Comment from Mastery

Exceptional

Rating of Chapter 66 - Sota Moon, Part Two
Hi, Bev. Just stopped by to catch another chapter, and I see you are up for BOM again. I signed my remark "M"..Good job here, once again btw. You have an excellent way of keeping the excitement flowing.


Suggestions:

"He looked back at the ground' (looked down, might be better)

And: "He felt in his bones a bad situation waited for him (a bit off kilter-sounding...perhaps "In his bones he felt a bad situation...etc


Great job as usual, Bev. I am still on hold, but a couple of the deals fell through...ie, Google "Black Rose Writing" and tell me what you think...LOL Bob

 Comment Written 04-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 04-Sep-2014

Hi, Bob. Thanks so much for the really wonderful review and suggestions. I think they make good sense! So, I appreciate it.

I'm sorry for your disappointing news. I will google that site and send you a note. Something better will come along, I feel very confident of that prediction.

And thank you for the vote, Bob. I really appreciate your confidence and support.

Big Hug,

Bev

reply by Mastery on 05-Sep-2014

Well, I still have two possibles with the Ms in their hands. so all is never lost...Right? Thanks and big hug to you, too. (from Lynie, too)

Comment from José Ángel


 

Excellent

Rating of Chapter 70 - Cancega Moon
What a great chapter left me hooked to read the previous chapters. I will start as soon as possible to do so, but I think detain you a little. My congratulations, hugs from Chile

 Comment Written 01-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 01-Sep-2014

Hello, Jose. Thank you so much for sending your great wishes and thoughts over the many miles! I really appreciate it! Warmest regards, Bev

Comment from Ben Colder

Excellent

Rating of Chapter 70 - Cancega Moon
You are welcome, in English. I really missed a good write. I caught this on the tail end but see the way Characterization moved well. Perhaps another?

 Comment Written 01-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 01-Sep-2014

Hi, Ben. I'm going to be editing the novel for hopeful publication. Though I have an idea for a sequel, I'm putting back out another paranormal novel I started a while back and didn't finish. If you like that genre, I'd be interested in what you think.

Thanks for the great review!

:) Bev

reply by Ben Colder on 01-Sep-2014

Long-Meyer- episodes came to mind when I read you chapter. Of course, I came in at the last.
Over the years, I have written and read many great stories. However, I am partial to Antebellum Historical Christian fiction /none fiction.I am Choctaw and of course Native American writes always interest me. Best of luck to you in the publishing engagement.

reply by the author on 01-Sep-2014

Hi, Ben. What a fascinating background you have. Don't you just love Longmire. That is one of my favorite shows, and is vastly underrated by the critics.

We enjoy attending the PowWow here in Traverse City. The Odawa nation is just up the rode from where I live and they put on a fantastic celebration every summer. I've gotten some great shots as they do allow taking pictures of most of the dancing.

Thanks so much for you good wishes! :) Bev

reply by Ben Colder on 01-Sep-2014

Check out my people Dancing Rabbit/ Choctaw nation. Ye, I have lived among the Navajo and Apache in New Mexico and Ariz. My mother's people are in Oklahoma Best to you.

Comment from Connie C

Exceptional

Rating of Chapter 70 - Cancega Moon
I really like, Bev, how you tell us what became of each of the characters in this wonderful novel of yours. As I read through these, I thought of how at the movies sometimes, there will be an explanation of what happens to each of the central characters. I truly enjoyed reading this and also learning so much from your author's notes these past few years. I look forward to your next novel.
Big Hugs Always,
Connie

 Comment Written 01-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 01-Sep-2014

AW, Connie thank you so much. What a great support you've been throughout this project. I've enjoyed all your insights, and have appreciated all the encouragement and enthusiasm. It means more than I can say. Love and hugs, Bev

Comment from Aiona

Excellent

Rating of Chapter 62 - Cephi Moon, Part Two
Wow! Fast-paced writing, engaging action, and believable characters. I really liked this line: "something else made his pulse bang against his temple: No license plate." Had my pulse banging against my chest, too!

 Comment Written 01-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 01-Sep-2014

Thank you so much, Aiona. I really appreciate this generous and very encouraging review! It's very gratifying to hear such kind words regarding my chapter. :) Bev

Comment from AprilShower

Exceptional

Rating of Chapter 70 - Cancega Moon

Bev, I read all the chapters, but have fail to review the some of the last ones. They all deserved six stars.

Will there be another Jana Burke novel? Are you getting this one published?

You have my best wishes.

April :o)

 Comment Written 31-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 01-Sep-2014

Thank you so much, April. I do plan on editing extensively, as it is far too long. That's a process that I'm going to be pursuing over the next months.

I really appreciate all the time you spent reading and encouraging me over the course of this project. Thank you so much for your generosity here and always!

:) Bev

Comment from sibhus

Excellent

Rating of Chapter 70 - Cancega Moon
Hmmm, looks like I missed the party, but this really looks like an interesting book. Nice crisp writng that is clear and precise and the ending is filled with nice details that really make this sound like it would be a thrill a minute ride. Good chapter and I'm going to have to go back and check it out.

 Comment Written 31-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 01-Sep-2014

Hi, sibhus. Thank you for taking time out to read this epilogue. I'll be extensively editing as I have way too many chapters at 70! I really could have get it going for another five more!

Anyway, I really appreciate your grand review!

:) Bev

Comment from AprilShower

Excellent

Rating of Chapter 66 - Sota Moon, Part Two


I am wondering how many pages this book will have, Bev. You might have to make this a series of books. This is very interesting. Well done.

April

 Comment Written 31-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 01-Sep-2014

I'll be trimming and cutting with the editing process as you are quite right - it's too long for public consumption :)

Comment from AprilShower

Excellent

Rating of Chapter 65 - Sota Moon, Part 1


You have a very good imagination, Bev. A lot is happening in these chapters. There's no way anyone could fall asleep while reading this story. It keeps the reader wanting to read more.

April

 Comment Written 31-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 01-Sep-2014

Thanks for the compliment, April. I appreciate it! :) Bev

Comment from Dawn Munro

Excellent

Rating of Chapter 70 - Cancega Moon
It would seem you have covered all the bases, tied up all the loose ends, dotted every "I", crossed every "T" = LOL. Okay, I admit it, I'm just trying to make you smile because NOW the drudgery starts - marketing this baby. I have revisions and editing to do on mine, and I started with the first few chapters, but I hate it. I'm sic of reading the same thing over and over again. I might start re=posting again soon...

Bev, there's nothing I can say about this final chapter that I haven't said before - it's great, and I think your book will be a big hit. The only suggestion I might make would be to expand a little, maybe add a bit of dialogue. But then again, maybe it's just me, hating to see it end.

 Comment Written 31-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 01-Sep-2014

Dawn, thank you so much for the encouragement and support. Your enthusiasm kept me going on this project and I am in your debt for that.

This epilogue was really for the site. I'll have a different ending format when I try to get it published.

Thanks so much!

:) Bev