The Empty Sails
Sonnet contest entry96 total reviews
Comment from justafan
Hello there DS, justafan here. Stopped by to see what else you have to offer and my goodness... such a talent you are. Congrats on this lovely work of art you have penned sir.
I am learning the poetry game slowly and not tried my hand at a sonnet thus far. Oh wait...I do have one sonnet...it is my only girl...Her name is Sonnette :). She is my work of art. lol.
Hope you won't mind if I become your fan. I love what I am reading and yearn for more :)
Always justafan,
Missy
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2015
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Hello there DS, justafan here. Stopped by to see what else you have to offer and my goodness... such a talent you are. Congrats on this lovely work of art you have penned sir.
I am learning the poetry game slowly and not tried my hand at a sonnet thus far. Oh wait...I do have one sonnet...it is my only girl...Her name is Sonnette :). She is my work of art. lol.
Hope you won't mind if I become your fan. I love what I am reading and yearn for more :)
Always justafan,
Missy
Comment Written 07-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2015
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Hey, Missy, hello. Thank you for the great review. Glad to see you jumped on as a fan. If you ever want to give a sonnet a try or have any questions just give me a shout and I'll try to help out as much as I can and let you in on the little secrets of the sonnet. Once you learn them, they come fairly easy. Have a great day, M. Gab with you later.
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Ron
Comment from dragonpoet
This is well worth the win. Congrats.
This is an inventive view on writers block. But this poem shows you don't have to worry about that.
The sailboat and the little path it has left is a good metaphor for the mind of the poet/writer and how it sometimes
seems floating out at sea with no aid.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2014
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This is well worth the win. Congrats.
This is an inventive view on writers block. But this poem shows you don't have to worry about that.
The sailboat and the little path it has left is a good metaphor for the mind of the poet/writer and how it sometimes
seems floating out at sea with no aid.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
Comment Written 26-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2014
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Thank you so much for the fantastic review and the big sixer, dragonpoet. I dearly appreciate the gracious rating and congrats. I'm humbled. I'm glad you liked the piece. Thank you again.
DS
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You are so very welcome on all accounts. The rating was well deserved
Joan
Comment from MAB
Love this!!!!! it made me go mmmm mmmm mmmm Like I was at a restaurant. Very nice imagery and every stanza flowed perfectly setting up the next quatrain. Great metaphor too. My favorite lines are...
"I'll follow any path the course unveils, and welcome every treasure that awaits"
"I free the helm to drift the open seas, to find what precious gems the muse inspires."
Wow great job you have just inspired me to start writing more Sonnets that are about things other than love.
GREAT JOB KEEP UP THE GREAT WORK!!
SAM
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2014
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Love this!!!!! it made me go mmmm mmmm mmmm Like I was at a restaurant. Very nice imagery and every stanza flowed perfectly setting up the next quatrain. Great metaphor too. My favorite lines are...
"I'll follow any path the course unveils, and welcome every treasure that awaits"
"I free the helm to drift the open seas, to find what precious gems the muse inspires."
Wow great job you have just inspired me to start writing more Sonnets that are about things other than love.
GREAT JOB KEEP UP THE GREAT WORK!!
SAM
Comment Written 22-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2014
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Hey, Sam, hello. Thank you so much for the fantastic review and the big sixer, friend. I really appreciate the generous stars and kind words. I'm humbled. Yeah, sonnets can be about anything. Love is good but there's so many of them out there any more, lol. I'm glad you liked the piece and that you jumped on as a fan, Sam. Thank you again. Have a good one.
Ron.
Comment from Dave Russell
First let me offer heartfelt congratulations on the win with this stunning piece of work. Such an honest assessment of the writing process. I wish that I had a six to offer.
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2014
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First let me offer heartfelt congratulations on the win with this stunning piece of work. Such an honest assessment of the writing process. I wish that I had a six to offer.
Comment Written 22-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2014
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Thank you for the excellent review and the big six offer, Dave. I really appreciate the congrats, friend. I'm glad you liked the piece.
Ron
Comment from poetbear
This so reminds of Key West!
Great image and imagery.
Excellent use of simile and metaphor.
Nice use of genre.
Reads and flows well.
A gem!
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2014
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This so reminds of Key West!
Great image and imagery.
Excellent use of simile and metaphor.
Nice use of genre.
Reads and flows well.
A gem!
