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Viewing comments for Chapter 9 "Joe's Story & Plans"Acts of war have plunged Earth into catastrophe.
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Comment from nordicgirl
Nice way to get some information in about the nature of the disaster. Wise I think not to give too much. Being in the dark is important to the story I think. Well done. NG
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2014
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Nice way to get some information in about the nature of the disaster. Wise I think not to give too much. Being in the dark is important to the story I think. Well done. NG
Comment Written 08-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2014
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Missed you. Glad to see you back and catching up, mikey
Comment from Sankey
Michael finding this a bit complex sorry I might move on. I am sorry I took so long to get to this. I guess we are all not gonna write to everyone's satisfaction. This is totally different to stuff you have done before. I wish t=you well ok!
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Michael finding this a bit complex sorry I might move on. I am sorry I took so long to get to this. I guess we are all not gonna write to everyone's satisfaction. This is totally different to stuff you have done before. I wish t=you well ok!
Comment Written 06-Mar-2014
Comment from Darkhorse555
coo coo i had to smile was taken in he was walking around with a headless pigeon talking to it ha ha excellent read beautifully penned mikey
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coo coo i had to smile was taken in he was walking around with a headless pigeon talking to it ha ha excellent read beautifully penned mikey
Comment Written 06-Mar-2014
Comment from Marillion
Good hinting at what happened, Mikey, or, rather, that the president is alive and the capital is now in the Pacific Northwest. Salem, Oregon, huh? Interesting.
I'm also very curious as to who the 'unfriendlies' are. Good slow build of tension, and I was wondering about the 'clients', too, and when they'll become a problem.
But...did you have to make David a sex offender? ;-)
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2014
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Good hinting at what happened, Mikey, or, rather, that the president is alive and the capital is now in the Pacific Northwest. Salem, Oregon, huh? Interesting.
I'm also very curious as to who the 'unfriendlies' are. Good slow build of tension, and I was wondering about the 'clients', too, and when they'll become a problem.
But...did you have to make David a sex offender? ;-)
Comment Written 06-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2014
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well, one person's offense is another person's ecxtasy.
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Well, one person's offense is another person's ecstasy. I've already had to make "Linda" more prominent. Hahaha. I hope there are no sensitive Tonnies out there. You may not want to see what happens to David next. But, know this: he should never have tried impersonating you. There is only one original that can never be duplicated. All others must be eliminated!!
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Then dispatch the bastard as quickly as possible. ;-)
Comment from robina1978
I think I might have missed the previous chapter with the helicopter crash in it. They learn that they are not in the worst group and the President is safe, nothing more.
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I think I might have missed the previous chapter with the helicopter crash in it. They learn that they are not in the worst group and the President is safe, nothing more.
Comment Written 06-Mar-2014
Comment from ragamuffin
Something's up (government as usual), and something's coming. Serious and severe decisions to be made, dire situations just around the corner. Excellent! Lots set up to keep us anticipating more.
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Something's up (government as usual), and something's coming. Serious and severe decisions to be made, dire situations just around the corner. Excellent! Lots set up to keep us anticipating more.
Comment Written 06-Mar-2014
Comment from l.raven
HI Michael, OMG, kill someone??? not sire about that...but I'm not there...and I don't trust this guy...keep an eye on him ...LOL...sounds great you...well done Luff Ya Linda xxoo
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HI Michael, OMG, kill someone??? not sire about that...but I'm not there...and I don't trust this guy...keep an eye on him ...LOL...sounds great you...well done Luff Ya Linda xxoo
Comment Written 05-Mar-2014
Comment from 24chas
Enjoyed this chapter, mikey. I like the thought process that these survivors are having. It's very realistic. After all, on the strong survive. Nice job.
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Enjoyed this chapter, mikey. I like the thought process that these survivors are having. It's very realistic. After all, on the strong survive. Nice job.
Comment Written 05-Mar-2014
Comment from ProjectBluebook
I get the feeling something terrible must have happened on the East coast. Why else, would the US capital be moved? Is it Joe, he describes this rescue attempt and the group is paranoid at first. I'm wondering, about the shots Joe heard fired. Who are these invaders? I ponder, was nukes involved? Was Russian lands troops deployed following an invasion. I don't trust that Nathan or David with their violent history and background. Everything looks ship shape to me. You got no worries and I forsee no signs of writers block. This is a good story, Mikey but I don't have to tell you that. out of sixes, already, sorry, wackydo
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I get the feeling something terrible must have happened on the East coast. Why else, would the US capital be moved? Is it Joe, he describes this rescue attempt and the group is paranoid at first. I'm wondering, about the shots Joe heard fired. Who are these invaders? I ponder, was nukes involved? Was Russian lands troops deployed following an invasion. I don't trust that Nathan or David with their violent history and background. Everything looks ship shape to me. You got no worries and I forsee no signs of writers block. This is a good story, Mikey but I don't have to tell you that. out of sixes, already, sorry, wackydo
Comment Written 05-Mar-2014
Comment from GracieAnn
Mikey, this is a good installment that cuts to the chase about a serious threat to the group's total survival. The introduction of the stranger can make the plot interesting and the morality of their predicament will soon need to be addressed. It is uncomfortable to say the least. I'd sooner they die of some sort or accident or health issue than be murdered. Another thought I had was that you don't want this to be another remake of The Stand, either. You've waded into the weeds and I'm sure you come out just fine. Well done. :0 GracieAnn
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Mikey, this is a good installment that cuts to the chase about a serious threat to the group's total survival. The introduction of the stranger can make the plot interesting and the morality of their predicament will soon need to be addressed. It is uncomfortable to say the least. I'd sooner they die of some sort or accident or health issue than be murdered. Another thought I had was that you don't want this to be another remake of The Stand, either. You've waded into the weeds and I'm sure you come out just fine. Well done. :0 GracieAnn
Comment Written 05-Mar-2014
