Comment from SaluteDobby

Exceptional

I really loved this poem, Dallas. Smooth flow, perfect rhymes and fun to read. It's light hearted, non-preachy and feels like you are singing it to one of your grandkids. All the best with the contest!

 Comment Written 13-Sep-2013

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reply by the author on 13-Sep-2013

Thanks so much for the kind review and the bonus star.

Comment from Sueellen11

Excellent

Well my friend you met all the contest requirements, this is a lovely entry into this contest, lovely rhyming couplets, very smooth flow, making for an easy read, well done, good luck, blessings, sueellen

 Comment Written 12-Sep-2013

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reply by the author on 12-Sep-2013

Thank you for the kind review.

Comment from NadineM

Excellent

This poem is perfectly complimented with the artwork you included. Great inspirational message throughout the poem. Best wishes in the contest.
Thanks for sharing this with me.

 Comment Written 12-Sep-2013

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reply by the author on 12-Sep-2013

Thank you for the kind review.

Comment from Thatguypk

Excellent

What a lovely flight of fancy. I'll have to start using magic moments on my little fella when he's grumpy!! :-) Beautiful poem. Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 12-Sep-2013

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reply by the author on 12-Sep-2013

Thanks. Glad you liked it.

Comment from Supe

Excellent

What a delightful entry for the kids contest. It flows from start to finish and the picture is so o perfect. I notice that it is a girl, though, lol Good luck.

 Comment Written 12-Sep-2013

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reply by the author on 12-Sep-2013

Think unisex...lol Thanks for reviewing.

Comment from adewpearl

Excellent

solid use of rhyming couplets
lovely images children are sure to enjoy like changing the rain to polka dots
good use of personification
slide down stripes/song on silver - nice alliteration
more good alliteration follows
I love the fanciful and upbeat nature of this poem for children :-) Brooke

 Comment Written 12-Sep-2013

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reply by the author on 12-Sep-2013

Thanks, Brooke. Need to get out of the serious once in a while.

Comment from Deborah Marie

Excellent

Virtual sixer! Clever wording and impressive photo. Lovely meaning too... Nice progression, rhythm and flow for a fluent read. Impressive imagery throughout, Deb

 Comment Written 12-Sep-2013

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reply by the author on 12-Sep-2013

Thanks for the virtual six. Appreciate it.

Comment from Writingfundimension

Excellent

Ooh, this is absolutely delightful, Dallas. I don't think I could write anything near this good if my life depended on it. What a truly wonderful contest entry. Hope you win!

Warmest regards, Bev

 Comment Written 11-Sep-2013

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reply by the author on 11-Sep-2013

Thanks so much, Bev, for your review and well wishes.

reply by Writingfundimension on 12-Sep-2013

You're very welcome, Dallas. :0)

Comment from RYME4U

Good

Very well written. The fantasy and whimsy are well presented here. This was a delightful poem to read. Rhyme and rhythym were very smooth Good job!

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 Comment Written 11-Sep-2013

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reply by the author on 11-Sep-2013

thanks for the kind review.

Comment from Bina1

Excellent

What a splendid, delightful poem. Just spreads happiness as it flows. Good luck in the contest, a great entry you offer here!

 Comment Written 11-Sep-2013

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reply by the author on 11-Sep-2013

Thank you for the kind review.