Comment Written 22-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2014
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Thank you for the fantastic review, poetbear. You know, I've lived in Florida on and off for many years and the only rime I've been to KW was one time for work. I'll have to check it out some day. I really appreciate the generous stars, friend. I'm glad you liked the piece.
Ron
Comment from starkat
Hello Ron - Congratulations on winning this sonnet contest! Great metaphor - perfect rhyme and iambic meter, throughout. Shakespeare would approve and toast your success. And so,
you're sailing around with a muse that creates vibrant winds
(you're lucky, my muse somehow got frozen in the polar vortex and hasn't unfrozen yet, this year). Nice turn in the 3rd stanza - ah, those woes of windless days (nice alliteration) we hope won't last forever - inspiration could be dining with fishes or seagulls. Wonderful closing couplet where you and muse ponder the moment to sail or toss anchor, both preferable to aimless drifting.
Again, congratulations! Outstanding sonnet that works even without the gorgeous artwork. (don't know how you put such a large photo with the piece? maybe Tom has relaxed the 300 pixel requirement that I size my pics for posting)
Enjoyed the sail, and metaphor. Well done ... ;o) Art
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2014
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Hello Ron - Congratulations on winning this sonnet contest! Great metaphor - perfect rhyme and iambic meter, throughout. Shakespeare would approve and toast your success. And so,
you're sailing around with a muse that creates vibrant winds
(you're lucky, my muse somehow got frozen in the polar vortex and hasn't unfrozen yet, this year). Nice turn in the 3rd stanza - ah, those woes of windless days (nice alliteration) we hope won't last forever - inspiration could be dining with fishes or seagulls. Wonderful closing couplet where you and muse ponder the moment to sail or toss anchor, both preferable to aimless drifting.
Again, congratulations! Outstanding sonnet that works even without the gorgeous artwork. (don't know how you put such a large photo with the piece? maybe Tom has relaxed the 300 pixel requirement that I size my pics for posting)
Enjoyed the sail, and metaphor. Well done ... ;o) Art
Comment Written 22-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2014
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Hey Art, who are you doing, my friend? Thank you for the fantastic review and big sixer. Are you still driving trucks. That's what gives me plenty of alone time with my muse, lol. When I'm driving and in the mood, I can compose away the hours. I really appreciate the generous stars and congrats, Art. I'm humbled. I'm glad you liked the piece. Thank you again. Have a good one, friend.
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Ron
Comment from DR DIP
love it just curious? does a sonnet finish with 2 line verse? beautifully written dragon..your rhyming verse is sublime well done
well deserved win
dip
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2014
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love it just curious? does a sonnet finish with 2 line verse? beautifully written dragon..your rhyming verse is sublime well done
well deserved win
dip
Comment Written 22-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2014
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Thank you for the great review, dp. Yes, every sonnet I've ever read ended with a couplet at the end. So I think so at least. I'm glad you liked the piece, dp.
DS
Comment from Maria C.
Congratulations on this much deserved win. I love the metaphor throughout the verses. Beautiful imagery and use of consonance in your lines. Good closing lines.
Loved it.
Maria
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2014
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Congratulations on this much deserved win. I love the metaphor throughout the verses. Beautiful imagery and use of consonance in your lines. Good closing lines.
Loved it.
Maria
Comment Written 21-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2014
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Thank you for the kind review, Maria. I dearly appreciate the gracious stars and congrats. I'm glad you liked the piece.
;]
Ron
Comment from mermaids
I find this poem enchanting,I am sailing on the sea and my muse is guiding me,is such a wonderful feeling. Excellent sonnet form and I can see the Bard smiling upon your ship.
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2014
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I find this poem enchanting,I am sailing on the sea and my muse is guiding me,is such a wonderful feeling. Excellent sonnet form and I can see the Bard smiling upon your ship.
Comment Written 21-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2014
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Thank you, Mermaids. I really appreciate the gracious stars. I'm glad you liked the piece.
Comment from Pearl Edwards
Congrats on the win, and also on this lovely sonnet. Great artwork and very creative to use of your writer's muse and catching the wind. Great closing lines with the anchor being cast.Once again congrats.
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2014
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Congrats on the win, and also on this lovely sonnet. Great artwork and very creative to use of your writer's muse and catching the wind. Great closing lines with the anchor being cast.Once again congrats.
Comment Written 21-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2014
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Thank you for the kind review and congrats, Pearl. I'm glad you liked the piece.
