'Twas the Night After Christmas
a parody in rhyming couplets135 total reviews
Comment from padumachitta
Fun, fun, fun...thank you. This goes into my read every year pile. I love a good parady and you nailed this:-) You deserve your spot on the top.
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2014
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Fun, fun, fun...thank you. This goes into my read every year pile. I love a good parady and you nailed this:-) You deserve your spot on the top.
Comment Written 02-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2014
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padumachitta, thanks so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Jade Lawson
This was an entertaining poem to read, but somehow you brought the spirit of Christmas in it; the part of the homeless was particularly introspective.
I enjoyed reading it.
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2013
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This was an entertaining poem to read, but somehow you brought the spirit of Christmas in it; the part of the homeless was particularly introspective.
I enjoyed reading it.
Comment Written 29-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2013
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Thank you so very much, Angel :-) Brooke
Comment from Cumbrianlass
I like your take on the traditional poem! It grounds the reader, reminding us of how frivolous and wasteful we can be. I chuckled at the image of the pink paisley tie. I think such a thing might merit a touch of grouching! LOL!
Av
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2013
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I like your take on the traditional poem! It grounds the reader, reminding us of how frivolous and wasteful we can be. I chuckled at the image of the pink paisley tie. I think such a thing might merit a touch of grouching! LOL!
Av
Comment Written 27-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2013
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Av, thanks so much. You need to be a tad more forward thinking in your fashion choices ;-) Brooke
Comment from Lynette Marie
As usual, this piece is excellent! The first part was fun, I found myself smiling several times. However, I finished with a tear in my eye.
"The five-day-old snow sucked the light from the moon". This line is exceptional! The whole piece is a delight!
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2013
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As usual, this piece is excellent! The first part was fun, I found myself smiling several times. However, I finished with a tear in my eye.
"The five-day-old snow sucked the light from the moon". This line is exceptional! The whole piece is a delight!
Comment Written 27-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2013
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Lynette Marie, thank you so much for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Comment from Nosha17
Luckily, Christmas has the knack of making us think of those less fortunate than we. It is a time for giving and the joy we can derive from that. You also made a good point about wastefulness, it is really true and regrettable. You have made good choice of words, good rhyming and it read well from start to finish. Faye
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2013
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Luckily, Christmas has the knack of making us think of those less fortunate than we. It is a time for giving and the joy we can derive from that. You also made a good point about wastefulness, it is really true and regrettable. You have made good choice of words, good rhyming and it read well from start to finish. Faye
Comment Written 27-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2013
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Faye, thank you so very much :-) Brooke
Comment from Ridley Williams
Hello Brooke,
I can appreciate your theme presented in this sensitive piece. The more "experienced" I become in life, the more I understand the rarity of the Norman Rockwell Christmas. Way back in the Fifties and Sixties it would seem the Country was blessed with a solid middle class, and the word "normal" actually seemed to apply to a state of being. Moms and Dads, well loved cared for children, and government systems able to care for the poor and needy. This piece explored the holidays for the "other" side with a beautiful rhyme and meter, and a wonderful finish. Well done, and good luck in the contest, Bill
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2013
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Hello Brooke,
I can appreciate your theme presented in this sensitive piece. The more "experienced" I become in life, the more I understand the rarity of the Norman Rockwell Christmas. Way back in the Fifties and Sixties it would seem the Country was blessed with a solid middle class, and the word "normal" actually seemed to apply to a state of being. Moms and Dads, well loved cared for children, and government systems able to care for the poor and needy. This piece explored the holidays for the "other" side with a beautiful rhyme and meter, and a wonderful finish. Well done, and good luck in the contest, Bill
Comment Written 27-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2013
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Thank you so much, Bill. Yes, I remember my childhood neighborhood in the 50s - a blue collar neighborhood where people without college educations had nice houses on a lovely block. Compared to the McMansions of today, they were very modest houses, but since we had nothing to compare them to, they were like palaces to us :-) Brooke
Comment from Righteous Riter
Good use of the aabb rhyme scheme. Good end rhyming. Good perfect rhyming with cats/hats...tasteful/wasteful...more/wore. Good story telling. Good creativity. Clear Christmas message that has a little humor. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2013
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Good use of the aabb rhyme scheme. Good end rhyming. Good perfect rhyming with cats/hats...tasteful/wasteful...more/wore. Good story telling. Good creativity. Clear Christmas message that has a little humor. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 27-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2013
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Righteous Riter, thank you so very much :-) Brooke
Comment from notdeadyet
This is a lovely, humorous poem. I love the message and how you approach it. I also like the line"to dream of the gifts they had wished for instead" thanks for pointing out that we get too caught up in the "getting" of xmas and forget the true meaning.
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2013
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This is a lovely, humorous poem. I love the message and how you approach it. I also like the line"to dream of the gifts they had wished for instead" thanks for pointing out that we get too caught up in the "getting" of xmas and forget the true meaning.
Comment Written 27-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2013
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notdeadyet, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Jaq Cee
As per usual Brooke this is a wonderfully rhymed and written poem. You never fail to bring the goods to the table and yet another cracking picture. Best of luck in the contest. :) Jaq xx
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2013
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As per usual Brooke this is a wonderfully rhymed and written poem. You never fail to bring the goods to the table and yet another cracking picture. Best of luck in the contest. :) Jaq xx
Comment Written 27-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2013
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Thanks so very much, Jaq Cee :-) Brooke
Comment from AprilShower
Wonderful poem, but rather sad about the haves and the have nots. It seems the haves do not appreciate as much as the have nots. This does not mention the other group who hang on to material things because each has special memories attached to it. It makes them look wealthy or stingy, but they are not. They only cherish the memories and the love attached to each object they earned, or the gifts given them. Well done, Brooke.
April
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2013
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Wonderful poem, but rather sad about the haves and the have nots. It seems the haves do not appreciate as much as the have nots. This does not mention the other group who hang on to material things because each has special memories attached to it. It makes them look wealthy or stingy, but they are not. They only cherish the memories and the love attached to each object they earned, or the gifts given them. Well done, Brooke.
April
Comment Written 27-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2013
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April, thank you so very much :-) I agree, April, that there are objects with strong sentimental meaning, and I have no objection to them at all. It is all the meaningless stuff we buy and exchange with each other for the sake of showing up with a gift that I object to. I appreciate your generous sixth star :-) Brooke
