Final Goodbye
Couple meet for the last time.19 total reviews
Comment from ann marie mazz
a very heartwarming story for certain
and yes
the twist at the end makes for a wonderful read and imagination with openings and possibilities for continuance
for I thought it was going to be justin to leave when it was sarah
the wonderful continuance would be to expand on justin
thank you for sharing
it was a pleasure to read
ann marie
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2013
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a very heartwarming story for certain
and yes
the twist at the end makes for a wonderful read and imagination with openings and possibilities for continuance
for I thought it was going to be justin to leave when it was sarah
the wonderful continuance would be to expand on justin
thank you for sharing
it was a pleasure to read
ann marie
Comment Written 02-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2013
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Thank you very much for the incredible review and the nice comments. Gretchen.
Comment from marycec
Concise dialogue but very moving encounter as she says her final farewell to her loved one.Os this a one off piece ,Gretchen?
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2013
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Concise dialogue but very moving encounter as she says her final farewell to her loved one.Os this a one off piece ,Gretchen?
Comment Written 01-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2013
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I am still deciding how far to go with this. I would like to pursue it, but scripting is a totally different ball game. LOL. Thank you for the great review. Gretchen
Comment from amahra
Oh, that was so sweet. You really fooled me. I thought he was the spirit. How wonderful. I loved the descriptive images you gave for the sky and the figure shrouded in white.
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2013
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Oh, that was so sweet. You really fooled me. I thought he was the spirit. How wonderful. I loved the descriptive images you gave for the sky and the figure shrouded in white.
Comment Written 31-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2013
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Thank you for the great review. Gretchen
Comment from adewpearl
Good stage directions
Effective dialogue that conveys well the intense emotions of both characters and shows their strong relationship well
A moving ending as Sarah realized she needs to move on to her eternal life, separated for a while from her loving husband
Brooke
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2013
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Good stage directions
Effective dialogue that conveys well the intense emotions of both characters and shows their strong relationship well
A moving ending as Sarah realized she needs to move on to her eternal life, separated for a while from her loving husband
Brooke
Comment Written 31-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2013
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Thank you for the great review. Gretchen
Comment from Curtis Hatch
Gretchen,
The script is outstanding as is the story it tells. The dialogue is excellent, and the descriptive narrative is as well. I did not see the end coming until I got there.
Curtis
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2013
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Gretchen,
The script is outstanding as is the story it tells. The dialogue is excellent, and the descriptive narrative is as well. I did not see the end coming until I got there.
Curtis
Comment Written 31-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2013
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Thank you for reading and the great review. Much appreciated. Gretchen
Comment from Titanx9
There're definitely great feelings and emotions in this one; however, I was a little confused over Justin's mortality. I thought he was the one left behind and Sarah was going to the great beyond, but if she looks back at him, does that mean he's in the place way below? I didn't think that could be because if he was in "that" place, I don't think he'd be smiling. It's a very engaging piece. I'm sorry if I didn't exactly get it.
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2013
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There're definitely great feelings and emotions in this one; however, I was a little confused over Justin's mortality. I thought he was the one left behind and Sarah was going to the great beyond, but if she looks back at him, does that mean he's in the place way below? I didn't think that could be because if he was in "that" place, I don't think he'd be smiling. It's a very engaging piece. I'm sorry if I didn't exactly get it.
Comment Written 30-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2013
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Sarah and the shrouded figure have gone on to the great beyond. I just leave the scene with Justin on the hillside looking towards heaven with a smile on his face. Thank you for the great review and sorry it wasn't clear to you. I will try to work on that. Gretchen
Comment from Rosalyne
Hi GWHARGIS,
Your script is beautifully written and pulls the reader in right from the start. I really liked the line," Her fingers go through his image. Justin starts to fade, as does the hillside and the sky." This sums up your play so well.
Bye
Rosalyne
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2013
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Hi GWHARGIS,
Your script is beautifully written and pulls the reader in right from the start. I really liked the line," Her fingers go through his image. Justin starts to fade, as does the hillside and the sky." This sums up your play so well.
Bye
Rosalyne
Comment Written 30-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2013
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Thank you for the wonderful review. Gretchen
Comment from GaryCecil
I enjoyed this immensely. You have created a wonderful little scene, that is for sure.
I liked the interactions between the two characters, Sarah and Justin.
They felt believable, and along with great dialogue, the piece flowed wonderfully.
Great work. I did not find any mistakes. :)!
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2013
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I enjoyed this immensely. You have created a wonderful little scene, that is for sure.
I liked the interactions between the two characters, Sarah and Justin.
They felt believable, and along with great dialogue, the piece flowed wonderfully.
Great work. I did not find any mistakes. :)!
Comment Written 30-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2013
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Thank you for the great review and the nice comments. - Gretchen
Comment from writerwish
Great descriptions here. I felt like I was here with you. The narrative so romantic and well done. Realistic in content and feelings. Thank you for sharing this beauty.
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2013
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Great descriptions here. I felt like I was here with you. The narrative so romantic and well done. Realistic in content and feelings. Thank you for sharing this beauty.
Comment Written 30-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2013
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Thank you for the excellent review. Gretchen
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
Oh, this is so sad - I know nothing about
scripts, but am glad I read it - well written
and your words painting the scene.
Margaret
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2013
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Oh, this is so sad - I know nothing about
scripts, but am glad I read it - well written
and your words painting the scene.
Margaret
Comment Written 30-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2013
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Thank you for the great review. I really appreciate it. Gretchen
