I've Seen Those Days
quatrains in abab rhyme165 total reviews
Comment from mountainwriter49
Good Evening, Brooke
I'm so glad I found this poem this evening. I admire your choice of theme contrasting the storms of the sea vis-a-vis the calm of the sun. The poem's ending resolution of hope for the peaceful day is perfect.
I admire the skill with which you executed the end rhyme pairs as well as the internal rhymes between lines, i.e., pounding/sounding and the slant rhyme of known/down.
A wonderful poem well executed. Best of luck to you in the contest.
Ray
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2014
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Good Evening, Brooke
I'm so glad I found this poem this evening. I admire your choice of theme contrasting the storms of the sea vis-a-vis the calm of the sun. The poem's ending resolution of hope for the peaceful day is perfect.
I admire the skill with which you executed the end rhyme pairs as well as the internal rhymes between lines, i.e., pounding/sounding and the slant rhyme of known/down.
A wonderful poem well executed. Best of luck to you in the contest.
Ray
Comment Written 01-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2014
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Ray, thank you so much, my friend, for such an insightful review and for your most thoughtfully generous rating :-) Brooke
Comment from TELLER OF TALES
it is very lovely writing by the author, it is excellently driven and composed as if one was gently feeling every word and living it, it is a very powerful piece....The teller of tales.....
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2014
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it is very lovely writing by the author, it is excellently driven and composed as if one was gently feeling every word and living it, it is a very powerful piece....The teller of tales.....
Comment Written 27-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2014
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Thank you, Teller of Tales, for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Comment from Deborah Marie
Stunning piece! I just love your progression, rhythm and flow. And, of course your abab rhyming scheme. The artwork is breathtaking and adds a lot to your writing. Keep 'em coming, Deb
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2014
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Stunning piece! I just love your progression, rhythm and flow. And, of course your abab rhyming scheme. The artwork is breathtaking and adds a lot to your writing. Keep 'em coming, Deb
Comment Written 26-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2014
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Deb, thank you so much for your gracious and generous response to this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from FrannyG
A really lovely set of quatrains, Brooke, with the mood change halfway through. Always it's your originality that impresses me both in your content and your choice of rhyming words. Excellent.
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2014
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A really lovely set of quatrains, Brooke, with the mood change halfway through. Always it's your originality that impresses me both in your content and your choice of rhyming words. Excellent.
Comment Written 26-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2014
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Franny, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from melodymavic
This poem reminds me about the difficulties in life. I like it how it express this they the words of "sea" and "shores". At first, I imagine it as a soldier in a battlefield. As I keep on reading each stanza, i imagine a girl struggles in school life and go to beach to express herself. That's all. :)
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2014
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This poem reminds me about the difficulties in life. I like it how it express this they the words of "sea" and "shores". At first, I imagine it as a soldier in a battlefield. As I keep on reading each stanza, i imagine a girl struggles in school life and go to beach to express herself. That's all. :)
Comment Written 26-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2014
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thank you, melodymavic, for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Comment from Debra White
Hi Brooke :)
Its all about taking the rough with the smooth and knowing that for every down, an up will follow. Lovely message in excellent form. I enjoy your use of alliteration throughout and your rhyme and meter are flawless as always.
Good luck in the contest - I think this is a delightful poem :) Kindest regards, Debra
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2014
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Hi Brooke :)
Its all about taking the rough with the smooth and knowing that for every down, an up will follow. Lovely message in excellent form. I enjoy your use of alliteration throughout and your rhyme and meter are flawless as always.
Good luck in the contest - I think this is a delightful poem :) Kindest regards, Debra
Comment Written 26-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2014
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Debra, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from califdot
I like your poem. You definitely have talent with your writing. Your poem flows nicely and has good rhythm. The poetic devices you have used in this poem are very well done. When I read your poem out loud the cadence is lyrical and strong. You have done a great job. Overall the poem is written very well indeed! The picture you have chosen matches your poem very well. Your poem tells a story, which is always good for the reader. It is full of imagery and paints great pictures for your readers. Really nice job!
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2014
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I like your poem. You definitely have talent with your writing. Your poem flows nicely and has good rhythm. The poetic devices you have used in this poem are very well done. When I read your poem out loud the cadence is lyrical and strong. You have done a great job. Overall the poem is written very well indeed! The picture you have chosen matches your poem very well. Your poem tells a story, which is always good for the reader. It is full of imagery and paints great pictures for your readers. Really nice job!
Comment Written 26-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2014
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thanks so much, caldifot :-) Brooke
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Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, brooke, you did an excellent job writing this abab poem about the different sagas of the seas and the meaning that each holds. i enjoyed reading it, great picture choice, good luck in the contest
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2014
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this is very well written, brooke, you did an excellent job writing this abab poem about the different sagas of the seas and the meaning that each holds. i enjoyed reading it, great picture choice, good luck in the contest
Comment Written 26-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2014
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sweetwoodjax, thank you so much, my friend :-) Brooke
Comment from Robert Lee Brown
Brooke, In my judgement this is another contest winner.
I can see you haven't lost any skills while I have been trying to grow some new muscles to assist torn muscles in my upper leg. It has been a rough and demanding road but now I can walk and even drive again.
This is a beautiful and perfect contest entry. Reading your creations is always a pleasure. I am happy to be back and free to enjoy them once more. One of your admirers, Bob
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2014
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Brooke, In my judgement this is another contest winner.
I can see you haven't lost any skills while I have been trying to grow some new muscles to assist torn muscles in my upper leg. It has been a rough and demanding road but now I can walk and even drive again.
This is a beautiful and perfect contest entry. Reading your creations is always a pleasure. I am happy to be back and free to enjoy them once more. One of your admirers, Bob
Comment Written 25-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2014
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Bob, how good to hear from you. I hope you are well. Thank you so much, my generous friend :-) Brooke
Comment from madhatter1977
Beautiful, Brooke! Needed to read something like this, we have flood alerts here just as you have terrible weather in the US at the moment. Storms and sunshine - like emotions and your poem is considered and emotional and natural in so few lines. Brilliant poem, Pete :)
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2014
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Beautiful, Brooke! Needed to read something like this, we have flood alerts here just as you have terrible weather in the US at the moment. Storms and sunshine - like emotions and your poem is considered and emotional and natural in so few lines. Brilliant poem, Pete :)
Comment Written 25-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2014
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Pete, thank you so very much for your gracious and generous response to this poem :-) Brooke
