A Golden Dawn
A Pantoum51 total reviews
Comment from min_flowetry
very well written. i loved the poem. you are a great poet. and i look forward to reading more of your work. i will become a fan and i hope you read my work too and give me some great input.
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2014
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very well written. i loved the poem. you are a great poet. and i look forward to reading more of your work. i will become a fan and i hope you read my work too and give me some great input.
Comment Written 17-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2014
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Hi, Stephanie
Glad you enjoyed My Christmas poem.
Steve
Comment from Selina Stambi
This is a gorgeous pantoum. I love the form - and your subject just lends itself to the style.
A beautiful concluding line.
Happy New Year, Steve. May you win many contests!
Sonali :)
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2014
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This is a gorgeous pantoum. I love the form - and your subject just lends itself to the style.
A beautiful concluding line.
Happy New Year, Steve. May you win many contests!
Sonali :)
Comment Written 02-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2014
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Hi, Sonali - new year Greetings back to you!
Thanks for the kind words about my pantoum.
Steve
Comment from xotic flotsam
Sterile ground transforms as the potency unfolds by the grace of your poised words. In the raging storm we huddle in fear, awaiting His light. I sensed healing warmth immediately upon seeing your art which perfectly surrenders to your insightful write. Your form is true, your message sublime. Nice.
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reply by the author on 02-Jan-2014
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Sterile ground transforms as the potency unfolds by the grace of your poised words. In the raging storm we huddle in fear, awaiting His light. I sensed healing warmth immediately upon seeing your art which perfectly surrenders to your insightful write. Your form is true, your message sublime. Nice.
x
Comment Written 30-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2014
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Thanks for the kind words.
Steve
Comment from adewpearl
solid abab rhyming
good use of consistent iambic meter plus good use of enjambment make for good flow
lovely alliteration in borne on burnished and in peace profound
excellent use of repeating lines in the Pantoum pattern
I love the subtle modification in your closing line and the message you deliver
lovely descriptive detail throughout
a well-composed and meaningful pantoum :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2013
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solid abab rhyming
good use of consistent iambic meter plus good use of enjambment make for good flow
lovely alliteration in borne on burnished and in peace profound
excellent use of repeating lines in the Pantoum pattern
I love the subtle modification in your closing line and the message you deliver
lovely descriptive detail throughout
a well-composed and meaningful pantoum :-) Brooke
Comment Written 28-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2013
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Thanks, Brooke.
This poem was just published in Page & Spine - my first real paid, published work....
Steve
Comment from Devon Phipps
A golden dawn symbolizes a new day or a new life. Golden represent happiness and prosperity. such a beautiful poem with a strong inspirational message.
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2013
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A golden dawn symbolizes a new day or a new life. Golden represent happiness and prosperity. such a beautiful poem with a strong inspirational message.
Comment Written 26-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2013
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Thanks, Devon.
This poem has just been published in Page & Spine, an e-zine edited by Nancy Wagner, one of our FanStory poets.
Steve
Comment from MagKing
Wow!
You are one great poet
If I say "I am amazed".. It is an understatement
You conceived and wrote beautifully
I'm impressed!
Fine poem; one not soon forgotten
The rhyme scheme is good and syllable scheme perfect
You did too well!
MagKing
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2013
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Wow!
You are one great poet
If I say "I am amazed".. It is an understatement
You conceived and wrote beautifully
I'm impressed!
Fine poem; one not soon forgotten
The rhyme scheme is good and syllable scheme perfect
You did too well!
MagKing
Comment Written 26-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2013
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Thanks a lot for the fine review and six stars.
This poem has just been published in Page & Spine, an e-zine edited by Nancy Wagner, one of our FanStory poets.
Steve
Comment from Zinnia48
I admire your ability to tell this story in such a prescribed form! (not my ability...) I appreciate your comparison of the birth of dawn and the birth of the "Son". good luck with the contest! Caroline
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2013
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I admire your ability to tell this story in such a prescribed form! (not my ability...) I appreciate your comparison of the birth of dawn and the birth of the "Son". good luck with the contest! Caroline
Comment Written 25-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2013
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Thanks, Caroline.
This poem has just been published in Page & Spine, an e-zine edited by Nancy Wagner, one of our FanStory poets.
Steve
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Congratulations. Your beautiful words deserve to be read by many. Happy New Year! Caroline
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
'A Golden Dawn' is an extremely well-written and spiritually-uplifting piece. This talented poet's descriptive ability is excellent. It was a pleasure to both read and review a work of this standard.
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2013
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'A Golden Dawn' is an extremely well-written and spiritually-uplifting piece. This talented poet's descriptive ability is excellent. It was a pleasure to both read and review a work of this standard.
Comment Written 25-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2013
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Thanks for the kind words.
Dear Anon you're more than welcome.
Kindest wishes, the Duchess
Comment from nelliesellie
I love the picture. I love the poem. I love your use of 'sun' and 'son'. They both offer life and hope. They chase the dark and doubts away. Great work. Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2013
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I love the picture. I love the poem. I love your use of 'sun' and 'son'. They both offer life and hope. They chase the dark and doubts away. Great work. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 25-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2013
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Thanks for the kind words.
Comment from denhagan
This is a nice pantoum poem for the contest about a golden dawn. Written in the quatrain style with good rhythm and rhyming throughout the poem.
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2013
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This is a nice pantoum poem for the contest about a golden dawn. Written in the quatrain style with good rhythm and rhyming throughout the poem.
Comment Written 25-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2013
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Thanks for the kind words.
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You're welcome,
Dennis
