for a short, sweet visit! Yours, Steph
Comment Written 28-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2014
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Thanks, Steph.
Yep, this didn't take as long to rustle up as a crown - I don't even believe in ghosts!
Steve
Comment from mermaids
Excelletn nonet form that brings up emotions and feelings with your use of words. I like the analogy of the past as another country,it gives a different view of the past. Your words flow smoothly and this is a poem that all can relate to.
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2014
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Excelletn nonet form that brings up emotions and feelings with your use of words. I like the analogy of the past as another country,it gives a different view of the past. Your words flow smoothly and this is a poem that all can relate to.
Comment Written 28-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2014
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Thanks for the kind words.
Steve
Comment from persevere
I guess this nonet expresses the feelings of many a 'displaced 'person (for whatever reason) and 'take me back' says it all.The mention of ghosts clearly indicates that it can never be the same.
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2014
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I guess this nonet expresses the feelings of many a 'displaced 'person (for whatever reason) and 'take me back' says it all.The mention of ghosts clearly indicates that it can never be the same.
Comment Written 28-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2014
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Thanks for the kind words.
Steve
Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep
You must be a bit of a go-between, Steve, enjoying what you have, but occasionally hankering for the past, with memories flitting in and out. You wrote a most unusual nonet about it which was quite enjoyable., Giddy
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2014
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You must be a bit of a go-between, Steve, enjoying what you have, but occasionally hankering for the past, with memories flitting in and out. You wrote a most unusual nonet about it which was quite enjoyable., Giddy
Comment Written 28-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2014
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Thanks for the kind words, Giddy
Steve
Comment from Loren (7)
This captures so much. Golden memories to which we only see the ragged edge. And then we cry out to take us back, not remembering the cloth in between those edges.
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2014
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This captures so much. Golden memories to which we only see the ragged edge. And then we cry out to take us back, not remembering the cloth in between those edges.
Comment Written 27-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2014
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Thanks for the kind words.
Steve
