Clickety Clack (acrostic)
an acrostic poem171 total reviews
Comment from Mastery
Hi, Brooke. Just checking in. Congratulations on your placing in the Acrostic contest. I loved this poem.
"Keep your sights on what's ahead
and blow on out of town!"
Bravo! Bob
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2014
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Hi, Brooke. Just checking in. Congratulations on your placing in the Acrostic contest. I loved this poem.
"Keep your sights on what's ahead
and blow on out of town!"
Bravo! Bob
Comment Written 11-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2014
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Thanks so much, Bob - I appreciate your generous rating and kind congratulations :-) Brooke
Comment from poetbear
Excellent image an writing. Another poster candidate.
Should be the market for sale.
Creative and clever.
Makes sense and stays with you long after reading it.
Great feeling and flow!
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2014
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Excellent image an writing. Another poster candidate.
Should be the market for sale.
Creative and clever.
Makes sense and stays with you long after reading it.
Great feeling and flow!
Comment Written 11-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2014
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Maddy, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from whizpurr ^-^
Hi Pearly One,
Your Clickety Clack was a fun and encouraging read. The photo choice was a great visual and it surely seems true if one viewed life as a train ride and didn't take "the noises" too much to heart, one would surely enjoy the ride much more. Congrats on your blue ribbon winner. Hugs and smiles, Aggie ^-^
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2014
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Hi Pearly One,
Your Clickety Clack was a fun and encouraging read. The photo choice was a great visual and it surely seems true if one viewed life as a train ride and didn't take "the noises" too much to heart, one would surely enjoy the ride much more. Congrats on your blue ribbon winner. Hugs and smiles, Aggie ^-^
Comment Written 11-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2014
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Thanks so much, Aggie, for your generous response to my acrostic and congratulations for your win :-) Brooke
Comment from Pegcook
The clickety clack rhythm of this acrostic carries the poem steadily down the track. The poem contains effective advice on how to handle the junctions that pop up in life. The rhymes make the poem easy to read out loud. Really nice piece of creative writing!
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2014
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The clickety clack rhythm of this acrostic carries the poem steadily down the track. The poem contains effective advice on how to handle the junctions that pop up in life. The rhymes make the poem easy to read out loud. Really nice piece of creative writing!
Comment Written 10-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2014
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Peg, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from barleygirl
Nice job on this very original acrostic, with well-crafted rhyme & meter, ta-boot! Congrats on your well-deserved 2nd place in this contest. I really do love your enthusiastic kick in the pants here, as it resonates with my own personal philosophy, too. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2014
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Nice job on this very original acrostic, with well-crafted rhyme & meter, ta-boot! Congrats on your well-deserved 2nd place in this contest. I really do love your enthusiastic kick in the pants here, as it resonates with my own personal philosophy, too. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 09-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2014
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Barleygirl, a big congratulations to you too :-) And thank you for your review. Brooke
Comment from BeasPeas
Congratulations on your win of the acrostic contest. Your entry is fabulous. I enjoyed reading every line. A terrific upbeat message for everyone.
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2014
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Congratulations on your win of the acrostic contest. Your entry is fabulous. I enjoyed reading every line. A terrific upbeat message for everyone.
Comment Written 09-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2014
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Thanks so much, BeasPeas. I appreciate your generous response to this poem. Brooke :-)
Comment from Saucey
A slam dunk with this meaningful Acrostic, I happen to love Acrostic. Fitting presentation and as I always say Keep it moving baby. As usual Brooke you did the thing.
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A slam dunk with this meaningful Acrostic, I happen to love Acrostic. Fitting presentation and as I always say Keep it moving baby. As usual Brooke you did the thing.
Comment Written 09-Apr-2014
Comment from mountainwriter49
Good Morning, Brooke
I usually do not like Acrostics because they come off sounding disjointed as might a telegraphic message from Western Union. However, this poem is delightful and is so well executed, I did not realize I was reading an Acrostic. It's wonderful to see this form done justice and I hope others seeking to write in this form will use yours as a guide.
Best wishes in the contest, my friend.
Ray
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2014
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Good Morning, Brooke
I usually do not like Acrostics because they come off sounding disjointed as might a telegraphic message from Western Union. However, this poem is delightful and is so well executed, I did not realize I was reading an Acrostic. It's wonderful to see this form done justice and I hope others seeking to write in this form will use yours as a guide.
Best wishes in the contest, my friend.
Ray
Comment Written 15-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2014
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Thank you so very much, Ray, for your generosity. Yes, when I taught middle school some of the teachers would insist on assigning acrostics, and they were the worst crap anyone could imagine - Ray is for Rare, A is for Awesome, Y is for Yes. LOL
Brooke
Comment from Gaye Hemsley
Love poem Brooke As usual the rhymning is perfect and the words are so wise. I like the black and white toning. Don't little boys love trains?
