Comment from 24chas

Excellent

Another winner, mikey. I like the way the dialogue carried this chapter. I know it's difficult to keep up with all the characters, but you're doing a great job with it.

 Comment Written 19-Mar-2014

Comment from Sankey

Excellent

Another good chapter. Gong well you must be getting some good help.
Some spags mate.
acquir(-r)ed
sent (her)(-the) boys (-her) to our aid."

 Comment Written 18-Mar-2014

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reply by the author on 19-Mar-2014

No help on this one. Hahaha. Just floundering around and then the ship rights itself once in a while!! mikey

Comment from GracieAnn

Excellent

Mikey, this is a solid installment with believable dialog coming from Ma and her advise is sound. The mystery if the so-called supply drop is a stunning turn of events. Great TZ moment. I don't know how you manage to keep two stories going successfully and try to review and respond, ya one-eyed cat watching two rat holes! LOL :0 GracieAnn

 Comment Written 18-Mar-2014

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reply by the author on 19-Mar-2014

Way behind in responses. I think not knowing what the stories are about helps!! The other story really is off the top of my head. It really isn't rattling around like this one does. mikey

Comment from l.raven

Excellent

An Attack???An Attack...that's not what the gov said they were going to do...but you never know...Ok!!! this is just wrong...now get these folks some help...soooo very well written...Love it!!! Luff Linda xxoo

 Comment Written 17-Mar-2014

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reply by the author on 17-Mar-2014

Might not even be the Govt. We'll see. They may have to help themselves and get together. More to come. Thanks for your great support!! mikey

reply by l.raven on 17-Mar-2014

WHAT!!!WHAT ??? not the gov ???? OMG...lol...bring it on...lol xxoo

Comment from Marillion

Excellent

Interesting that the packages are empty, Mikey, and I have to say that Ma makes an awful lot of sense if the group wants to survive this ordeal before the government finally decides what to do with them all.

 Comment Written 17-Mar-2014

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reply by the author on 17-Mar-2014

Yes. Ma is sticking in my head too as someone with a sensible outlook. I'm starting to see some direction with this, I think. mikey

Comment from ravenblack

Excellent

Attacked with cargo- interesting. I wonder if the folks in a daze around the container or those scattered on the ground dead means that they contain some sort of pathogen.

 Comment Written 17-Mar-2014

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reply by the author on 17-Mar-2014

Just a deadly poison I think. The attack was to lure them in to expose them and get the most bang for the buck. Not sure if the people in a daze will survive or not. Probably will, I think. Or maybe some will. Still working on it. mikey

Comment from Michaelk

Excellent

Out of the frying pan, into the fire eh? That's not cool. Survive an attack on the camp, think you're getting supplies dropped to you, and suddenly find its like a giant practical joke. I'm curious if someone is going to come along and gather up these drugged people. This was a very interesting twist. I didn't see it coming. Good chapter.

 Comment Written 17-Mar-2014

Comment from Tatarka2

Excellent

I'm really intrigued by where this might be going. I still don't think Ma's dialogue rings true (for instance, would she say "to save his cowardly skin?") The plot, however, seems ingenious - can't wait to see where this will go!

 Comment Written 16-Mar-2014

Comment from Petriesan

Excellent

I nodded in the affirmative - period after nodded and kill the rest. We know what a nod means.

I was going to pick a few other nits, but they were really more insignificant than that.

Good piece of writing

 Comment Written 16-Mar-2014

Comment from Nosha17

Excellent

Interesting chapter with lots of discussion and action. I am not sure what the significance of the empty packages might be, maybe just a decoy to see who's out there and still alive. Good narrative and characterisations. Enjoyable as always, Faye

 Comment Written 16-Mar-2014