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Viewing comments for Chapter 5 "Dreams, Outbursts and Johnny Cakes"Acts of war have plunged Earth into catastrophe.
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Comment from Darkhorse555
this dazzled in my eyes loved these words Speculating that all hell had broken loose was a reasonable conclusion beautifully penned piece of reading dear friend excellent
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2014
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this dazzled in my eyes loved these words Speculating that all hell had broken loose was a reasonable conclusion beautifully penned piece of reading dear friend excellent
Comment Written 03-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2014
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Great. Pleased you are following and enjoying. Thank you kindly. mikey
Comment from GracieAnn
Mikey, this is a needed dialog for several reasons. First, the idea of what just happened on a worldwide level via the dream is plausible given the current political environment in which we find ourselves. Second, it delineates opinions and may lay the groundwork for a future schisim in the ranks. Too many chiefs, the mental patients' possible meltdown, and just plain mental and emotional wear and tear of everyone. Food is the kingpin of the whole write it seems. Well done. I'm mobile today so please excuse any spags here. :0 GracieAnn
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Mikey, this is a needed dialog for several reasons. First, the idea of what just happened on a worldwide level via the dream is plausible given the current political environment in which we find ourselves. Second, it delineates opinions and may lay the groundwork for a future schisim in the ranks. Too many chiefs, the mental patients' possible meltdown, and just plain mental and emotional wear and tear of everyone. Food is the kingpin of the whole write it seems. Well done. I'm mobile today so please excuse any spags here. :0 GracieAnn
Comment Written 03-Mar-2014
Comment from ravenblack
Hmmmm, I have the feeling that all is not as it seems, that perhaps they are all mental patients, the world did not really end, and the narrator who fancies himself a Shaman ( dreams/stories) is the craziest one of all, attempting to build a cult. Sorry if there are any spoilers here.
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2014
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Hmmmm, I have the feeling that all is not as it seems, that perhaps they are all mental patients, the world did not really end, and the narrator who fancies himself a Shaman ( dreams/stories) is the craziest one of all, attempting to build a cult. Sorry if there are any spoilers here.
Comment Written 03-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2014
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Hahaha!! I jump way ahead in my hopelessly behind responses. Now my whole story is an anti-climax. What a great idea and better than what I am writing too. No, none of that in this one so far....so far. I have to write that at some point though. Love it. mikey
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
This was a tense chapter, each having thoughts about what had happened and what was going to happen. I tried to put myself in their position. What would I do? I have no idea. one day everything will run out, then what? Your story is progressing really well, in a 'real' sense of the way, and very believable. Excellent. xsx Sandra.
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This was a tense chapter, each having thoughts about what had happened and what was going to happen. I tried to put myself in their position. What would I do? I have no idea. one day everything will run out, then what? Your story is progressing really well, in a 'real' sense of the way, and very believable. Excellent. xsx Sandra.
Comment Written 03-Mar-2014
Comment from robina1978
I think I also should have read this before an other. But they say here thinking about what happened is useless as nobody know. The mental patients should get their drugs as a first priority.
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I think I also should have read this before an other. But they say here thinking about what happened is useless as nobody know. The mental patients should get their drugs as a first priority.
Comment Written 03-Mar-2014
Comment from 24chas
Great chapter, mikey. Really like the pacing of it. The last line was really great. Love the dark humor. Keep it up, my friend.
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Great chapter, mikey. Really like the pacing of it. The last line was really great. Love the dark humor. Keep it up, my friend.
Comment Written 02-Mar-2014
Comment from DonandVicki
Nice chapter Mikey an excellent continuation of the story with good visual aids that you conjure up with your words. Very good read as always . Don
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2014
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Nice chapter Mikey an excellent continuation of the story with good visual aids that you conjure up with your words. Very good read as always . Don
Comment Written 02-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2014
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Glad you're enjoying this. It's expanding a bit as I get input. Your strong support is much appreciated. Love all the stars. Thank you so much!! mikey
Comment from nordicgirl
I am sensing an attraction between Johnny and Chhristine, but Christine does not seem like a one person girl. I think she might overlook the fact that Johnny is a guy. But Jennifer seems a fsctor too. I don*t know, but romance looks to be brewing!! Funny as hell ending!!! NG
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2014
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I am sensing an attraction between Johnny and Chhristine, but Christine does not seem like a one person girl. I think she might overlook the fact that Johnny is a guy. But Jennifer seems a fsctor too. I don*t know, but romance looks to be brewing!! Funny as hell ending!!! NG
Comment Written 02-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2014
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I haven't decided completely. But, your perceptions are on the money. Christine is certainly not conventional, but neither is Jennifer or Johnny either for that matter. We'll see. I laughed too when that line popped into my head!! mikey
Comment from adewpearl
If I may, Mr. Chairman, - add commas for direct address
A good look at group dynamics as the people in this group speculate what has happened to the world
Brooke
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2014
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If I may, Mr. Chairman, - add commas for direct address
A good look at group dynamics as the people in this group speculate what has happened to the world
Brooke
Comment Written 02-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2014
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Glad to hear that. I was going for that. Letting them talk back and forth a bit to see if little clues to their personalities would spill out. Thank you much, mikey
Comment from Tatarka2
I think this has thee makings of a very big story/book. Your author's notes indicate that you have it planned, and know what is coming. However, you're introducing the characters at a good pace that lets the reader learn about them naturally, through their own words and actions. Each chapter has left me more intrigued to see what comes next.
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2014
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I think this has thee makings of a very big story/book. Your author's notes indicate that you have it planned, and know what is coming. However, you're introducing the characters at a good pace that lets the reader learn about them naturally, through their own words and actions. Each chapter has left me more intrigued to see what comes next.
Comment Written 02-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2014
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Good to hear. Yes, I am trying to make sure I don't throw somebody in out of the blue like I have in other stories. Even though it is expanding somewhat, I do have the basic outline in mind and that helps a lot. Thank you very much, mikey
