Rodeo Bull Rider
Viewing comments for Chapter 10 "Reporter Calls Jake A Coward "A Life"s Dream Almost Ruined
15 total reviews
Comment from trevorletang
Another interesting read. I am intrigued to see where the storyline is headed. You always manager to capture the readers attention. Great work. all the best
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2014
Another interesting read. I am intrigued to see where the storyline is headed. You always manager to capture the readers attention. Great work. all the best
Comment Written 27-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2014
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This was the last chapter maybe I will start another BOOK ABOUT THEM in time to come what do you think
Comment from Daniel J. Darcey
Damn reporter. I think Jake should invest in a military tactical strike drone, and lets see what that reporter thinks then! >_< Poor Besty I feel sorry for her. At least Jake is okay. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2014
Damn reporter. I think Jake should invest in a military tactical strike drone, and lets see what that reporter thinks then! >_< Poor Besty I feel sorry for her. At least Jake is okay. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 26-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2014
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So glad you enjoyed my book so much
Comment from Lulube
Sorry Barb about the 4 stars but there is too many simple errors that you should have caught. Try leaving what you write for a day, then read it again, outloud so you can hear what you've written. I find that that works really well for me.
suggestions -
Things were not looking good but Jake was ready to put an end to his tragic story and face his demons.
answered the phone and told her almost everything that had happened. He was concerned and fearful for the mood Jake was displaying.
down in flames and plunged into a volcano.
"a" father
Slaughter snorted. It's breeding season and the ranch is where he's going.
very upset with the anxiety cre3ated for Jake. Betsy sensed that Jake's demons had started to nag at him again.
Her cell phone split in half as it hit the floor. She identified with the broken pieces as her world started to close in on her.
composure back. (no again)
she tried to dial again but there was no dial tone.
omit "as the announcer"
Happy Anniversary! Jake gave her a wet anniversary kiss or was it wet from her happy tears? (no whatever)
onto forever. (no rest of sentence)
Hope this helps, I will star it up with changes Barb
I almost died hand writing this out first cause I hand carpo tunnel surgery on broken wrist hand.
I cannot do any more for a few days. sorry
I cannot write directly into computer my mind flubs around. I need to go from mind to hand writing first.
Now crack down and get these things taken care of. lol
lulube
cont.
not ready yet
two spelling in 2 paragraph concerned and for in the same sentence
change to having the demons start to nag at him again.
then good to go
lulube
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reply by the author on 25-Jan-2014
Sorry Barb about the 4 stars but there is too many simple errors that you should have caught. Try leaving what you write for a day, then read it again, outloud so you can hear what you've written. I find that that works really well for me.
suggestions -
Things were not looking good but Jake was ready to put an end to his tragic story and face his demons.
answered the phone and told her almost everything that had happened. He was concerned and fearful for the mood Jake was displaying.
down in flames and plunged into a volcano.
"a" father
Slaughter snorted. It's breeding season and the ranch is where he's going.
very upset with the anxiety cre3ated for Jake. Betsy sensed that Jake's demons had started to nag at him again.
Her cell phone split in half as it hit the floor. She identified with the broken pieces as her world started to close in on her.
composure back. (no again)
she tried to dial again but there was no dial tone.
omit "as the announcer"
Happy Anniversary! Jake gave her a wet anniversary kiss or was it wet from her happy tears? (no whatever)
onto forever. (no rest of sentence)
Hope this helps, I will star it up with changes Barb
I almost died hand writing this out first cause I hand carpo tunnel surgery on broken wrist hand.
I cannot do any more for a few days. sorry
I cannot write directly into computer my mind flubs around. I need to go from mind to hand writing first.
Now crack down and get these things taken care of. lol
lulube
cont.
not ready yet
two spelling in 2 paragraph concerned and for in the same sentence
change to having the demons start to nag at him again.
then good to go
lulube
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 25-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2014
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CAN I NOW SEND TO AMAZON
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I don't know yet I haven't re-read yet. Just thought I'd fill the fantasy of me scolding you. Did I do a good job?
