Comment from aagalloway

Excellent

Fantastic poem. Great rhyming and rhythm and a fun story too! I'm sure we've all met a boy like him...what a rascal! I love the ending - very clever.

 Comment Written 11-Mar-2014

---

reply by the author on 12-Mar-2014

Thanks again - yes, this piece is more my normal style!

One reviewer asked how I'd got to know David Cameron so well...

Steve

Comment from Father Flaps

Excellent

Hi Steve,
When I first joined Fanstory back in June of 2010, I wrote a lot of children's poetry. I was very lucky to be a finalist in the 2013 Writers Federation of New Brunswick competition/children's literature category. So it was so nice to see that you write some children's poems too. I loved this one, "Bullivant Bradley"... good alliteration there. One of my poems is called "Bartholomew Beckingham". It's such fun to make up a character in poetry or prose. In verse after verse, you polish this bully into a beaming Prime Minister in the end. I loved that! In doing so, you described politicians very well. They're crooks. Same as bankers, real estate agents, and lawyers!
I especially liked this verse,
"He teased all the dogs and he pulled the cats' tails,
Tormented the girls and then laughed at their wails;
And Bullivant then started in on the boys;
He called them bad names and he broke their best toys."
Good meter and rhymes make this an excellent contender for the contest.
cheers
Kimbob

 Comment Written 02-Mar-2014

---

reply by the author on 05-Mar-2014

Thanks, Kimbob

I think quite a few of the children's poems I see on FS are a bit timid. I could have ended this as a nice moralistic tale with the bully getting his come-uppance, but where's the fun in that.

Sadly, the voters felt this was too adult for this contest....

Steve

reply by the author on 05-Mar-2014

Thanks, Kimbob

I think quite a few of the children's poems I see on FS are a bit timid. I could have ended this as a nice moralistic tale with the bully getting his come-uppance, but where's the fun in that.

Sadly, the voters felt this was too adult for this contest....

Steve

Comment from Gert sherwood

Excellent

Hi Steve now here is a good in face excellent poem about how a bully can turn in to a wise political position as a Prime Minster
The best to you in this contest.
Got my attention.

Gert

 Comment Written 21-Feb-2014

---

reply by the author on 23-Feb-2014

Thanks, Gert.

Steve

Comment from ennahanid

Excellent

I can only offer you a virtual 6 for this absolutely fantastic read. What a gem this is and Bullivant Bradley that's a name and a half for sure.

I am totally enthralled by this and am so glad I got to read it - Dinah

 Comment Written 21-Feb-2014

---

reply by the author on 23-Feb-2014

Thanks, Dinah.

Yes, Bullivanr Bradley has a certain ring to it - not enough to win the contest however. :o(

Steve

Comment from Selina Stambi

Excellent

They say she'll be better in one or two years!) - love it!

Oh, what a hoot! Read like a rhyming Victorian cautionary tale for children .. quite R.L. Steven-esque!

You are in your element once more, Steve.

My best wishes in the contest. Hope you win - again!

Sonali

 Comment Written 18-Feb-2014

---

reply by the author on 23-Feb-2014

Thanks, Sonali - disappointing result in the booth.

I am actually thinking of embarking os a series of cautionary tales a la Hilaire Belloc but brought into the 21st century. I have one so far, but it hasn't been seen on FS yet.

Steve

Comment from kiwijenny

Excellent

Ha ha ha ha .....bulli for you Steve...I'm still chuckling....
This is great for kids and their parents too..........
Sinister rhymes so well with prime minister....
Well done
God bless

 Comment Written 18-Feb-2014

---

reply by the author on 23-Feb-2014

Thanks, Jenny.

Steve

Comment from Acquired Taste

Excellent

Okay, absolutely loved this and can only offer a virtual six.

I smiled and laughed throughout this great read. Rhyming was terrific and the ending was absolute fun. Not only great for a kid - but for this adult it was a wonderful afternoon diversion!

Thanks so much...AT=/

 Comment Written 18-Feb-2014

---

reply by the author on 23-Feb-2014

Thanks, AT, for the great review and the virtual six.

Steve

Comment from livelylinda

Excellent

kiwisteveh: Oh, how much fun can one children's poem be? I giggled and laughed and wondered how my two year old great-grandson would like this poem read to him. I'm sure he would have comments. . .probably about the beans in the ears. . .The last line is really for the adult reader - and there's a good laugh! Great job! livelylinda

 Comment Written 18-Feb-2014

---

reply by the author on 23-Feb-2014

Thanks, Linda - do you remember the rather silly old song, 'My mother said never put beans in your ears'?

Yes, this may have failed in the contest because it wasn't just for children.

Steve

Comment from Kausar_Javeria

Excellent

Ahaha...one of the best children's poems I've read on this site...great!
I didn't expect the ending...he became the PM?! Wow!
The rhyming was absolutely perfect..Splendid!
Oh and..in the last stanza, 2nd line,should there be a question mark at the end? was it intended? Doesn't really seem right..
Anyway..great job! God Bless~!

 Comment Written 18-Feb-2014

---

reply by the author on 23-Feb-2014

Thanks so much for the great review.

Steve

Comment from Jacq77

Excellent

Very, very clever. I loved this, and chuckled all the way through, but especially when I read the last line. I only wish I still had some sixes to give as this brilliant poem deserves it. Sorry, but a virtual six will have to suffice. Your humorous, well-penned poem was a pleasure to read, and the artwork was a perfect choice. Well done! :-)

 Comment Written 18-Feb-2014

---

reply by the author on 23-Feb-2014

Thank you so much for the chuckles and the virtual six.

Steve