Comment from ravenblack

Excellent

Ummm, i think i need to deduct a star for your erratic use of capitalization...Not! Question the Maker and fight for the ball- differing views, religion treating the globe like a rugby scrum. Why question/probe at all? If your god is Maker, Clock Face, Great Levelled or Unraveller there is one that will catch us in the end (time) and we will all be equal anyway. Thanks for elevating the ABC poem above what it usually generates.

 Comment Written 11-Feb-2014

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reply by the author on 14-Feb-2014

Thank you for your thoughtful reading of the poem.

Steve

Comment from Starlit Ink

Excellent

Your entry is interesting and original. Between the lines it tells the reader to go for it, but to remain grounded and small. We are at the mercy of time, like it or not. Good luck with a super entry.

 Comment Written 11-Feb-2014

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reply by the author on 14-Feb-2014

Thank you!

Steve

Comment from L.A.Matthies

Excellent

I really enjoyed this piece. Terrific use of mono-rhyme and thought provoking word choices make this a worthy entry ...wishing you luck :)

 Comment Written 11-Feb-2014

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reply by the author on 14-Feb-2014

Thank you!

Steve

Comment from ragamuffin

Excellent

Nice presentation. Good to have a light touch to a serious offering. Thought provoking piece as certainly time does "unravel" all things and all people. Best not waste what's offered in the present. An enjoyable write.

 Comment Written 11-Feb-2014

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reply by the author on 14-Feb-2014

Thank you!

Steve

Comment from Rondeno

Exceptional

So simple, so elegant, so all-embracing. This is marvellous, Steve. Smooth, beautiful and flawless. Well done, my friend.

 Comment Written 11-Feb-2014

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reply by the author on 14-Feb-2014

Thanks, Mike, for the generous review and the six stars.

Steve

Comment from Selina Stambi

Excellent

Race round the Clock-Face from cradle to pall .. love the image

As always, Steve, a polished piece .. very effective monorhyme.

Nicely done, sir!

Sonali :)

 Comment Written 10-Feb-2014

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reply by the author on 10-Feb-2014

Thanks, Sonali - perhaps w should all slow down....

Steve

Comment from Cumbrianlass

Excellent

Wow. This has such a classic feel to it. It's like one of those sayings... 'quothe the raven'.. or something.

There's a finality to it, an admission and an acceptance of what is inevitable.

Pretty bloody powerful, actually. Very well done.

Av

 Comment Written 10-Feb-2014

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reply by the author on 10-Feb-2014

Thanks, Av.

The older I get, the more acceptance! And there's still such a lot I want to do...

Steve

Comment from allborn66

Excellent

This is a very interesting poem. The form enhances the piece. The word choice paints a vivid picture. You communicate your theme clearly.
Barbara

 Comment Written 10-Feb-2014

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reply by the author on 10-Feb-2014

Thanks, Barbara - glad you enjoyed.

Steve

Comment from Domino 2

Excellent

Not sure about the squiggles, Steve. :-)

why indeed should we NOT 'question the maker'. Apparently He gave us minds of our own, and if HE is anything to do with it, He messed up big time. :-)

Nice one.

Cheers, Ted

 Comment Written 10-Feb-2014

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reply by the author on 10-Feb-2014

Shhhh! not allowed to say that God messed up on FS - or that you don't like squiggles....

Thank you!

Steve

reply by Domino 2 on 11-Feb-2014

Dammit - a few more enemies added to my list. LOL

Thanks for the great fun reply, Steve. Ted.

Comment from Leineco

Exceptional

Outstanding use of the ABC format!
Five outstanding observations on the course of life.
I may not be able to verbalize the reason it flows logically one to the other
but I know as a whole, it created a sense of completeness. . .
and addressed some of life's most pivotal questions.

 Comment Written 10-Feb-2014

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reply by the author on 10-Feb-2014

Thanks, Lorraine.

It's interesting actually that some readers saw it as a whole, while others tried to pick it apart one line at a time.

That's all cool as long as they were actually reading and thinking about it.

Steve