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Love Poem Poetry Contest28 total reviews
Comment from Sally Carter
I so enjoyed this, Steve. It really sounds like my experience of love - not a lot of that hearts and roses stuff.
The first line got me thinking you were going for serious, but line 3 quickly dismissed that thought.
Ah, those were the days. Still, embers can occasionally have a little blaze... and cuddle quality definitely improves.
Your meter, as always, is spot on, and your humour is top notch. Now you've broken the curse of second place, it would be great to see a "real" love poem get the prize.
Best wishes to you,
Sally
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2013
I so enjoyed this, Steve. It really sounds like my experience of love - not a lot of that hearts and roses stuff.
The first line got me thinking you were going for serious, but line 3 quickly dismissed that thought.
Ah, those were the days. Still, embers can occasionally have a little blaze... and cuddle quality definitely improves.
Your meter, as always, is spot on, and your humour is top notch. Now you've broken the curse of second place, it would be great to see a "real" love poem get the prize.
Best wishes to you,
Sally
Comment Written 17-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2013
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Thanks, Sally - I started off down the hearts and roses track, but it just didn't feel right. I'm not expecting this to score well though - hearts and roses it will be!
Thanks for all the stars.
Steve
Comment from Gladness
The tides of time take their toll. Thanks for this enjoyable poem that stretches through the decades of life and tells the story well without getting embarrassing.
good job,
Anita
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2013
The tides of time take their toll. Thanks for this enjoyable poem that stretches through the decades of life and tells the story well without getting embarrassing.
good job,
Anita
Comment Written 16-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2013
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Thanks, Anita.
I set out to write a serious love poem and this is what emerged. I think my butterfly must have mated with a stick insect!
Steve
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Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep
Alas, indeed. Only you, Steve, only you could write a passionate love poem laced with humour. Peter and I both look forward to your poems now and read them together. I enjoyed particularly the contrasting but cleverly rhymed lines. Giddy
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2013
Alas, indeed. Only you, Steve, only you could write a passionate love poem laced with humour. Peter and I both look forward to your poems now and read them together. I enjoyed particularly the contrasting but cleverly rhymed lines. Giddy
Comment Written 16-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2013
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Thanks, Giddy
Give my regards to Peter - he is obviously a wonderful fellow if he enjoys my feeble attempts at humour. I set out to write a serious love poem and this is what emerged. I think my butterfly must have mated with a stick insect!
How goes the management of your MS? It was MS wasn't it?
Steve
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I was diagnosed with MS in '75 at age 30, Steve. Pete was diagnosed in '03 with lymphoma. As I told a friend recently, we are just sitting here waiting for the fit to hit the shan! At present we are both doing well, (in our late 60's now). Pete is my full-time carer. I can still feed myself most times, and I can talk,& thanks to the microphone I can also write. If I complain about things not working, Pete says, 'your jaw still works though!" LOL Giddy
Comment from closetpoetjester
Boy this WAS a bit of a scorcher Steve and I liked how the hunka hunka burning love just kept right on flaming and came full circle. With all that heat, it could well be they've burnt the candle at both ends and are now paying the price. LOL Terrific rhymes and I had to laugh as I got the visual on the "flamin' porch". Well done.
Cheers P
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2013
Boy this WAS a bit of a scorcher Steve and I liked how the hunka hunka burning love just kept right on flaming and came full circle. With all that heat, it could well be they've burnt the candle at both ends and are now paying the price. LOL Terrific rhymes and I had to laugh as I got the visual on the "flamin' porch". Well done.
Cheers P
Comment Written 16-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2013
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Thank you!
Steve
Comment from Sueellen11
Oh I can so relate as many will,, the years have not been kind ,,now so old and grey just left with burning memories of our love,,excellent write,,well done,,blessings sueellen
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2013
Oh I can so relate as many will,, the years have not been kind ,,now so old and grey just left with burning memories of our love,,excellent write,,well done,,blessings sueellen
Comment Written 15-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2013
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Thanks, SE - glad you enjoyed.
Steve
Comment from strandregs
I loved the humour in the burning first three stanzas but was stumped with remembring what?
No one remembers?
I know it's late but
An alternative that makes more sense:) seriouly.
Now we are old my love and gray
Inferno crackles frost
We both have time to love all day
No matter what the cost.
Z.
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2013
I loved the humour in the burning first three stanzas but was stumped with remembring what?
No one remembers?
I know it's late but
An alternative that makes more sense:) seriouly.
Now we are old my love and gray
Inferno crackles frost
We both have time to love all day
No matter what the cost.
Z.
Comment Written 15-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2013
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Thanks, but I'm going to stick with my little piece of irony -
remembers how to
remembers what we used to do
remembers how enjoyable it is
remembers how to take our clothes off
remembers what to do with the bits....
Steve
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Isee and understand now.
Just been looking at maca and ginkgo which are supposed to be good for all of the above.
Inclooding depression when things don't work. Hope you understand.Z.
Comment from janalma
Ahhaha. This is one hot love poem. I am still giggling. So well written with tongue-in-cheek. As always, your rhyming and humor is right on. Enjoyed reading this one. I'm afraid the mushy ones don't 'thrill me at all, but I get a kick out of you.'
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2013
Ahhaha. This is one hot love poem. I am still giggling. So well written with tongue-in-cheek. As always, your rhyming and humor is right on. Enjoyed reading this one. I'm afraid the mushy ones don't 'thrill me at all, but I get a kick out of you.'
Comment Written 15-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2013
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Thanks for the kind words.
I did start off thinking mushy, but you're right, it just didn't work.
Steve
Comment from caromel
What a wonderful depiction of love and loving in a long lasting marriage. I especially enjoyed the ending, "Alas, no one remembers." Great job and thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2013
What a wonderful depiction of love and loving in a long lasting marriage. I especially enjoyed the ending, "Alas, no one remembers." Great job and thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 15-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2013
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Thank you!
40 years next year....
Steve
Comment from Adri7enne
T'is a sad, sad tale indeed, my poetic friend. Now, with time on your hands, there's no fire left to tend. The course of love is fraught with many obstacles. Fun rhymes, steady rhythm, and a wonderful presentation. The flame-colored orange on black is really great. Good luck in the contest, steve. Oi! LOL!
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2013
T'is a sad, sad tale indeed, my poetic friend. Now, with time on your hands, there's no fire left to tend. The course of love is fraught with many obstacles. Fun rhymes, steady rhythm, and a wonderful presentation. The flame-colored orange on black is really great. Good luck in the contest, steve. Oi! LOL!
Comment Written 15-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2013
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Thank you!
Sad indeed.
Steve
Comment from manicblue
This was a thoroughly enjoyable poem...a spice of life (no pun intended - lol) But it's sad to grow old, even though no one remembers them, they do, and have each other. A very lovely poem of love. I wish you well in this contest.
MB xx
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2013
This was a thoroughly enjoyable poem...a spice of life (no pun intended - lol) But it's sad to grow old, even though no one remembers them, they do, and have each other. A very lovely poem of love. I wish you well in this contest.
MB xx
Comment Written 15-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2013
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Thanks, MB
Steve