What a Horrible Weekend!
Trouble down at Hedgerow Village.27 total reviews
Comment from Tanvi Pauddar
I LOVE THIS!!!! I really enjoyed reading this, and I could read it over and over again, a billion- no, trillion times. I liked how you made the characters animals, not humans. It makes the story fun. I also LOVED the ending. It was hilarious! Lovely. Thank you for sharing this amazing short prose. I cannot give any 6 star ratings right now, but if I could, I would.
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2019
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I LOVE THIS!!!! I really enjoyed reading this, and I could read it over and over again, a billion- no, trillion times. I liked how you made the characters animals, not humans. It makes the story fun. I also LOVED the ending. It was hilarious! Lovely. Thank you for sharing this amazing short prose. I cannot give any 6 star ratings right now, but if I could, I would.
Comment Written 03-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2019
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Hi Tanvi, thank you so much for delving into my portfolio again, that is so sweet of you. I'm glad you enjoyed this one, it's lovely to read that my children's stories still have their appeal. You've made my day!! Big hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xx
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You're welcome. I specially enjoyed this, because I am a fifth grader, and love these types of stories. Nice story, (again).
Comment from 24chas
This was very enjoyable, sandramitchell. Even though I'm 48, I still like a good children's story. This was well written with good narration and dialogue. It takes a special skill to write this kind of story and you have it. Great job.
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2014
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This was very enjoyable, sandramitchell. Even though I'm 48, I still like a good children's story. This was well written with good narration and dialogue. It takes a special skill to write this kind of story and you have it. Great job.
Comment Written 25-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2014
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What a lovely review, thank you so very much, Chas. :) Sandra xsx
Comment from Jim Lorson Sr
Sandra, I am trying to remain focused in reading and reviewing. I like this story in prose because you write these hedgerow stories so very well. In this style you can expand your story for your characters interactions. This is well done. The poor characters all coming down with chickenpox.
I wrote a possible children's poem about Harry Hawk and Robbie Rabbit. Not sure if it made it to your inbox. I would like your thoughts about this piece. It has to do with how different creatures can be friends. Love you my friend,,,,,,Jim
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2014
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Sandra, I am trying to remain focused in reading and reviewing. I like this story in prose because you write these hedgerow stories so very well. In this style you can expand your story for your characters interactions. This is well done. The poor characters all coming down with chickenpox.
I wrote a possible children's poem about Harry Hawk and Robbie Rabbit. Not sure if it made it to your inbox. I would like your thoughts about this piece. It has to do with how different creatures can be friends. Love you my friend,,,,,,Jim
Comment Written 25-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2014
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Thank you so much, Jim. How are you now? I haven't been in touch since I replied to your e-mail after your fall, in case it was hard for you to type back. I hadn't had a message from you in my in box, but I will have a look now. Take care my dear friend. Love you lots. Sandra. xsx
Comment from Hollyhock
Lovely, simple story-telling. I enjoyed the way you involves everyone in the epidemic, without panic, just a natural way for the chicken-poc to spread. I was rather hoping they might all have jelly and fruit to cheer them up!
Charming prose but overall I think I prefer the little creature stories in verse.
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2014
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Lovely, simple story-telling. I enjoyed the way you involves everyone in the epidemic, without panic, just a natural way for the chicken-poc to spread. I was rather hoping they might all have jelly and fruit to cheer them up!
Charming prose but overall I think I prefer the little creature stories in verse.
Comment Written 25-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2014
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Thank you so much, Hollyhock. I think the preferences are equally divided on this one. Prose or poetry, All the stories have already been written in rhyme, but I have been asked to write them in prose now. So I get to have them both ways! I appreciate you opinion, thank you for letting me know. :) Sandra
Comment from Selina Stambi
My dear Sandra,
Another enchanting little piece that makes me long for MY mummy!
I think it's great that your are working the poems into prose - have you thought of having these prose tales published with the relevant poem at the end of each chapter?
Your little stories take me back to the simple, uncomplicated dream world of childhood. There is so much ugliness around us .. even on this site!
Hugs and lots and lots of love, my dear friend.
xxx
Sonali :)
be out in the sunshine(.) (I)t didn't matter how tired he
Get up, you old (sleepyhead) and come
He felt awful! (But) he went downstairs and opened .. it's better not to begin a sentence with 'but' .. suggest: ... He felt awful, but we went ... or .... He felt awful! He went downstairs anyway, and opened ...
Mrs Squirrel laughed(.) (S)he nearly cried because she was laughing
"Let's go and see if Reggie the Rat can play with us(,)" Timmy Mouse said(.) "He should be okay(. W)e
she was hanging on the (clothesline), and then turned to the two boys.
