Bumbershoots and Slickers
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Comment from ILovePoetry!
This is a very fun and imaginative story - perfect for little children. The rhyme is like a bumpy ride and the words are simple and cute. Great work!
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2014
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This is a very fun and imaginative story - perfect for little children. The rhyme is like a bumpy ride and the words are simple and cute. Great work!
Comment Written 04-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2014
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Thank you so much, ILovePoetry :-) Brooke
Comment from Pearl Edwards
I've never heard of a bumbershoots and once you know (should have read author's notes first) it puts a different read on this fun read. Great rhyming that makes these verses flow along quickly as you read. Enjoyed the pic too.
valda
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2014
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I've never heard of a bumbershoots and once you know (should have read author's notes first) it puts a different read on this fun read. Great rhyming that makes these verses flow along quickly as you read. Enjoyed the pic too.
valda
Comment Written 04-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2014
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valda, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Lovewritingstuff
Hi, Brooke. Lovely poem with interesting metaphors. Creative words to substitute umbrella and rain. this poem has a good flow and imagery, and the picture goes very well with it. Children will love to hear it, but also other age range. I also got the impression of a message conveyed, regardless of bad things that may happen, there's always a chance for something good to surface.
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2014
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Hi, Brooke. Lovely poem with interesting metaphors. Creative words to substitute umbrella and rain. this poem has a good flow and imagery, and the picture goes very well with it. Children will love to hear it, but also other age range. I also got the impression of a message conveyed, regardless of bad things that may happen, there's always a chance for something good to surface.
Comment Written 04-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2014
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Lovewritingstuff, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Treischel
I loved this wonderful Quatern full off adventure and soggy imagination. Love the use of those fanciful names for the rain gear. Great repeated line. Delightfully imaginative.
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2014
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I loved this wonderful Quatern full off adventure and soggy imagination. Love the use of those fanciful names for the rain gear. Great repeated line. Delightfully imaginative.
Comment Written 04-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2014
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Treischel, thank you so much for this encouraging and generous response to my poem :-) Brooke
Comment from Zue65
Bumbershoots and slickers are new words in the gallery of vocabulary that I enjoy learning. First time I ever heard of such terms. Thanks a lot, your poem brought me back to the wonders of childhood discovery. God bless.
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2014
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Bumbershoots and slickers are new words in the gallery of vocabulary that I enjoy learning. First time I ever heard of such terms. Thanks a lot, your poem brought me back to the wonders of childhood discovery. God bless.
Comment Written 04-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2014
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Nassus, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Auroraboreal800
Love this well written poem. It shows great imagination, and very adventurous. The poem reads well, and the message is clear. Nice picture that accentuates this poem.
Great job Adewpearl.
:)
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2014
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Love this well written poem. It shows great imagination, and very adventurous. The poem reads well, and the message is clear. Nice picture that accentuates this poem.
Great job Adewpearl.
:)
Comment Written 04-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2014
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Aurora, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from camilla61wsw
I love this poem! I feel the nostalgia, and you took me on the adventure with you. I loved using the "fanciful name" for the umbrella. Good job! Love it just the way it is.
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2014
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I love this poem! I feel the nostalgia, and you took me on the adventure with you. I loved using the "fanciful name" for the umbrella. Good job! Love it just the way it is.
Comment Written 04-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2014
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Camilla, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from AprilShower
Hi, Brooke. This is a cute picture. I enjoyed your poem, too, but I have a few suggestions.
You have,
when bumbershoots and slickers failed,
Suggest:
(when bumbershoots and slickers fail,)
You have,
but anything is possible
Suggest:
(but anything can be a norm)
April
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2014
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Hi, Brooke. This is a cute picture. I enjoyed your poem, too, but I have a few suggestions.
You have,
when bumbershoots and slickers failed,
Suggest:
(when bumbershoots and slickers fail,)
You have,
but anything is possible
Suggest:
(but anything can be a norm)
April
Comment Written 03-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2014
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Thank you, April, for your thoughtful feedback :-) Brooke
Comment from Titanx9
Sounds like California. It's been months since we had rain and when it rained, my goodness did it pour. I'm thankful I live in the hill area that has been fairly stable, but even here, some of the home owners are worrying about mud slides. We are supposed to get a few more deluges before the rainy season is over. It's wonderful that Sawyer has an older, play sister. I like the picture of the two of them. I also like your poem and had to look up "plumpened." I just added it to my stash of "not my ordinary words."
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2014
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Sounds like California. It's been months since we had rain and when it rained, my goodness did it pour. I'm thankful I live in the hill area that has been fairly stable, but even here, some of the home owners are worrying about mud slides. We are supposed to get a few more deluges before the rainy season is over. It's wonderful that Sawyer has an older, play sister. I like the picture of the two of them. I also like your poem and had to look up "plumpened." I just added it to my stash of "not my ordinary words."
Comment Written 03-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2014
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My daughter lives in Encino, so yes, I've heard all about the rain. Nora is the best honorary big sister a boy could ever have. I am so happy that she is part of his life. Thank you for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Comment from GWinterwin
Good poem with a good picture as you tell of the failing of bumbershoots and slickers. Sounds like quite a journey in the mind of someoene. Good rhyming and word flow as the stroy is told.
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2014
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Good poem with a good picture as you tell of the failing of bumbershoots and slickers. Sounds like quite a journey in the mind of someoene. Good rhyming and word flow as the stroy is told.
Comment Written 03-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2014
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GWinterwin, thank you so much :-) Brooke