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2014
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Love poem Brooke As usual the rhymning is perfect and the words are so wise. I like the black and white toning. Don't little boys love trains?
Comment Written 14-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2014
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Gaye, thank you so very much :-) Sawyer sure loves them, and trucks and cars, but most of all buses. LOL :-) Brooke
Comment from Father Flaps
Hi Brooke
As soon as I read the word "rubble", this song came into my head. Amy Grant sang it long ago, and Linda Cameron & I used it a couple of times in concerts. It was one of Linda's favorite songs, "Old Man's Rubble". Have a listen, if you like:
http://youtu.be/zpPgkkAL_TA
Your poem echoes the words of her song so well, I especially like these lines,
"Kick your problems to the curb,
Evict each trial and trouble,
Tarry not where sorrows dwell --
You need to leave life's rubble."
and your conclusion,
"Keep your sights on what's ahead
and blow on out of town!"
"Old Man's Rubble
Are you living in an old man's rubble?
Are you listenin' to the father of lies?
Are you walking' with unnecessary burdens"
Are you trying to take them upon yourself?
If you are, then you're living in bondage,
And you know that's bad for your spiritual health.
Are you trying to live by your emotions?
Are you puttin' your faith in what you feel and see?
Then you're living just to satisfy your passions,
And you better be careful 'cause you're being deceived.
Chorus:
Are you living in an old man's rubble?
Are you listenin' to the father of lies?
If you are, then you're headed for trouble.
If you listen too long, you'll eventually die.
Are you puzzled by the way that you're behavin'?
Do you wonder why you do the things you do?
Are you troubled by your lack of resistance?
Do you feel that something's got a hold on you?
Well, deep within you there's a spiritual battle.
There's a voice of the darkness and a voice of the light.
And just by listening, you've made a decision,
'Cause the voice you hear is gonna win the fight.
Chorus:
But if you're living as a new creation;
If you're listening to the Father of light,
Then you're living in a mighty fortress,
And you're gonna' be clothed in power and might.
Chorus:
Are you living in an old man's rubble?
Are you listenin' to the father of lies?
If you are, then you're headed for trouble.
If you listen too long, you'll eventually die."
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I love the message in your poem, as the title hints, "Clickety Clack". Keep trudging on, and don't look back. Nice alliteration, I can hear the train. "rubble" is such a great word choice. Is that little Sawyer by the tracks?
Thanks for bringing back some great memories!
(hugs)
Kimbob
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2014
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Hi Brooke
As soon as I read the word "rubble", this song came into my head. Amy Grant sang it long ago, and Linda Cameron & I used it a couple of times in concerts. It was one of Linda's favorite songs, "Old Man's Rubble". Have a listen, if you like:
http://youtu.be/zpPgkkAL_TA
Your poem echoes the words of her song so well, I especially like these lines,
"Kick your problems to the curb,
Evict each trial and trouble,
Tarry not where sorrows dwell --
You need to leave life's rubble."
and your conclusion,
"Keep your sights on what's ahead
and blow on out of town!"
"Old Man's Rubble
Are you living in an old man's rubble?
Are you listenin' to the father of lies?
Are you walking' with unnecessary burdens"
Are you trying to take them upon yourself?
If you are, then you're living in bondage,
And you know that's bad for your spiritual health.
Are you trying to live by your emotions?
Are you puttin' your faith in what you feel and see?
Then you're living just to satisfy your passions,
And you better be careful 'cause you're being deceived.
Chorus:
Are you living in an old man's rubble?
Are you listenin' to the father of lies?
If you are, then you're headed for trouble.
If you listen too long, you'll eventually die.
Are you puzzled by the way that you're behavin'?
Do you wonder why you do the things you do?
Are you troubled by your lack of resistance?
Do you feel that something's got a hold on you?
Well, deep within you there's a spiritual battle.
There's a voice of the darkness and a voice of the light.
And just by listening, you've made a decision,
'Cause the voice you hear is gonna win the fight.
Chorus:
But if you're living as a new creation;
If you're listening to the Father of light,
Then you're living in a mighty fortress,
And you're gonna' be clothed in power and might.
Chorus:
Are you living in an old man's rubble?
Are you listenin' to the father of lies?
If you are, then you're headed for trouble.
If you listen too long, you'll eventually die."
*************************
I love the message in your poem, as the title hints, "Clickety Clack". Keep trudging on, and don't look back. Nice alliteration, I can hear the train. "rubble" is such a great word choice. Is that little Sawyer by the tracks?
Thanks for bringing back some great memories!
(hugs)
Kimbob
Comment Written 14-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2014
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What a great song - thanks so much for sharing it with me, Kimbob, and thank you also for your generous sixth star :-) Brooke
