Autumn
The battleground of the seasons8 total reviews
Comment from adewpearl
excellent descriptive detail with strong sensory appeal that extends beyond the visual
nice alliteration in ghosts and ghouls
I really like the imagery of seasons meeting like two oceans
good alliteration in summer cedes
a lovely poem :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2013
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excellent descriptive detail with strong sensory appeal that extends beyond the visual
nice alliteration in ghosts and ghouls
I really like the imagery of seasons meeting like two oceans
good alliteration in summer cedes
a lovely poem :-) Brooke
Comment Written 15-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2013
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I thank you very much for the compliments and this review. That is just how this year had presented itself to my observations. I like this form and plan to use it for a full series of seasonal poems. -Mike
Comment from IndianaIrish
Hello Mike! I em joyed reading your poem and I found great enjoyment in the imagery of the two seasons sucking it out for supremely. It was so nice to read your poetry again.
Smiles,
Indy : )
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2013
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Hello Mike! I em joyed reading your poem and I found great enjoyment in the imagery of the two seasons sucking it out for supremely. It was so nice to read your poetry again.
Smiles,
Indy : )
Comment Written 12-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2013
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It's been to long for me to write poetry. I lost a fairly iconic friend and just thinking about writing a poem was hard enough for a while. I do plan to be on here a lot more.
I thank you very much for the compliments and this review. Mike
Comment from Ben Colder
Nice poem Mike. Springtime for me is the best but I do love the changing of seasons. Well done on this piece. It makes a noise to the reader. Shalom my friend.
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2013
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Nice poem Mike. Springtime for me is the best but I do love the changing of seasons. Well done on this piece. It makes a noise to the reader. Shalom my friend.
Comment Written 12-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2013
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It's been nuts with fall around here. I thank you very much for your compliments and this review. Mike
Comment from Jean Lutz
Good one, Mike. So easy to settle into the rhythm of seasons and life. Easy to imagine a wise soul observing and grasping.
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2013
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Good one, Mike. So easy to settle into the rhythm of seasons and life. Easy to imagine a wise soul observing and grasping.
Comment Written 12-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2013
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I thank you very much your flattering review, generous rating and the compliments. Mike
Comment from MERRY1
this is a very good poem about the change of seasons and how it take a while for one to give way to the next. You have a nice way with words and i enjoyed the picture you paint.
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2013
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this is a very good poem about the change of seasons and how it take a while for one to give way to the next. You have a nice way with words and i enjoyed the picture you paint.
Comment Written 12-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2013
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I thank you very much for the compliments and this review. Mike
Comment from rhonny
good poem about the changing of seasons and of life too i think. you have used some nice metaphors here, and your lines flow well.
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2013
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good poem about the changing of seasons and of life too i think. you have used some nice metaphors here, and your lines flow well.
Comment Written 12-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2013
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I thank you very much for this review and for the compliments. With seasonal poetry, I always enjoy having entendres in them regarding life and glad you picked up on that. Mike
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thanks Mike....i do too Rhonda :)
Comment from B. Diehl
Amazing! I like how you don't use punctuation. Reminds me of Charles Bukowski or E.E. Cummings. Excellent writing.
Much love.
-B<3<3<3
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2013
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Amazing! I like how you don't use punctuation. Reminds me of Charles Bukowski or E.E. Cummings. Excellent writing.
Much love.
-B<3<3<3
Comment Written 11-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2013
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Wow! I really appreate this flattering review and thank you for the compliments. Mike
Comment from ToolMaster
A typo on "ghouls." I like the imagery of the seasons fighting , but why do they fight? Is the coolness of the autumn really a malevolent force? I take it you are a summer person :P
Made me think, good piece, I enjoyed it. Consider lengthening, and check pace; the ending kind of came all at once, reflecting on the natural balance of things. A longer, more descriptive battle is surely earned for these mighty competitors that we all know so well.
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2013
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A typo on "ghouls." I like the imagery of the seasons fighting , but why do they fight? Is the coolness of the autumn really a malevolent force? I take it you are a summer person :P
Made me think, good piece, I enjoyed it. Consider lengthening, and check pace; the ending kind of came all at once, reflecting on the natural balance of things. A longer, more descriptive battle is surely earned for these mighty competitors that we all know so well.
Comment Written 11-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2013
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Thank you for the review and I fixed the typo. That was sort of the whole point as Autumn is the staqging area for winter. I goes back and forth and is suddenly there. This is a series of haikus with the first one split at the top and the bottom. Can't really extend it because I felt I had the right amount of stanzas to represent my observations. Mike
