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Viewing comments for Chapter 4 "Old Friends and New"Acts of war have plunged Earth into catastrophe.
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Comment from Sankey
Good work interesting moreso now we are on the road. Still curious but then that would not be Michael if it wasn't huh!
unbeknownst interesting word need to look that up in some dictionaries I remember Allan Alda using something simila on MASH can't decided if it is another American thing or not.
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Good work interesting moreso now we are on the road. Still curious but then that would not be Michael if it wasn't huh!
unbeknownst interesting word need to look that up in some dictionaries I remember Allan Alda using something simila on MASH can't decided if it is another American thing or not.
Comment Written 06-Mar-2014
Comment from Darkhorse555
sounds a tough one for you mikey smiling She is freakishly strong and it takes everything I have to hold my own arm wrestling with her very enjoyable read excellent dear friend
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2014
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sounds a tough one for you mikey smiling She is freakishly strong and it takes everything I have to hold my own arm wrestling with her very enjoyable read excellent dear friend
Comment Written 03-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2014
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That is a bit of truth there. Hahaha. My 5' 2'' friend. Very cute. Never had a man beat me either!!!
Comment from ravenblack
Akin to your last science fiction story, you have established quite a cast of characters. Be sure to flesh them out and have them featured s few at a time and don't forget the setting.
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Akin to your last science fiction story, you have established quite a cast of characters. Be sure to flesh them out and have them featured s few at a time and don't forget the setting.
Comment Written 03-Mar-2014
Comment from robina1978
When I wrote my review today on a further chapter, I had not seen this one yet. Here you tell who everybody is. Nice chapter. Pity she lost her baby.
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When I wrote my review today on a further chapter, I had not seen this one yet. Here you tell who everybody is. Nice chapter. Pity she lost her baby.
Comment Written 03-Mar-2014
Comment from nordicgirl
Smart to introduce characters early. You do so in an interesting and entertaining way. Written well and moves along eell so we are not bogged down. The story is still advancing. Well done. NG
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2014
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Smart to introduce characters early. You do so in an interesting and entertaining way. Written well and moves along eell so we are not bogged down. The story is still advancing. Well done. NG
Comment Written 02-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2014
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Yep. Trying to get them all introduced without putting everyone to sleep. I think it will save some awkward moments in the long run. Glad it is moving along well enough still. mikey
Comment from adewpearl
there is Christine, who is - add comma
She is freakishly strong, and it takes - add comma
gal named Judy, who I suppose - add comma
excellent character descriptions
you work back story in well
Brooke
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2014
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there is Christine, who is - add comma
She is freakishly strong, and it takes - add comma
gal named Judy, who I suppose - add comma
excellent character descriptions
you work back story in well
Brooke
Comment Written 02-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2014
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Glad you are finding the character descriptions to your liking. I'm trying to make them interesting and defined. Thank you so much. Trying to stay on track! mikey
Comment from Tatarka2
This is starting to have a sort of "Hunger Games" feel to it. (Wouldn't it be great if it were that successful?) I think you're setting up the characters nicely. I'm intrigued to see what happens next.
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2014
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This is starting to have a sort of "Hunger Games" feel to it. (Wouldn't it be great if it were that successful?) I think you're setting up the characters nicely. I'm intrigued to see what happens next.
Comment Written 02-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2014
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That would be nice! I'd settle for a hundred copies on Amazon at this point though. Hahaha. mikey
Comment from l.raven
OK Michael, Now that we have met everyone...And I am most say I am impressed with Linda...LOL...she sounds Like me...LOL...kind of sad Jennifer lost her baby...but not a good time to be having one...OK you let it rip...bring it on...a great write...Luff ya Linda xxoo hugs
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2014
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OK Michael, Now that we have met everyone...And I am most say I am impressed with Linda...LOL...she sounds Like me...LOL...kind of sad Jennifer lost her baby...but not a good time to be having one...OK you let it rip...bring it on...a great write...Luff ya Linda xxoo hugs
Comment Written 02-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2014
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You like Linda, huh? I guess I will have to take care of her then. Hahaha. Trying to get the intros out of the way so they don't slow things down later. mikey
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great idea...she wants special attention...LOL...it's going great...Luff ya Linda xxoo
Comment from Sasha
You did a great job with this one. I like how you introduced the characters and know you will provide them with more depth as the story goes on. Being pregnant in a horrific situation like this it terrifying and not knowing what has, or will, happen, the loss of the baby may in fact be a relief. I know that may sound cruel but bringing a child into a world that may have unknown dangers is not the happiest of circumstances.
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You did a great job with this one. I like how you introduced the characters and know you will provide them with more depth as the story goes on. Being pregnant in a horrific situation like this it terrifying and not knowing what has, or will, happen, the loss of the baby may in fact be a relief. I know that may sound cruel but bringing a child into a world that may have unknown dangers is not the happiest of circumstances.
Comment Written 02-Mar-2014
Comment from ragamuffin
I really like the way the narrator tells most of the story rather than dialogue. It's a bit different than the norm, which I find to be a good thing. Excellent description of the folks in the group, which seems to based on considerate and unbiased observation over many years.
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I really like the way the narrator tells most of the story rather than dialogue. It's a bit different than the norm, which I find to be a good thing. Excellent description of the folks in the group, which seems to based on considerate and unbiased observation over many years.
Comment Written 02-Mar-2014