I'll check
lulube
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yes you did my friend I hang my head in shame booo hoooh
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I want to send it out soon as you give me the okay
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I'll be back
lulube
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no worries bring it on
Comment from krys123
A good thing to I would not want to see Jake being slaughtered by slaughter. This was written very well and I love the bold italicized printed words or lines to their made it just as intense as it should be. I see the reporter Merry felt a little guilty and she should be. With one leg Jake wouldn't stand a chance writing slaughter. Thank you for sharing this with others including myself. May you have a good one and God bless.
Alex
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2014
A good thing to I would not want to see Jake being slaughtered by slaughter. This was written very well and I love the bold italicized printed words or lines to their made it just as intense as it should be. I see the reporter Merry felt a little guilty and she should be. With one leg Jake wouldn't stand a chance writing slaughter. Thank you for sharing this with others including myself. May you have a good one and God bless.
Alex
Comment Written 25-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2014
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so glad you lie this
Comment from michaelcahill
A great ending and a surprise one too! I was expecting a run of the mill thing. This was a great love conquers all and is the most important thing ending. Great job. I think this is a real winner. I like these characters. I wouldn't mind seeing more about their lives moving forward. Well done, mikey
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2014
A great ending and a surprise one too! I was expecting a run of the mill thing. This was a great love conquers all and is the most important thing ending. Great job. I think this is a real winner. I like these characters. I wouldn't mind seeing more about their lives moving forward. Well done, mikey
Comment Written 24-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2014
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Thank you so much for believing in me it means so much to me
Comment from jmdg1954
Another good chapter. I found this one to have great dialogue through and through. You kept me basically at the edge of my seat waiting to see what was going to happen next,
Nicely done... John
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2014
Another good chapter. I found this one to have great dialogue through and through. You kept me basically at the edge of my seat waiting to see what was going to happen next,
Nicely done... John
Comment Written 24-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2014
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SO HAPPY YOU ENJOYED MY BOOK I HOPE I CAN WRITE SOME MORE GOOD BOOKS FOR YOU ALL TO READ
Comment from Ric Myworld
You had me sitting on the edge of my seat thinking that Jake was going to ride Slaughter again. Great job. Thanks for another great job.
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2014
You had me sitting on the edge of my seat thinking that Jake was going to ride Slaughter again. Great job. Thanks for another great job.
Comment Written 24-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2014
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I am so glad you enjoyed the book and you are welcome
Comment from 9999pool
A beautiful love story and the ending is superb and so tender. Loved it to bits. Love is all we need to make our lives ever so pleasant and beautiful.
Excellent write and well penned.
Cheerio, hugs and luv, GS Ritchie. :))
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2014
A beautiful love story and the ending is superb and so tender. Loved it to bits. Love is all we need to make our lives ever so pleasant and beautiful.
Excellent write and well penned.
Cheerio, hugs and luv, GS Ritchie. :))
Comment Written 24-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2014
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your name will be on it as co-author
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Aww..that's so nice. Thank you. Will be back online full time in FS by mid-february 2014. See you all then.
Cheerio, hugs and luv, GS Ritchie. :))
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no worries
Comment from G.B. Smith
hey there cowgirl
This is an excellent idea for your book. I like the bold print. Calling Jake could be a monumental mistake. Sometimes we overload our hummingbird ass with too many words from an alligator mouth. Your book looks like it might do well
Bear
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2014
hey there cowgirl
This is an excellent idea for your book. I like the bold print. Calling Jake could be a monumental mistake. Sometimes we overload our hummingbird ass with too many words from an alligator mouth. Your book looks like it might do well
Bear
Comment Written 24-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2014
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SO GLAD YOU ENJOYED THIS
Comment from emrpoems
Very interesting chapter with great dialogue.
I found it pleasant and easy to read.Good plot and development.
Will be reading your subsequent chapters
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2014
Very interesting chapter with great dialogue.
I found it pleasant and easy to read.Good plot and development.
Will be reading your subsequent chapters
Comment Written 24-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2014
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THANK YOU FOR YOUR EVER SO KIND REVIEW