Peter's Introduction to Poetry
contest entry15 total reviews
Comment from ExperiencingLiphe
This is super cute and you have to wonder when goes through a child's mind as they are learning who God is and certain prayers. Great job with this
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This is super cute and you have to wonder when goes through a child's mind as they are learning who God is and certain prayers. Great job with this
Comment Written 18-Aug-2013
Comment from EMB
Haha! I have to remember that the next time one of my kids ask me why. That was a good one. :) As for the contest entry, this was a charming piece, told from the viewpoint of a cute kid. :)
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2013
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Haha! I have to remember that the next time one of my kids ask me why. That was a good one. :) As for the contest entry, this was a charming piece, told from the viewpoint of a cute kid. :)
Comment Written 08-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2013
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And, it's also the letter right before Z. Thanks for reading.
Comment from poet.wayne
LOVED this! So so believable thoughts- prayers really- from a seven year old! The innocence in his every word is exactly what Jesus said we adults must strive for! So heart warming!
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2013
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LOVED this! So so believable thoughts- prayers really- from a seven year old! The innocence in his every word is exactly what Jesus said we adults must strive for! So heart warming!
Comment Written 08-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2013
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Well thank you very much. I don't think I trespassed or offended anyone here. Peter still believes in God.
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Personally I don't worry if my views offend anyone- I'm still sharing them! I have to answer to my God at the end of the day! I read views I don't agree with, but just that fact alone will never cloud my judgment of the quality of a piece of writing. Open mindedness is essential in reviewing, I believe!
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You are, unfortunately an exception, but it generally mirrors my own views.
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I think closed minds keep people from truly learning! I also believe that exposing myself to other views helps me to sharpen my understanding of exactly what I do believe!
Comment from l.raven
OMG What a wonderful wonderful write. I so loved reading this story about the little boy praying to God about his grandmother. And the picture is perfect. Loved this..
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2013
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OMG What a wonderful wonderful write. I so loved reading this story about the little boy praying to God about his grandmother. And the picture is perfect. Loved this..
Comment Written 08-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2013
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Thanks, it was one of those stories that was a lot of fun to write.
Comment from Cumbrianlass
I'm laughing. This was a funny post.
Do you think Grandma's gone cookoo? - cuckoo
She got a little cookoo - ditto.
Is your real name Art? The poem starts with 'our father, who art in heaven.' - LOL! Excellent.
You know, like trying to hide cauliflower in with mashed potatoes(?).
Do you think it would be okay if I changed the ending to Aboy? - HAHAHA!
Still laughing.
:D
I pray to Art that you do well in the contest.
Av
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2013
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I'm laughing. This was a funny post.
Do you think Grandma's gone cookoo? - cuckoo
She got a little cookoo - ditto.
Is your real name Art? The poem starts with 'our father, who art in heaven.' - LOL! Excellent.
You know, like trying to hide cauliflower in with mashed potatoes(?).
Do you think it would be okay if I changed the ending to Aboy? - HAHAHA!
Still laughing.
:D
I pray to Art that you do well in the contest.
Av
Comment Written 07-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2013
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And I pray to Harold, as in Harold, is thy name, that I always laugh as much at my meanderings into a character's mindset as I do at some reviewers comments. Thank you very much.
Comment from sujo1964
From the mouths of babes. What a refreshing little poem, told from a child's view of the world. They are so innocent and inquisitive. You brought this out in this little boy. Well done.
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2013
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From the mouths of babes. What a refreshing little poem, told from a child's view of the world. They are so innocent and inquisitive. You brought this out in this little boy. Well done.
Comment Written 07-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2013
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Thank you. As a mother of a grown son, and grandmother of one, who reminds me all the time about how it was and how it is, thank you.
Comment from Evelyn Fort Stewart
Oh this is really cute in every way and I can just picture such a thing happening. Children have such honest hearts. Great job. God loves you and I do too.
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2013
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Oh this is really cute in every way and I can just picture such a thing happening. Children have such honest hearts. Great job. God loves you and I do too.
Comment Written 07-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2013
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Thanks so much for reading.
Comment from judiverse
This is a delight, and best of luck in the contest. Grandma sounds like a wonderful person, and I enjoyed the response to the child's question Why? when she wouldn't let him have the toys. She said Y is the letter right after X. The language and thinking sound typical for a seven year old. Great take on the Lord's Prayer. Wondering if God's first name is Art and asking for Wonder Bread instead of brown bread that Grandma gives him. Great story. judi
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2013
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This is a delight, and best of luck in the contest. Grandma sounds like a wonderful person, and I enjoyed the response to the child's question Why? when she wouldn't let him have the toys. She said Y is the letter right after X. The language and thinking sound typical for a seven year old. Great take on the Lord's Prayer. Wondering if God's first name is Art and asking for Wonder Bread instead of brown bread that Grandma gives him. Great story. judi
Comment Written 07-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2013
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Thanks. I admit to having fun while writing this.
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You're welcome, and good luck with it. judi
Comment from Craigitar
Very well written, cute and humorous little story. I love the innocent irreverence as the little boy talks to "Art". Great job and luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2013
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Very well written, cute and humorous little story. I love the innocent irreverence as the little boy talks to "Art". Great job and luck with the contest.
Comment Written 07-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2013
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Thanks so much. I actually was going to expand this if I had a more generous word allowance. We would have questioned whether his real name was Art or Harold (as in-Harold is my name) but 500 words filters through the keystrokes too quickly when you begin to write a story you like yourself.
Comment from angelface2
This does sound like a child trying to say the Our Father. the line about cauliflower, should say... trying to mix mashed caul.. I think. Otherwise it is good. Miss Sally
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2013
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This does sound like a child trying to say the Our Father. the line about cauliflower, should say... trying to mix mashed caul.. I think. Otherwise it is good. Miss Sally
Comment Written 07-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2013
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You're right. I've already changed the sentence. Thank you.