Tommy Mouse were beginning to feel (very) miserable... suggest: .. to feel miserable/ quite miserable (I don't believe miserable goes with very ... like very delicious doesn't exist..:))
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2014
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My dear Sandra,
Another enchanting little piece that makes me long for MY mummy!
I think it's great that your are working the poems into prose - have you thought of having these prose tales published with the relevant poem at the end of each chapter?
Your little stories take me back to the simple, uncomplicated dream world of childhood. There is so much ugliness around us .. even on this site!
Hugs and lots and lots of love, my dear friend.
xxx
Sonali :)
be out in the sunshine(.) (I)t didn't matter how tired he
Get up, you old (sleepyhead) and come
He felt awful! (But) he went downstairs and opened .. it's better not to begin a sentence with 'but' .. suggest: ... He felt awful, but we went ... or .... He felt awful! He went downstairs anyway, and opened ...
Mrs Squirrel laughed(.) (S)he nearly cried because she was laughing
"Let's go and see if Reggie the Rat can play with us(,)" Timmy Mouse said(.) "He should be okay(. W)e
she was hanging on the (clothesline), and then turned to the two boys.
Tommy Mouse were beginning to feel (very) miserable... suggest: .. to feel miserable/ quite miserable (I don't believe miserable goes with very ... like very delicious doesn't exist..:))
Comment Written 24-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2014
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Thank you so very much, again, my dear friend! Your help is really appreciated, I will be doing those corrections straight away! I am again, very pleased you liked the story! :) Sandra. xsx Big Hug! x
Comment from c_lucas
Chickenpox is one of the childhood diseases that comes back as Shingles. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a good read.
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2014
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Chickenpox is one of the childhood diseases that comes back as Shingles. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a good read.
Comment Written 23-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2014
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Thank you so much, Charles. I have had both and I can tell you, shingles is far the worse one to have! Thank you for your lovely review, you are one of the best writers on here, so to have you say that is such a compliment. xsx sandra
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You're welcome, Sandra. Charlie
Comment from Uniqusatya
Hey just love your children writing.THIS ONE TOO IS WELL WRITTEN.And to anwer your question,yes i prefer this version :)
Happy writing
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2014
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Hey just love your children writing.THIS ONE TOO IS WELL WRITTEN.And to anwer your question,yes i prefer this version :)
Happy writing
Comment Written 23-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2014
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Awww, thank you so much, Uniqusatya, what a lovely thing to say, and I'm so pleased you enjoyed it. I have such fun writing them. :) Sandra xsx
Comment from Deejharrington
I think I enjoyed this version more. I am partial to prose, especially in children's lit. I can cetainly see this charming story published. Well done and good-luck.
deb
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2014
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I think I enjoyed this version more. I am partial to prose, especially in children's lit. I can cetainly see this charming story published. Well done and good-luck.
deb
Comment Written 23-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2014
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Thank you for letting me know, Deb, I find I can put more into prose than I've put in the rhyming ones. I am delighted you enjoyed it, thank you for your lovely comments! xsx Sandra
Comment from barleygirl
Adorable storytelling . . . the best children's style I've read on this website (altho I haven't read too many). I love the way you paint the cast of characters & the clear logical flow of the story. Thinking the pox would make them into a chicken is a lovely idea reminiscent of how kids really misunderstand stuff like this. Great effort & thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2014
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Adorable storytelling . . . the best children's style I've read on this website (altho I haven't read too many). I love the way you paint the cast of characters & the clear logical flow of the story. Thinking the pox would make them into a chicken is a lovely idea reminiscent of how kids really misunderstand stuff like this. Great effort & thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 23-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2014
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What a lovely review, thank you so very much, barleygirl! I am really pleased you enjoyed it. :) Sandra xsx
Comment from jmdg1954
Sandra, I don't recall the prose version of the story, so I cannot compare, but this one is told magnificently. You bring all the chatector's (some) into the story which gives the reader some sense of the village.
Question- should you briefly explain chicken pox in your story?
Nicely done... John
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2014
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Sandra, I don't recall the prose version of the story, so I cannot compare, but this one is told magnificently. You bring all the chatector's (some) into the story which gives the reader some sense of the village.
Question- should you briefly explain chicken pox in your story?
Nicely done... John
Comment Written 23-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2014
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Hi, John.
Your question is an excellent one, I have only names the spots on Cyril's face but not what it actually is. I will go back and try to do that. Thank you for your wonderful review, John, I appreciate it a lot. Would you like to know if I manage to do it? xsx Sandra. xsx
