Comment from adewpearl

Excellent

I'm laughing just at the topic because Sawyer is absolutely in love with goats - he doesn't just pet them at petting zoos - he gives them full body hugs LOL
strong use of mono-rhyming, which is well suited for humor
nice touches of alliteration like hooky horns
and stalked and spined
great humor throughout
and strong action verb choices that contribute to the visuals, the humor and the life of the story line
You definitely made me laugh :-) Brooke

 Comment Written 30-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 30-Jan-2014

Thanks, Brooke.

No gut-busting laughs in this one and a couple of reviewers didn't find the humour....

Steve

Comment from Carole Rosa

Excellent

To the author of 'The trouble with Goats', No I don't think that you are unkind. I think that you are amazing to be able to write a humorous poem about Goats! Who would think about goats???? Good job. Carole

 Comment Written 29-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 30-Jan-2014

Carole, thanks for the kind words.

Steve

Comment from Carolyn 'Deaton' Stephens

Exceptional

Made me laugh........................score six for you.
I thought your mono rhyme was absolutely a treasure. And goats are like that 'yeah they are'. Good luck, Carolyn

 Comment Written 28-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 30-Jan-2014

Thanks, Carolyn.

I have another goat poem in my portfolio - it's called 'The Great Escaper Caper' - say no more!

Steve

Comment from Lynette Marie

Excellent

Wonderful poem with great lilt and flow. I admire the way you rhymed each line. This is a unique topic as well. The way you ended "Am I unkind?" was funny. Good job.

 Comment Written 28-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 30-Jan-2014

Thanks, LM - glad you enjoyed.

Steve

Comment from BeasPeas

Excellent

First of all, let me say that I love goats. They are so adorably charming and also funny. I love your monorhyme because it is also adorably charming and funny.

 Comment Written 28-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 30-Jan-2014

Thank you BP - you didn't mention that they are cunning, determined, agile and born escape artists!

Steve

Comment from Bill Schott

Excellent

There is definitely something in here about goats. The monorhyme is true throughout and it paints a even picture of a goat critic. Funny.

 Comment Written 28-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 30-Jan-2014

Thanks, Bill

Steve

Comment from Delores J. Howard

Good

Your picture chosen for your piece was perfect. I liked it your poem, but I didn't love it. Why? Though it was really cute (really), it didn't make me laugh or even smile, and that's the point here to this contest. I'm sorry, but felt I owed you the truth. What do you think? Am I unkind? I didn't mean to be.

 Comment Written 28-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 30-Jan-2014

Delores, thanks for your honesty and welcome to FanStory.

Sorry this one didn't make you laugh - perhaps next time....

Steve

Comment from RYME4U

Excellent

Wow, You have used the monorhyme style beautifully here. The rhythm is great and the poem is amusing as well as understandable. Super job!

 Comment Written 28-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 30-Jan-2014

Thank you!

Steve

Comment from Domino 2

Excellent

I don't think 'you're being unkind' - so long as you don't tell the goats what you think of them. :-)

Top meter and fun rhymes/phrases for a very amusing read.

Good luck, Ted

 Comment Written 28-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 30-Jan-2014

Thanks, Ted

Steve

Comment from barkingdog

Excellent

I really liked the descriptors like hooky horns, twistily entwined, hedgehog rind. Your rhyme is delightful and the goats are an awkward bunch.
Nicely done.

 Comment Written 28-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 30-Jan-2014

Thank you, bd.

Steve