Comment from Treischel

Exceptional

A very soulful and lyrical song lyric. It probably fits into the category of "Blues" as it mournfully asks "Why?". The weight and pressure creates a Helen holy mood. Very well done.

 Comment Written 11-Mar-2014

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reply by the author on 17-Mar-2014

Thanks for your kind review. Have a lovely week, Ine. Thanks ever so much for the lovely .six

Comment from MoIronE13

Excellent

Time in a bottle.
Toss it on the waves and let it drift afar.
It will return.
Again and again.
Endless and eternal
Peace be with you

 Comment Written 10-Mar-2014

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reply by the author on 17-Mar-2014

Thanks for your kind review. Have a lovely week, Ine

Comment from judiverse

Exceptional

Going with a six on this. It really works as a song lyric. Here in the U.S., I could see it as a country song. You establish the narrator as someone who's regretting her decisions and is asking why? In third line, I'd leave out 'got.' The repetition would work well for a song. It shows the narrator's attitude. In next to last line, you want that to be 'wondering' not 'wonder.' This flows very well and has attitude. judi

 Comment Written 10-Mar-2014

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reply by the author on 10-Mar-2014

Thanks for your kind review. Have a lovely week, Ine. Thanks for this lovely six. I'll check, ty

reply by judiverse on 10-Mar-2014

Hi, ine. You're so welcome. Best of luck in the contest. judi

Comment from MizKat

Excellent

Hi Ine,

This is a very nice song lyric. I enjoyed the read very much. I wonder the same things once in a while. Thanks for sharing this.

Kat

 Comment Written 09-Mar-2014

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reply by the author on 10-Mar-2014

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Comment from Jackarrie

Excellent

There's no time and place for everything,
time to cry,
time to dream,
there's time to wait
But there's no time to waste no

And I keep wonder why
I wonder why


I love this poem of asking the unanswered questions, ones that are mostly asked by many.

The answers are usually inside of us

Well done. Mary

 Comment Written 09-Mar-2014

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reply by the author on 10-Mar-2014

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Comment from Ronni

Excellent

Interesting lyric, which likely reflects the same
kind of things we wonder about too, with no answers
either for all the wonderings.
Best wishes,

 Comment Written 09-Mar-2014

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reply by the author on 10-Mar-2014

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Comment from Dorothy Farrell

Excellent

Hi Ina - This is written with so much feeling and so much uncertainty. You are here because you are meant to be - and here you are meant to stay. You WILL have time to dream - be sure of it. Be focused on that and things will come right. Very best regards - Dorothy

 Comment Written 09-Mar-2014

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reply by the author on 10-Mar-2014

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Comment from michaelcahill

Excellent

I like this. Does it have music to go with it. Seems very singable. I'd love to hear the music. There's a way to add it, but I can't figure it out. A few people here add music. Reconciled I think you know. Great piece. mikey

 Comment Written 09-Mar-2014

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reply by the author on 09-Mar-2014

Thanks for your kind review. Have a lovely and blessed Sunday, Ine

Comment from sunnilicious

Excellent

That poem came out well as it is expressive and lyrical. Well thought out and clearly written. So much to think about. It can be depressing. Nice work. Have a good weekend :)

 Comment Written 09-Mar-2014

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reply by the author on 09-Mar-2014

Thanks for your kind review. Have a lovely and blessed Sunday, Ine

reply by sunnilicious on 09-Mar-2014

Have a good day, Ine. H&K, Alicia

Comment from Sonjalee

Excellent

Very interesting poem. I had to read it several times and I am still not sure what you are saying. I guess you are saying that you do not have time to wonder about why we are here and other mysteries of life. It is original and I like the repetition.
Let 's live and not worry about why we are here.

 Comment Written 09-Mar-2014

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reply by the author on 09-Mar-2014

Thanks for your kind review. Have a lovely and blessed Sunday, Ine